Michael Winds was just the average teen, until the day he got super powers from a lightning bolt which turned his life upside down as these events lead to the feelings of guilt over his brothers death. When school starts back up at his new school, will he be able to handle his new double life and gain new friends , or will his guilt drag him into a prison of his negative emotions, well only one way to find out.
I don't own MLP or any thing else in this story but the OC. Based mostly in the EQG World where the both movies never happened and season 3 went strait to season 4.
Music is optional but I prefer you use the links (My opinion)
Cover art done by Glacierclear however it was edited to what you see now by me
Past Full Time Editor: GS4
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Current Full Time Editor: Eagle75777
You know I could do a big review about this story but I'll leave you with three words to sum it up:
Everything is wrong!
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What do you mean? 
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-self insert
-grammer
-plot
-links
Do your research before you write a fic. A lot of the things in this fic are things that make experienced people on this site cringe.
4950303 isn't ones OC a self insert any way? and yeah my bad on grammer as well as the link I'll fix it asap as for plot, its just the prolouge
4950312
Yes, that's one of the main problems.
Chronicles.
It's spelled like that.
I think.
4950317 I've seen other stories of an OC being a main character why is it such a big deal?
4950361
Most fics are written to have the insert as the main character and with so many fics with them centered just in the inserts it can get very annoying with the flow of fics accepted. I've only been on this site for a few months and it's already annoying me.
4950335 thanks
4950372 well I'm sorry if this doesn't suit your fancy
4950361 Look, buddy, it's not the OC that's the problem. It's how the OC is made.
There are some pretty darn well-made OC's out there (definitely not any of mine), which are just as loved as the canon characters, some even more so.
Self-Insert OC's are especially frowned upon, not because they are simply self-inserts, but because they tend to become a form of wish-fulfillment character known as a MARY SUE.
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Nah, it's alright. Just good luck with the others on this site. If this story gets more dislikes ten likes....well let's just say I'm the nice one of the groups I'm in, not saying they're other nice peeps but they can be more criticizing. I know, I'm friends with some, I'm sometimes the criticizing one too.
4950401 Michael Winds/Swift is Not a Mary Sue, another chapter will prove it, I hope
4950433 I did not mean to imply that your character was a Mary Sue, however, you should take care to make sure he does not become one!
Best of luck.
3 dislikes this doesn't look good
*Gulp*
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So that you might know what to avoid: My Immortal
And for the reading and enjoyment of all: Worm
4950433 One recommendation? Listen to your commentators, they see things differently than you. What may not seem like a Mary Sue to you can turn out to be a large one. I ended up Mary Sue'ing my character, and I only realized after I went back and read it not as a writer, but as a reader instead. Sometimes commentators are just there to give you grief, and sometimes they're there to give you assistance, and to help you and your story grow. I haven't read the story, and I don't intend to, not that there's anything against you. I noticed the cover art and wanted to take a closer look, because the small version is pretty much a line. Nevertheless, I suggest listening to your commentators and reading through your story as a reader rather than a writer. It can help you notice things you've never noticed before, such as errors, signs of Mary Sue'ing, and such.
EDIT: Also, 3 dislikes is nothing. I had like... 12 dislikes on the first day of mine.
Me and my friend had alot of fun reading through your fic. I personally think that if you keep trying as hard as you did here, you will soon be a great author. Keep at it!
4950726 thanks dude
and yeah I'm bad at drawing and I cant get anyone to commission a Swift and Michael Winds
EDIT: and I used crayon to color him and not colored pencils.
4950361
I don't know... have you ever looked at the like to dislike ratios on other OC insert stories?
Perhaps you'll see why it's a big deal.
4950875 Eh, still better than my art skills. Don't worry about it too much. Also, as someone said to me, I shall say unto you, judging by your name, I'm presuming this story is a self insert, whether based exactly off of you, or taken slightly from your nature, be careful. Self inserts tend to over-glorify themselves, and make your character a super saint who can do no wrong.
4950490
You think 3 dislikes is bad?
Check out Amy in Equestria
That fic got torn apart.
4950937 ok I see what you mean but i meant that as in dislikes before likes , Yikes.heh, I rhymed
4950409
"Knight of the 'something' table", right?
Are you submitting this story? I probably won't, because the author at least appears to be trying.
4950947 Knight of the Wind
Okay, I read your fic. Here is what I see as "wrong":
You already put this in the description. Leave it out of the story. Stories are for the story.
First, it is spelled "Carousel", not Carasoul.
Second, Carousel Boutique isn't in Canterlot.
Why would they do that? It would be easier to steal ALL of the gems, rather than double their chances of getting caught. Also, ransoms rarely work out in real life. Usually, the crooks give away their location.
Most superheroes are vigilantes... unless they are super cops...
I'm going to ignore the possibly offensive comment for now. But statistically, most fics contain numerous spelling and grammar errors. Yours is no exception. I won't point out the others, you can play "Spot the Typo" by yourself.
The Bold was unnecessary. Everyone could see it.
Impression: Character shows signs of Gary Stu tendencies, grammar is fairly bad, and story telling is passable.
Overall: 824/2563
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I was referring to the group Knights of the "something" table, which both I and ShadowblazeCR are members of. It is dedicated to finding bad fanfics.
4951081 did I forget to mention the EQG world is being used in the description?
4951190 His mom doesn't know for starters and there a reason he's a hero "hunting down criminals."
4952510
I don't see how the story being in the EG universe fixes the fact that he is a vigilante, going back to kidnap the kids for ransom is a bad idea for professional thiefs, your character is appearing to be a Gary Stu, grammar is bad, and you don't need a disclaimer in the story.
Unless you are implying that since Equestria Girls was bad, your fic set in that universe will also be bad.
As for "Carasoul" Boutique, it is not mentioned in EG where it is, so there is no reason to assume it's in Canterlot. And I don't believe the town is called Canterlot. Only the High School is.
4952517
PS: toxicman0248's criticisms may have been rude and somewhat offensive, but his criticisms are valid. You should listen to them.
4954848 what?
4954997 Really good story, reminds me of a pretty good anime i once watched.
4955375 cover art could be better though.
4955382 I suck at drawing and I'm to broke to get a commission
4955512
oh......., I'm possessed by the way.
4958499 ok then
4958666
By the devil.
Well my work here is done FOR NOW!
Pinkie you are so ramdom
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I love the story! And with pinkie
NOPE!
I seem to be doing that a lot recently.
4964301 What? Is it the spider man? Or something else??
4975250 on the nail.
4977041 Ah sorry bout that.
4978720 No problem.
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4987777 Yup one of does God help you!