Okay first off me not happy. My dates are freaking out, there is an invasion of Canterlot, and this Queen Creepy is trying to mind hack me like she did the groom.
Worst Day Ever.!
But worst of all Is 3 thousand changling that want me to beat up their queen.
WHAT THE HECK IS GOING ON!!
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Emoticon in description ugh no thanks
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You may want to find an editor.
*looks at actual text*
Make that definitely want.
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I am partial to Chang's Mongolian Grill myself.
other then the many spelling errors this is interesting
yes I have many spelling errors I'm not good but I'm trying.
I vote form 2.
form 1 looks to much like queen chrysalis.
form 2 looks more like nature.
jaykar That is what I think as wall.
this is way better.
I can read anything, but I can't spell to save my life, so I drive my family mad asking them how to spell anything.
maybe a proof reader would be a good idea.
it's good continute
6261052 Why is this on hiatus it's a really good concept add that to the fact that there isn't really many good changeling stories out there and you have my attention.
Now to read it.
I don´t really like that she has suddenly hundred of friends,....I would like to see as much as possible at how they start to be friends.
If I´m right, and Nightmare Moon didn´t happened yet, then I don´t understand why Rainbow Dash already thinks, she would have to be careful, it isn´t like she would knew that she had to look for bad guys already.
Maybe you rushed this chapter a little bit, at least the part after Twilight saw them, could have played out a little bit slower I guess.
I like your character, and I don´t know how the Changelings in your story work, but even with the love she is probably already getting from Fluttershy and the others, I´m not sure if she isn´t a bit to strong.
However, what I really want to say is, that you maybe should not make her the one, that has an answer for everything. I thought she was in some sort of Queen training, and isn´t already one of the strongest being ever. However like I said, what I think could get bad later, is that she is better than everyone right now, and it looked like she even wanted to take Twilights part in the story completely.
Did you really meant Beans right there?
I could really believe it, if you would say it, because Mare of the nature right?^^
Well I guess you meant beams.
I think the thing with an own amulet for her was a bit to much, I mean yes, I could probably even like it, however she already looks so strong. I guess as long as she doesn´t get more power because of that it should be okay.
The last one? I think Twilights was the last one, Rose´s amulet, should be a "new" element of harmony. I´m no english expert, at least not in grammar, but I believe that would be right.
Well this is not a bad point, but how does she know about Luna? How old is she?, or how much did her parent´s told her?
So I believe it means, that she is telling the main six about herself too in a few chapters right?
Even if it was a long chapter, I still think some things happened to fast, and you rushed it a bit, usually there are storys with two, or even five chapters about this episode. I think you should not rush anything, only for the sake to reach a certain point in your story.
However I still think it is a good story, and even if you should decide to make her really strong, I think I could start to accept it, since it looks like she is a Changeling, that is getting all the love she needs to be as strong as she was. I would like it, if you would let the other characters, have their moments too, don´t let Rose do everything, I actually thought you would even let her give the sea serpant something.
2, and PLEASE get an editor! This stuff is hardly readable. Just ask somebody if they would edit for you! Please!
Are you still updating?
Story is awesome by the way 
form 2, this is A good start to this story cep it up
YES UPDATE PLZS ORE IL BE SAD
hello 6267344 question the queen is the mother of all workers in the hive?
7513824 yes in a normal hive but this is one that broke off thousand Years ago so now most changelings have parents and only the queen can have Royal Changeling hope this helps clear that.
I would like to have a new chapter please.
Can you do more
I like the story cant wait for the next chapter
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that what i thoughtas well form 1 look to much chrysalis
Why is it always the good stories that are canceled or forgotten this was a very good story you should continue it or found somebody who will