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GhostieToastie


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Vinyl Scratch is feeling hopelessly confused, until she meets Octavia. Vinyl cannot come to terms with the fact that she is in love with somepony, let alone a mare.
(Updated: I spaced the text out some more. Feedback?)

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 51 )

You, sir or madam, earn my respect. You are a FAR better romance writer than I. Lovin this story! :twilightsmile:

556517 Hats off to you. I've seen that image numerous times and it never gets old.

By the way, would you like an editor? It's just a big wall of text and nobody likes reading giant walls of text. Also, when somepony is saying something, put their words on a new line. This will help with the wall of text.

Good story so far. :twilightsmile:

556537
yes, please, break up that wall of text! I can't read it without my eyes glazing over, and I want to :P

556507
Thank you so much!
This is the first romance story I've ever written. ^-^'
I really appreciate the feedback, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story. :yay:

556537
I was trying to get all the ideas out of my head in a hurry last night, so when I was writing I did forget to space it all out.
If you'd be interested in spacing/editing the chapters to come for me, you're more than welcome to. ^-^'
Thank you so much for the feedback:yay:

This has always been my favorite ship. I love seeing the different ways I can be be done. So far, this one, other than the fact of who it's shipping, is unique, so far. :twilightsmile:

556858
Thank you!
I've always had some difficulty portraying Tavi's character in my mind,
So I can only hope to settle on her personality soon :3
Thank for the the feedback!:pinkiehappy:

556907
A *little* stuck up some times. But unbelievably cute also (to Vinyl). Her cello is apparently named "Alexander". After her father. I don't get it either. That's just what I've heard. When Vinyl gets at her, Octie responds positively, in other fics I've read.

It was good, but short. keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

Okay, now that this was spaced out (though it could still use some work), I've actually given it a read... it's intriguing :) on to chapter 2!

:derpyderp2:Second and epic chapter cant wait for the next one

Could you give it proper spacing, please? There should be a blank line between the paragraphs. Makes it infinitely easier to read.

this story is great and ocs are better in stories cause at rave scenes its always lyra or bonbon or berry punch but its very rare to see oc's good job

I really can't wait to see how this ends up in the morning :rainbowlaugh:
Morning after scenes are always fun

738833

They certainly make for an interesting start to the day~

XD, that's it definitely need more, god loved the ending.:pinkiehappy:

i knew it bad idea to get octavia drunk need more need more

739274
Some people need a little coaxing to show their feelings.. And I think alcohol was just what Tavi needed. :rainbowlaugh:

739187

Thank you!
More is now up,
Thanks for the feedback and I hope you enjoy it~

yay i was wondering what would happen nice chapter brohoof?/)

741034
woot yayayayayayayayayay

Huzzah! You did not disappoint with the scene and the building tension between the two is really fun to watch :pinkiegasp:

741629

Thank you very much~
I'm glad you're enjoying reading it as much as I am writing it! :twilightsmile:

Wow great chapter, good and powerful scene has a more realistic feel to it than most other "morning after" scenes in stories I have read well done I eagerly await more :pinkiehappy:

743457

Thank you so much!
That really means a lot~ :heart:

I hope to have more out tonight. (Which for me means like, 2 in the morning.)

Thanks for the feedback! :twilightsmile:

I kinda feel bad for vinyl... good chapters, cant wait for more!! :pinkiehappy:

>>GhostieToastie

but who knows? it might work out. lol. LOVE the way you wrote drunk tavi! it was priceless! :rainbowlaugh:

745080

We'll see~

Thank you!
That's based off one of my closest friends, who acts like that regularly.

>>GhostieToastie
oh i know how that is. my best friend acts like that all the time, but when she gets drunks she becomes more serious. its so weird.....

Vinyl is gonna starve the way this is oing. good job, by the way:pinkiehappy:

Can't wait for the next chapter! Hope it's out soon. :pinkiehappy:

I thought it funny because she was saying Ghostie, which could sound as just an affectionate version of "Ghost" (Me) and then somepony mentioned a Rose. I have an OC named Rosewood XD. So that was all very familiar. Up until I found out this "Ghostie" was a mare that is. So, I need to ask, figuring out that was supposed to be you, are you a Mare then? Pretty much every brony I meet are Stallions, and it would be interesting to talk to a Mare Brony.

Unless Vinyl wears her glasses to bed, You didn't seem to remember to do something with that when Octavia saw Vinyls eyes in the morning.

938552
I am indeed a female, and my OC is.. just a bolder image of myself.
I'm usually much quieter than that, but otherwise, I am pretty much just like that.
:twilightsmile:

MOAR!! Um... If that's not to much trouble... :fluttershysad:

Okay, I know what you are trying to do, but you just didn't really pull it off as well as you could have. Your attempt at "showing-not-telling" is a bit off, to where I understand you, but it still feels off. Consider editing and formatting these.

That speech from Octavia is too cheap. I'm done.

Vodka? Eeeeugh! I'm a whiskey kind of guy. Fireball, Jim Beam, or Kesslers

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