Fallout Equestria: Happy Birthday

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Boo-the-Ling

Boo-the-Ling #1 · May 30th, 2015 · · ·

Wow. Eleven downvotes and not a single comment explaining why... Normally I would be turned off from reading such a thing, however I am curious if the downvotes are because of the source material or because you made a clop fic of such. Tell you what I will give It a chance and get back with you on that.

Ok...as far as clop goes taking out the FO:E might have helped. It kinda like the guy that tried to make a Past Sins clop, the source story is so good that clop seems like an injustice. As for the clop itself, you kinda have it crunched together with a fast build up and no real substance. Honestly i have read troll fics with better clop. I didn't notice any real spelling or grammer errors but that might not mean much as I'm not an editor type. (I did a quick double check and did find that using the first person PoV you were mixxing up your past and present tense in a few places)

I will give you kudos for the attempt but... As beloved as FO:E is as well as how beloved the characters are... You would have been better using your own OC or the Normal MLP verse.

Phaedra

Phaedra #2 · May 30th, 2015 · · ·

6035566 Sorry, I just got here. But thanks for reviewing this thing for me.

HagalazVA

HagalazVA #3 · May 30th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Pip hates dicks.
Even dildos. It's canon.

Merchent343

Merchent343 #4 · May 30th, 2015 · 2 · ·

It might have been good had you actually provided a decent story to go along with it, written decent clop (I could churn out better in five minutes of effort), and actually put any sort of work into this. As it stands, I cannot help but downvote. It conflicting with FO:E canon is one thing; Being utterly horrible at doing so is unforgivable.

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