Good is good and bad is bad. But what if the Equestria that lives in harmony is not so good as it is made out, what if bad is good elsewhere and good in Equestria is...not so good?
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A few things.
One, keep that up with the visuals you're finding. It enhances the story in a way that words can't, so finding pictures and putting them here was a good one.
The Chapter names. A personal pet peeve for me, but it'd do me a favor if you could regulate them (I'm talking about 'Ch. I Chapter II Chapter Three').
Another thing is that story updates needn't be rushed. I've told several people the same thing, but a finished product that comes late isn't nearly as bad as rushing something to make it 'good enough'.
^ That's not me pointing at you in particular, just handing off advice.
Good chapter. Keep up the stuff, and this could go very right.
Nice job on this chapter, it was fun to read and it left me wanting more, I tip my hat to you sir.
great chapter I love the pic of Derrick's pony family
Love the art!
The picture at the bottom is a wonderful touch!
Great chapter, loving every bit of this story.
I am loving this story. Okay, where do I begin.
As much as I loved the story before the rewrite.. I now love it even more with how colorful the interactions of Derrick with the others are. You have a good backstory to Derrick's past without being too forward or revealing with it.
Nightmare Moon's personality makes her feel like she is her own entity instead of a copy of Luna. (not saying your nightmare moon is a copy of her, but I seen it in other stories). The fact that she is able to show both sympathy and be understanding to Derrick definitely makes her unique.
I especially love the buddy relationship (if there is any) between Sombra and Derrick.
And the siblings he have makes this an epic twist. Because this makes me relate this fanfic to one of my favorite games. [Fire Emblem: Fates]. Where you would have to choose between either your adoptive family you are loyal too and want you to help them conquer the land. Or your real family who want you to help them bring peace.
cool art work
We desire more chapters!!
plz more
I know this sounds clichéd but I think you should give him black wing later on since he's half alicorn
6616484 Sephiroth-style?
Yep. Seems I was right to expect a better showing this time. I especially like this new direction with Faust and Raven. Using an original character and counterpoint to Faust rather than a rushed Molestia expy is definitely a good move. Certainly has my interest already.
Other than that, I don't have any new critiques, so... yeah. Keep up the good work.
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I can't really focus any kind power on Derrick, because my main focus in the future is to fully grasp and detail him being the son of the Creator of Darkness, the son of an actual goddess.
What I mean by that is both light and dark come into course of him developing features thought to never show on his body, meaning the real appearance of Derrick will be seen in the story.
As I said, he is not becoming a pony, but he will gain features you would find in dark/horror manga.
If anything to his alicorn blood showing, it will only be a cutie mark-that which I cannot tell you. All I can say is it might appear somewhere on his face.
The cutie mark thing is not a desire of mine, but it is part of the show.
Call it 'sticking with minor tradition'
6619028 not the one winged angel but 2 giant black wings with feathers like the raven cause
6620479 So a Final Fantasy-styled Humanoid Abomination in MLP...Seems legit.
I don't need it. I don't need it. I REALLY don't need it . . . . . I NEEEEED IT!!!! (But in all seriousness, no rush)
6620479 but black wing would be an awesome thought though don't you think?
Derrick seems to have a cool head most of the time instead of going into full on panic mode.
Though if that happened to me, my reaction would be the following:
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But that's just me,
Meanwhile, somewhere on Earth
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NEXT CHAPTER NOW!!!!
i see this family as like this with a lot of extreme ribbing and profanity on the sides!
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6630149 i would black and white wings since he is a mix if i am right raven said he had his fathers light and her darkness
The pony on the left in the picture at the bottom looks like Ozy Osborne.
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We're like a... Uhhh... family or something?
The brother's name is Crow, he's got black hair and red eyes...
Hmmmm...
I honestly hope that the reference was intentional.
Mmmmmh
Raven = salem ozpin mashup
Little brother crow = the dusty old Qrow
Big sis = big sis ruby AU
That all i have too say. : )
Don’t you mean Mistress?
So true
Equality is fake.
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EXISTENCE IS FAKE
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Wrong for we are all equal in the sweet embrace of death