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There are some spelling errors in this story, but it does not detract from it at all. I want to see where this story is going and encourage you to keep at it!
5421309 Thanks. I do hope you enjoy the story
this entertained me for a good hour, thank you, this has promise, and if this updates constantly i can see myself loosing even more time to this story.
You need a editor.
5437570 Yeah I'm trying to get one but so far no luck. I need someone who also likes the same stuff as me so it's even harder to find. I hoping for 2 one to be a girl so when I write a girl in 1st person I have the right thought path because I want it to be quite accurate.
"Cole come on, we gotta get to the lesson." Jack said grabbing my arm and jerking. The sudden movement almost made me trip.
"Fuck off! It's only Cel. And we're watching a movie anyway." I said. We were meant to be watching an educational movie about the surfaces of different planets. I was always late to boring lessons like that. We didn't need them anyway, we had already finished our tests for the year.
"It's Miss Cel, Cole. Don't be so informal." Jack lectured. He was an A plus student in everything. Me myself, I was a A student in most lessons, but I didn't aim anywhere for myself.
"I'd wish you'd stop calling me that," he said.
We walked up to the door of what is our lesson. "Whatever we're here now!"
Jack leaned over to me and said." You really need to respect people more." He said in a stern tone.
Jack leaned over to me and said in a stern tone, "You really need to respect people more."
I won't bother spamming your comments section with the corrections, Gimmie a day and I'll send you a message with everything I've seen.
Hey now he can be with a human who's also a pony.
5461750 No there are 3 things inside his head if you've paid attention to the names and colors; theres Iris who is a red pegasus her olor is red, there is Lest who is human she is Pink and then there is dexter who is unknown right now but he's dark grey. Cole's a human fully
5462560 I ment celestia's human daughter
5463175 Oh what I mean is because she was raised by ponies she acts like them. So basically she may have the complexion of a human but shes pony inside
Yaay awesome yet gruesome, can't wait for the next chapter YEEAAGH!
5754020 Just the way i like it. The next chapter will be out soon
5764367 *grumbles to self* "...damn I've been reloading this page for a week now...I need a life, I NEED A CHAPTER!" *sob* *sob* *sob* *tear slides down cheek* *whispers* "please...."
please?...
5764367 you lied.
Keep going you can do it, do a drunken scene where dash and Cole do it and wake up together the next morning.
6134007 That sounds funny so I could do that. Do you want me to write the scene or keep it as gore only?
6135828 I'd do the sex scene, keep the gore as a flashback reference, like say he's about to stray from the path he needs to be on to save equestria then he thinks back to the deaths, then bring a small punt in over time. As a added bonus do a spoof scene where Cole gets a potion from zecora that turns him into a pony for Dash. Then have Dash ask Two to cast that species swap spell from S4 to turn her human for Cole. Set it up as if they were going on a date then finding out each others surprises.
Ready
"Guess I dying confused"
wat?
"Maybe because you waited guard for me to escape again"
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I loved that barney the dinosaur moment.
6157306 Well the sentence did well, shit also confused me to death
Great story so far.
Smiled when I saw 3 more chapters.
Wow good chapter! I wonder why this story was not listed as posted until now?
6242566 Thanks!