She hated life; she wanted to die. She was tired of being on Earth.
What she never knew, though, was that something was watching her. From the moments she would cut to the moments she would cry.
What happens when she decides that she is done? When she attempts suicide?
What could happen when a creature from a different world falls in love with you?
I just wanted to die; Why did I end up here?
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I like it. I suppose you should have a reason for Discord for wanting to save Scarlette, and why he's in the human world in the first place (then again, he is the master of chaos), or perhaps why he cares for Scarlette so much. Has he been watching her? Is it puppy love? I think this is good, but most of the time, small details can help with world building, and shows the signs of a high-quality story. Anyway, you've got a good beginning here, and I look forward to more
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Thank you, one for commenting, and two for the advice. I purposely left out his reasonings more so to leave room for imagination of the readers and to give more suspense to the story. His reasonings and such will come up later in the story...
But, Thank you, I appreciate the comment.
when i saw this in my group notifications i thought it was about that twist filly
5316172 No problem.
Happy to help.
It reminds me of a dark version of Labyrinth.
The exposition is way, way too slow.
a little longer chapters would be nice, but so far i like it.
Love him calling her sun butt, Sun Butt lover of all things cake!
Please continue.
wow... thats just making me reflect about how lucky I am to have a awesome family
This intrigues me
... Continue 
(waves hand dismissivly)
Twist had better be in this story or I'm gonna be dissapointed
you got my interest. continue.
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At least I can tell your trying (i think)
Some advice. don't use ( ) in a story it's very distracting.
Describe things more this story has exactly no description it feels like things pop into existence because the story willed them there to interact with.
Make the chapters longer nothing breaks immersion like having to click the next chapter button every two or three minutes.
otherwise this is a good attempt at a story but you still have alot to learn ^_^ good luck to you. also i suggest finding an editor even a friend who can look over what you have done and what's missing. it really helps trust me.
Honestly, I think that it is a very engaging story so far. There are a few grammar errors, and the flow is a little bit choppy, the story is very engaging. So overall, keep it up!
If you made this chapter a bit longer...
(I'm one to speak.
)
This story... Is amazing. I really want to see where this goes, and how Scarlette takes to everything. Just... Wow. The feelz, man
I love it. I feel your heart in it and that is what makes a story. The great writing doesn't hurt ether.
This story.......is utterly amazing! I love the writing, I love the way the characters act, I love it all! You deserve...a Derpy!
Interesting way to start.
Loving it! Can't wait for the next chapter
5569183 Dito, I've been waiting for like ever for a new chapter and now I think I have to wait some more for the next. UGH!
Pwease update soon! Parasprites ate all of my books...
How about Damien? Do you think it'd fit?
NO, HE SHOULD TELL HER HINAME IS 'discordiant, paradoxian, chaitica'!!!!!!!
5987959 Where'd you get Damien, I like it. Is it from that song "Your Heart"
(if you'd heard of it at least.) 
6002814 Actually, I was thinking of Satan's son in South Park, Damien Thorn, when I suggested it. But that's an interesting song.
RIP story
Did she just take cyanide pills