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After waking up in the night, Spike ends up being transported mysteriously into a strange, but familiar land, there he meets Steven Universe, a magical boy (half magic, from his mom's side) cool and nice with who becoming a good friend, he meets her friends, the Crystal Gems, a group of magical and powerful warriors that fighting against monsters and protect their world. Now stuck in this world, Spike must find a way to return to Equestria, but the more time Spike passes with Steven and the Crystal Gems, he begins to wonder if he wants to return to his old life in Equestria.
This is my first fanfic of My Little Pony and / or Steven Universe, so please, no destructive criticism, constructive criticism and suggestions are accepted; and I'm sorry if the grammar is awful, my english is bad and is very difficult for me to translate from the portuguese
Quick question is the romance with Spike an Steven? Or is it with Steven and Connie?
Great idea for a crack-fic; Spike eats one of them.
Okay, it looks like an interesting start. Though I would advise spacing your paragraphs more.
5387925 I'm really hoping it's the last one or at least between Spike and something female.
I would like to see how this goes
Before I read this....
My hope is far too high for this to be interesting....Prove me wrong so I can enjoy this to the fullest extent.
needs some work on the grammar and stuff... like that last line:
but otherwise, I can't wait for more
5387925 no, the Romance is with Spike and OC
Romance?
5391293 Yeah, why?
5391339 for the love of god not Steven and spike that is nightmare fuel
5391627 don't worry, will be SpikexOC
5387938 no, that's will never happen
the grammar is so bad
5450838
That was one sentence that should have been four or more.
Break 'em up man! Like in a newspaper, you keep them small so people aren't over whelmed by all the information you're giving them. Your story idea is great, but a good editor is worth their weight in gold.
part 2 now plz
How about Steven and the crystal gems meet the main six
7409503 Please read the Author's note
7409503 I had already thought of something, but I was in doubt whether I should just put Steven with Spike, Steven and just one of Crystal Gems or all together with Spike in this story arc. Besides that I am only now reconsidering back to writing this story, but I need an editor to correct any errors that may contain (either grammar error or continuation from either the cartoons).