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Okay, here we go.
5968687 The big finisher is almost ready. Are you?
5976208 thanks that means a lot to me I'm sure you'lll get around to it just let me know what you thought whenever you get to the new chapters. And Revised is the chapters that have been rewritten.
5977489 Well the fact you feel this story is as good as you say it's good and my best really means a lot to me. More than you can even imagine.
nice to start with them taking a like to Maud, but please try not to get them to distracted from Trixie.
What i mean is i had once read a story with Fluttershy, Rarity, and Applejack, in this story Rarity loved Fluttershy, but the moment she started to like Rainbow Dash she somehow ignored Fluttershy. I hope you know what i don´t want to happen.
So my honest opinion, the chapter where it looked like Twilight would rape Applejack, was probably rather risky as i said, but i trusted you to explain it good enough, and after i had read your comment, i was sure there didn´t happened anything.
You got me angry at first with the "rape-attempt" chapter, but right now i calmed down because of the last this and the last chapter, and well it is my ol favourite story again.
Honestly, it really looked like Twilight was going at it, it already looked like she started to buck?! Applejack. Maybe you have to change it a little bit, if you want others to believe Twilight had not already sex with Applejack in that chapter.
I know you only described how Twillight started to rub herself on her, but then i somehow understood that she started to have sex with her. (Maybe it was a poor atempt to translate that part, but maybe you want to look over it again.)