This my first attempt at writing a fic.
During the war between Princess Celestia and Nightmare Moon, a young solar stallion general, Burst Spear, joined the side of the night. Cornered by the sun princess herself, she casts a curse on him, sealing him in stone unitl nightmare moon is gone.
After a 1,000 years, Burst Spear is given a second chance at life but, will history repeat itself to haunt him or will the truth be revealed and tell what happened on that fateful night.
I do not own MLP. It belongs to its rightful owners and creators
Chapters (7)
Hydra rape
2347666 Really
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Yes.
2347745 Got any tips on changing the text color
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There's a button in the top bar that looks like a color wheel.
So I can make a sentence look like this.
Or make the text really big
2347850 thanks
By the way, type out what you want that color, highlight it, and then select the color.
Or else you just get this
instead of this
2347888 I tried but i don't know how the wheel works
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Type out a word.
Word.
Now, highlight word.
Then, you go over to the colorful circle, and you click on it. A small assortment of colors will appear.
Click on which color you want word to be. In this instance, it will be cyan.
Word.
Also make sure that the front of the command and end are on the same line, or it won't work.
word won't work
Word. will work. I can't show this one or else it changes color.
Can anyone out there come up with a story image.
!!! WHAT IS THIS I SEE BEFORE ME
Well written and executed chapter!
Ok, the hydra fight earlier screamed "look at how good my OC is" but I got through that. He is supposed to be someone useful enough to blackmail into switching sides during a war. Ok, that's fine. But…
This irks me, bad. Why do this? Having him take a few tries before being good at applebucking wouldn't have killed him. I can only hope there's some plot based reason for it ahead or I'm gonna be a sad panda…
2382948 I wasn't trying to but, he fights while standing on his rear hooves. So he must have power in them to keep his balance and move, which results in a powerful kick.
2382988 But it's not just about the power of the kick. It's about hitting the tree in the right spot with an acceptable range of force to shake loose the most apples without unnecessary damage to the tree and the apples they are collecting. AJ's been on the farm most of her life and has been bucking the trees for years, she knows them very well. Burst Spear would have to learn the right spot and amount of force for each individual tree.
2383086 This is my first time so i do'nt know all the aspects of how they applebuck
I just finished reading through all the chapters available so far, and I'm not really sure what to make of this story. The story itself has a really good premise: We already had Aegis Shield cover the question of "What would happen if a good guy was encased in stone for 1000 years?", and this asks the question "What would happen if a "bad guy" (note the quotes) was encased in stone for 1000 years?". However, there is some stuff that really confuses me.
I'm not really sure how to ask this question, so I'll just come right out with it: How is everybody so happy? What I mean is, he comes back after being encased in stone, and he doesn't seem particularly pissed off very much, and Celestia & Luna don't seem to be too surprised or concerned. Maybe I'm just not reading into it enough.
The apple bucking moment is also interesting: I can definitely see him being strong enough to knock all of the apples off of the tree in one go. However, maybe his buck should have also knocked a hole in the tree: He would definitely have the strength, but maybe not the fine-grained control necessary to avoid destroying the tree.
Regardless of my complaining, and for all of my amateurish ranting, this has my interest, and in a positive way (not in a "I will follow this so I can keep thinking of ways to complain" way). Keep writing, and good luck!
You got my full attention in this story. Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next chapter.
apple sword ...
really?
