This needs more comments and good support, hopefully being featured will grant that. Congratulations by the way.

A nice solid intro, good work.

Celestia had broken free of her temporary prison and was most likely training the Element bearers at this very moment.

This line is hilarious. It may be true as far as this story goes...but there's nothing in show that indicates she gave any of the bearers special training, save Twilight...and even she seems to be lacking in any sort of combat ability, which probably contributed to her being unable to beat Starlight, even as an alicorn.

Really it was just 'There's the bad guy, 'sic em girls!' And sometimes she didn't even give them the Elements either.

Twilight Sparkle… Fluttershy… Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Applejack!

Is this a mistake, or on purpose, cause I don't see Pinkie Pie in here? I don't mean to sound rude or anything, I'm just being curious. Unless this takes place in an AU where she isn't there…?

Wait, what. (I'm confusing myself here, sorry.)

Very interesting story! I wish I had half this imagination. I've wanted to write a longer story for forever.

Nightmare Moon pondering whether or not to eat cookies is amusing
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There's the bad guy, 'sic em girls!

The mental animation I procured from that quote reminds me of the power ponies episode

7552762 Oh god, it's been a year and I never noticed that! Thank you so much for pointing that out.

I wonder when the Human tag will come into play...

are there humans in this story or are the ponies human?

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There are humans, but they don't appear until later chapters.

Oi, wait. This was your first story? This is like, top quality stuff.

So this unicorn is practicing her weird form of jogging in the freaking Everfree Forest, instead of literally any other place, during the late evening/night; and the moment she hears a suspicious sound, she approaches it instead of, you know, jogging the hell away from there.

Just throw the freaking snake at her. Noone this monumentally stupid deserves to live.