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Based on the description, I can see you need to learn about capitalization.

Comment posted by cobystones234 deleted Apr 29th, 2015

5919554 Alright I will try to fix that but other than that what did you think about the story?

5921296
Didn't read it. When I see stories with such obvious errors in the description, I point 'em out and I move on.

5921797 Look I fixed it just read it please. I feel bad enough as it is.

5921875 I like the idea behind it but there are.... major flaws, grammer included, and I dont think this is the read for me. I would still continue and write for youself. I tend to write stories(or at least the rough draft) and give some of my peers a chance to run through them. I hope this, and no one else, discourages your flow and look forward to your inprovement.

-Your Artifical Alicorn, SilentStorm.

5975962 Both. I would love to point them out but my phone hates to copy and paste. I would recommend finding a editor and proof reader if possible. Your discriptions could be in depth a bit more as well.

5975978 whats weird is I have a editor and I have used him on the first chapter.

5975978 also if you could like the story that would help

5976003 I already did. I would tell him , or her, to pick up the slack. But as I said before, love the idea.

5976012 I hope you will continue to read the story as I go along with it.

5976027 I will put it under my Read later. Look forward to it.

This seems to be promising, to quote the council of nations- We will be watching

5978105 and tell the council that ill be watching them.

5979595 I offered no ill-will. Like before, I just seen some flaws. The other guy just judged and left. Also, he was a major dick. I look forward to the story and possibly revisions in the future.



P.S the bit about the horses. priceless:rainbowlaugh:

way to op... but I think I like this story:twilightsmile:

6690050 thanks what do like about it the most.

6690197 badass humans, physically impossible monsters, badass badassery, and humans in equestria...
so in essence, everything:moustache:

6690960 its nice to know that im doing something right.

6690960 the new chapter is out to see. check it out when you get a chance.

Awesome chapters you are doing a amazing job. I can't wait to read the next chapter.:pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

6954222 I've started already I don't know when I'll get the next one out.

.......Do you even understand the usage of .50 sniper rifles?
They are anti-MATERIAL rifles, not anti-PERSONNEL rifles.
Also, there is no such thing as a silencer, and it would do fuck all on a gun chambered for .50.

6993020 they were using them because they didn't know what they were going up against also I am going to work on the first chapter to fix some problems with that. Also they are inventors and they had the help of magic to fix the sound problem. A future chapter is going to help explain how this works. Besides the .50 rifle problems how do you like it?

Comment posted by Nick11235 deleted Mar 21st, 2016
Comment posted by cobystones234 deleted Mar 29th, 2016
Comment posted by Nick11235 deleted Mar 21st, 2016

I say the story is coming along great, one can tell how much effort goes into it.


P.S. Don't feel rushed to get the next chapter out because we can wait.

What is this a crossover with?

How are you blending this adventure, with the canterlot wedding ? This story is just so AWESOME !!!!

Cant wait for the next chapter cause this story is EPIC!!!!!

7146155 This story is crossed over with a whole bunch of things. All I can say is what ever I add to it just depends on what I was watching or reading when I wrote the chapter.

7146242 wait until I get past the wedding.

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The only way to describe the cave scene.

7205442 sorry I cant see the picture.

7206988 Oh sorry, I put in the link wrong it was supposed to say that it was magical.
Should work now.

P.S. Sorry for not responding sooner, stuff has been crazy for me lately.

When is the next chapter coming out?

Finally we get to the point of the first chapter cant wait for the next one :pinkiehappy: :twilightsmile:

Oh man, can't wait for the next chap.

You should make this song the combat song for Stones and Tyrock.

7260765 cliff hanger. Makes it so people keep reading.

7264084 thanks that sound just right for them.

7270281 Glad i could help its also my favorite song

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