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GaleWind


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(MLP x Fallout x Mad Max)

It's never easy living out here.

One day your out scavenging, shifting through the dirt and digging in the ground for parts and remnants of the past, trying to make a living. The next, you're dragged into an unknown battle where everything you hold close is on the line.

We use machines, of old and new, to help in our lives and our battles. The road we all travel is long with twists and turns. Some of us stop along the way while others keep going until they finally stop. My beginning was less than easy and to keep going probably won't be easy.

Where will this road take me? ...I'll let you know when I get there.

(This is my first Fallout Equestria fic.)
(I own nothing save for the characters. The world was created by the talented Kkat.)

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 7 )

Well now it has to go wrong, that's just the logic of the wasteland.

And good story, keep up the good work.

Next update? Soon please. It's good.

Interesting concept. This is the first time I've seen someone try to merge the FoE and Mad Max universes into a coherent fanfic. I look forward to reading more of it. :twilightsmile:

I do have some small, nitpicky things to point out. I swear this is just to help though. Someone did the same thing for me in my new fic.

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His blue eyes looked back at him as a reflection.

I don't know what was trying to be said here.

You know how Soup Can gets when somepony insults her cooking?...

Besides, I don’t see having whiskey with my breakfast, is a good mix?

These show up near each other. They shouldn't be questions, they should end in a period.

“Princesses of the sun and moon, watch over this pony as he is about to depart.” I prayed and said the next part in another language. “<Ancestors, watch over and guide me on my journey>.”

What's the other language? If the story is from Aero's point of view, the reader should know the name of the language just like Aero does.

Walking up, I undo the clasps and open it.

Undo should be undid. You slipped into present tense here.

‘Got it!’ was all I shouted as I walked out the store and made my way to the motor pool.

"Got it!" should be in quotation marks. 'Got It!' implies thought, not speech.

A couple years ago, I found the remains of a mostly intact, old bombing chariot. Hauling it back took some time but when I did, it was time to work.

The cloud engine was scrapped and the bar that connected the two parts was snapped in half on one side. I took off pieces of the paneling and welded the two parts together. I built a roof above it to cover the top and added doors to the sides and back.

I modified the chassis with some spare parts and added rubber wheels salvaged from the desert. Moving and converting the engine system and placing in a gear system took months of trial and error but I finally did it. Throw in some seats and a steering wheel, a coat of dark blue paint and the ‘Sky Runner’ was born. It was lighter and faster than the others but could take some hits.

These should probably be turned into one paragraph. As I read this part I mistook the work he had done already as what Aero was doing at this point of the story. Making it into one paragraph makes it easier to understand that this work has already been done.

Also, if the Sky Runner was a converted bombing chariot, wouldn't it already have some form of steering mechanism?

This is a really good story and I hope for it to continue:twilightsmile:

But there was minor grammatical errors and misspellings, but otherwise a good and engaging story, I also see you took inspiration from Mad Max the game

(MLP x Fallout x Mad Max)

Does this mean there will be a characters based off of Immortan Joe?

7850749 Wait, I thought Mad Max was a movie.

7850955 There is also a game, you should easily be able to find it on youtube

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