Clash of Brothers

Tirek moments away from victory now sees an obstical in his path...Scorpan, and he begins wondering why? Why is he fighting him? Why is he here, face to face with him. What is he going on about?

Scorpan realizes that now is the time, he has come to the realization that he must stop his brother before all is lost.

(Pre-Canon)

Cover Art by Oak Sabletwist

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cobystones234

cobystones234 #1 · May 16th, 2015 · · ·

trust me it hasn't bombed that bad check out my story.http://www.fimfiction.net/story/246208/the-guardians

CreatureofTheNight

CreatureofTheNight #2 · May 16th, 2015 · · ·

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Yeah, I'm starting to think that was a bad idea. My grammar isn't the best but I think the main problem was I thought there was an easy way for the two perspectives. Upon re-reading it...I should have don't what I should have done for all the other villains which was One Perspective. My thought was that because of what I was referencing (Which had a two character perspective) That this would need one as well. I was wrong. In fact even though I can follow it just fine, I realized that it can be a bit off putting to another reader...Thank you for giving me a review and I will try to remember this mistake. Bright side I now have a new "Worst Thing I've ever wrote on FIM.net" which means I can stop hating on Unholy Union which I couldn't stand but plenty of people loved it...

CreatureofTheNight

CreatureofTheNight #3 · May 16th, 2015 · · ·

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Coincidences :D They are fun.

The story is meant to be first person however. That's the point of the POV Reference Series. However, I do see your point...this story kinda NEEDED to be in the Third Person because the flow would be much much better

CreatureofTheNight