This story is a sequel to My Little Pony Equestria Girls 3: Twilight Vs Twilight
Still trying to find her place in the world Sunset Shimmer returns to Equestria in order to right the wrongs she committed there, however she finds it difficult to adjust back to the Pony lifestyle after being gone for so long. Then suddenly a masked villain captures Twilight, forcing Sunset Shimmer to lead the gang in order to save her as well as face her original sin.
Tagline: The Original Sin is Revealed
Covert Art done by marking
Chapters (12)
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Sunset Shimmer is finally going home to find some closure, about time too. But who is the mysterious new villain that is watching from the shadows? Ohhhh the tension....
I can't wait to see what's going to happen to the girls
5401541 Sure did
By the way the only person I can think to be the hodded figure is demon twilight
5401545 have a moustache.
5401574 Not quite
5401622 Equestria Girls Tirek?
5401633 You'll see
5401638 can't wait to.
ohhh i wonder who was that figure in the hood?
YES!!! NEW STORY!!! :pinkie happy:
Can't wait to see what happens next!!!
Waiting eagerly for chapter 2. Though expect to be waiting a bit with the holiday.
NEW STORY! This pleases me. Ben 10: Omniverse reference with Rarity? I do enjoy your references.
5409997 Thanks, though it still makes me worry...
5410087 Of what?
5410151 That not everyone will be so happy about it... remember why that poor brony Adam took his life?
5410188 Ah yes
Still, let your successes define you not your failures
Damn, I'm being philosophical today
5410205 I still don't see a reason not to worry...
5410205 Should I worry?
5410205 Should I change it?
5410324 No. What is the site for if not the author's vision?
5410373 Meaning?
5410382 Meaning don't change things you don't want to change. It's your story
5410387 Ok. But still... what if some people get angry...?
5410393 That's life. People get angry over anything. If they didn't we wouldn't have the Hulk
Chin up, you have much potential
5410420 Thanks
My feels. Nice incorporation of a classic song.
I loved the chapter, though there should be some spacing
5439677 Ooh, sorry about that, I've fixed it now
I see some Suite Life on Deck references
5469807 Are you mad?
5469898
“Really? Because I didn’t get that after the hundreds of texts, the emails and the hourly visits.” Twilight remarked, deadpan. “Which, by the way, I did not appreciate the one when I was in the shower.”
I meant for the first chapter
5469942 Are you mad?
5470170 No
5470212 Ok
Great chapter. Sunset's off to a good start with the others. Now it's time she make amends with her former mentor.
Good luck Sunset. Looking forward to finding out what that original sin was...and what motivated it
That hand is impossible to get in a stander deck of cards. Spike has all of the Aces.
No it is not, you just cheated Twilight.
I am hearing the entire thing above in the Cinema Sins voice.
5504916 Perhaps they merged two standard decks together.
5504916 Don't worry, I'll change it
5505596 Did have that possibility hanging in the back of my head.
Great chapter. I hope somehow Solar will come around.
Is the dark figure Sunset's super evil genius human counterpart?
Liked being introduced to Sunset's actual family. Keeping curious to her stalker. You might need to take another editing pass at the early part of the chapter though because there seemed to be a few tense mistakes that were a bit jarring.
5525427 Where exactly?
Paragraph where Sunset goes in to meet Celestia. You used walks into the throne room instead of walked and bows to Celestia rather than bowed. Random switching back and forth between past and present tense.