• Member Since 17th Dec, 2014
  • offline last seen Apr 20th, 2019

Lord Midnight


I am the one who will shower the world in ponies and show all eternity to be in truth a single second within the wrath of time!

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Coyote is a human, mostly. He shares his body with the soul of a demon. Over the years, he has had many adventures and finally got sick of the constant fighting and exploring. After deciding to spend a life as a normal human, he winds up discovering the most addictive thing in the world; ponies. Now a human with a unique power has come to him with an offer. He gets to go to Equestria, she gets to write his story and post it to increase her ever growing popularity. He agrees in a heartbeat and sets out to enjoy a new adventure. How will the ponies react to a whole new ancient incendiary evil unleashed on their world intent on making friends and playing games with the continuum?

This story is part of, and the origin of the Aurora Verse

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Comments ( 31 )

....This is a special kind of awful you don't normally see.

Protip: don't put the cart before the horse. Before going all-in and deciding your new "verse" (which is still one of the cringiest terms this site has ever produced), make sure that it might be something people want to read first, as you might have sub-par results in expanding it otherwise.

5760111 Thank you for your opinion, but you can kindly keep it to yourself. No one here on FiMFic is here to write whatever story YOU like. We are here as authors, and creators. We do not beckon to your every need and call. In our mind, our stories play out. Who are you to tell us our ideas are awful? They may not be a good fit for you, but there are people who thoroughly enjoy works like this. Keep that in mind before you go around, blatantly calling someone's work awful. Just give it a thumbs down, and leave.

But for anyone who wants to give actual feedback, we very much welcome it. We enjoy feedback, and learning how to improve our stories and help them grow. How to word things better, what we might have missed as far as background information. Thanks for reading, everyone.

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Oh I love these kinds of comments. Lets take a look at yours shall we?

Thank you for your opinion, but you can kindly keep it to yourself.

Well since the comment you did is your opinion shouldn't you keep it to yourself. Kinda backfires doesn't it?

No one here on FiMFic is here to write whatever story YOU like.

There's plenty of people that do commissions.

We are here as authors, and creators.

I beg your pardon. There's tons of people who aren't authors or creators. For example, this guy.

Who are you to tell us our ideas are awful?

Here's a list of why they are able to.

-They've been here longer.
-They're more successful.
-They're more experienced.

Plus the like to dislike ratio speaks for itself.

They may not be a good fit for you, but there are people who thoroughly enjoy works like this

Apparently only six people.

Keep that in mind before you go around, blatantly calling someone's work awful.

With good reason mind you.

Just give it a thumbs down, and leave.

Pretty sure that's what they did, except they left a comment too. Like me.

But for anyone who wants to give actual feedback, we very much welcome it.

I'm totally counting this as feedback. Maybe I'll see how well of an editing job you've done, but this is counting for now.

We enjoy feedback, and learning how to improve our stories and help them grow.

Apparently not 5760111's.

How to word things better, what we might have missed as far as background information.

Credit where it's due. You're welcome.

Thanks for reading, everyone.

I haven't even read it, but yeah, you're welcome.

What's this? An overly powerful self-insert HiE story? Wow, that's never been done before!


Edit after attempting to read this... thing:

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To follow up on Elric's comment…

Without reading, I can easily give 4 reasons why this story won't be successful.
1) obvious self-insert is obvious
2) generic HiE is generic
3) one story in, and you are ready to declare a 'verse. The reason stories like Fo:E have their own 'verse is because there are so many ways for other authors to write into it. This story just ain't popular enough yet to warrant that.
4) self-insert is an invincible demon with superpowers and a romance tag.i0.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/520/691/c9a.png

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Thank you for your opinion, but you can kindly keep it to yourself

Why should he? This is a public website and he can freely post any comment that he feels to (that doesn't break any federal laws, I.e child porn).

No one here on FiMFic is here to write whatever story YOU like.

Ever hear of commissions? They were very popular in the Middle Ages with artists who got huge ass chunks of money (at least the best ones did). One of the best writers on the site IMO does them (Rated Ponystar).

We are here as authors, and creators.

There are people here who haven't writens stories, and there are people here who just signed up to only read stories. Have you ever thought of that?

Who are you to tell us our ideas are awful?

We are people who have more experience, know more about writing, and or are tired of seeing the same shit over and over again.

But for anyone who wants to give actual feedback

I'm confused. What he said was actual feedback and really didn't seem mean, or even harsh. So to you is actual feedback kissing the authors ass? That's the kind of vibe that you're sending me.

Thanks for reading, everyone.

You're not welcome

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You basically said what I said.

5761603 I was just trying to pound it into our little white knight's head

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I like your thinking.

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At least there are a few of us who will take a stand against stupidity.
Stupidity Stoppers, Assemble!
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5761670 Present, sir!

5761742 Listening to a video on the secrets of FNAF. Parents are out on account of my mothers birthday, sir!

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Those secrets are hereby classified Sargent, let none into the enemies' hoofs. Don't party too hard, Sargent! Also, HQ sends a Happy Birthday to your mother.

5761757 Sir, yes, sir!

It was BS anyway… sir!

5760969

Thank you for your opinion, but you can kindly keep it to yourself.

Which is probably why you're going to spend the next two, long paragraphs contradicting yourself, right?

No one here on FiMFic is here to write whatever story YOU like.

What, you mean like stories that are good?

We are here as authors, and creators.

Yes? And?

We do not beckon to your every need and call.

Not shitty-characters and not-done-to-death stories would be nice, though.

In our mind, our stories play out.

That's not your decision to make. If you're the only person who would understand or even have a feeling towards your story that's more than the average brainfart, then you came to the wrong place to post your shit. We come here to read stories, not your incoherent, self-gratifying jack-off psychobabble.

Who are you to tell us our ideas are awful?

A four-time featured author with over twenty times more followers than you and your friend combined. But go on, continue! I'm actually quite entertained by the notion of being talked down by a two-month old user with cotton-candy skin.

They may not be a good fit for you, but there are people who thoroughly enjoy works like this.

And they are the people that the intelligent and artistically skilled laugh at and pity, but mostly laugh at.

Keep that in mind before you go around, blatantly calling someone's work awful.

I can't. I suffer from seizures from keeping unfiltered dipshittery in my head for too long.

Just give it a thumbs down, and leave.

No. Merely giving a thumbs down gives the author no hints nor tips of improvement, and it only leaves them either blissfully or perplexingly unaware of their shortcomings. Regardless, they're unaware, and that's not good... at all.

But for anyone who wants to give actual feedback, we very much welcome it. We enjoy feedback, and learning how to improve our stories and help them grow. How to word things better, what we might have missed as far as background information.

Except you clearly don't, because if we told you how to improve your story (namely the shitty, cliched plot, shitty, stupid characters, and shitty writing style), that would clearly be us telling you what story we like, wouldn't it? :ajsmug: Wouldn't it? :ajsmug:

Thanks for reading, everyone.

You're most very unwelcome.

5760969

As for your editing skills. I'd say they match up to your experience on this site. Which is not much. In the first probably five or so paragraphs I saw at least fifteen mistakes. I'll go through some of this story and show you later.

5760969

Thank you for your opinion, but you can kindly keep it to yourself.

Fuck that noise. If you can't even abide by your own words then what right do you have to tell others how to behave? Here's the problem, everybody has an opinion. And neither you nor anybody else has a monopoly on the truth.

The problems with this story are manifold, not the least of which is having a totally edgy protagonist who is also a self-insert and Gary Stu. That right there should be the kiss of death to any story and yet we get them constantly on this site. And along with them we get the many white knights that seem to think that we should all play nice, never say a bad word and if any criticism is given it must be of the most gentle and polite variety.

Well, until the day that you run a site and can dictate terms to everybody, shut the fuck up because nobody cares.

“Can’t say that I am, I’m a human, sort of. Well somewhat at least. It’s complicated. I’m pretty sweet and people love my juices so maybe?”

This is fantastic. Absolutely amazing. Beyond the realm of human understanding, transcending the barriers of the human mind and reaching into something so much more.

Truly pushes the boundaries of human experience through sheer literary genius.

5803765 Dude get with the times, this game is over. Seriously I got bored and posted this crap two weeks ago. Actually no, strike that. How did you even come across it?

5937545 Huh, never expected this joke to actually go so far as to end up in groups for it. Then again this entire joke backfired horribly considering my editor took the one day she had that month to edit my stories to edit this against my will, leaving the poor hungry fans of my real stories with this borderline hiatus they are currently suffering.

5937545 It was fun though. Gary Stu, Bad Self-insert, Edgy, Carboard charectors. Hell I even took turning the HIE into a pony to a worse level by turning them into two ponies.:derpytongue2:

5937852 I mean, you did a great job! It was fucking terrible! :rainbowlaugh:

You deserve a cookie.

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Here we see the author on a failing damage control mission.i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/366/183/3c0.jpg

7578641 To be honest, I completely forgot about this thing. Thanks, seeing that random shot in the dark comment actually made me chuckle.

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