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yeah
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Nice and funny chapter
THE TEASING OH GOD THE TEASING IT HURTS!
Nice chapter. Lot of cute relationship stuff towards the end. This story does have some elements of Her Starry Sky by J8ck78 which is a retelling of Brony19s Under Her Starry Sky. So you know just be careful youre not copywriting anything.
Dat Ghost Mourning! XD
I love this story. Pip is adorable -no homo- andI enjoyed Luna's reaction to Ghost's death and her playtime with Halo. Connor's accidentally arousing Luna with the tail and ear grabbing -along with the remembrance of a similar incident with AJ- made me laugh. Thanks for updating this story, it has quickly become one of my favorite stories from the ones you've written.
You need to go through it again.
There' a few words you got mixed up on, or were auto-corrected.
I'd list them, but it's 2:15 am here.
4937375 you live in Europe then, I take it?
With that The tow went to their rooms to get changed | the two
Luna raised an eyebrow at the words | might want to undo the italicization from this part
off to sleep on the cough | couch, though sleeping on a sudden burst of air does sound kind of comfortable
A fine chapter good sir! As for what in the blue hell I am doing, when I find a story that I truly enjoy I like to go through and point out the mistakes in a way that I feel is appropriate, no negativity meant.
Dat Scrubs reference! Lol
That's no cane! That's a
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4937670 Glad to see someone get it.
4937761 Yeah I am, and I'm pretty sure the part when he wakes up from his comma is a reference to Harry Potter and the prisoner of Azkaban. You know, when Harry wakes up and comments Ron about his face.
nicely done great chapter
4937831 YES! 'Damn it! I've become predictable!' - The Janitor./ Dr. Rotinaj
Well at least Luna didn't wake up first.
4937891 No, his name is Dr. Jan Itor
I guess I'm not the only one who likes luna...
4937690 I was more thinking about House, but that fits the picture better
I saw what you did there >w>. That scrubs referance. Very nice.
4937761 Damn I didn't see it! I love Scrubs too!
4937891 well, this was cute. A nice little slice of life without any potential danger looming in the horizon. I can't wait to see how the guys are going to fuck this up. Since I'm on the topic of swears, you should check out this guy's story, it sounds oddly familiar to me.
Shouting?
4938803 No that's the expression.
The expression is "Save for"
Luna's emote probably shouldn't be italicized since that indicates Connor's thoughts, I'd recommend making this exchange into multiple lines.
Knight (unless the pun is intended for Luna's character)
Love your story though, keep it up
I liked the RVB reference. Surprised that no one else saw it...
4939081 Madgod noticed
4937297 Except that this is fan fiction, so there can be no copyrights, and also that nothing is original anymore
I know the feel Luna,
Ghost was a good soldier
4938978 what does motor boated mean exactly ?
4939717 I am not pulling the pin on that grenade. Google it.
4937504 You're looking in the wrong hemisphere.
4939748 I did and o my ....
A paused game and a woman o wait princess is on his lap i think he should have let it slide and went back to sleep.
4939753 so, if it was 2:15 am, where do you live...?
4940426 Australia.
4940795 ah!I was thinking Northern Hemisphere!Im kinda dumb then, aren't I?
Oh cool, a new chapter on Labor Day(even though it's the day after as I'm typing this), Anyway let's celebrate your hard work with a review:
Use American numbers. So Connor fell a great distance. What happened, did Tirek picked him up and threw him like he did with Twilight?
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Now that's a way to go.
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Mmmh, my favorite.
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You know, you make it too easy. I saw this coming since Chapter 1. Spoiler: Pip will get adopted by Connor and Luna at the end of the story.
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pfft.
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Combining a CSI Miami joke with Red vs Blue? GENIUS!
So Luna had no problem killing humans, but killing alien lizards, she shows respect.WTF?*end of review*
Well this was an awesome chapter. Chapter 3 and you're already lighting the shipping flames. Part of me is thinking you're doing it too fast. So, I wonder what hijinks will happen in the next chapter?
4940889 Umm... time zones cross the earth vertically, not horizontally, so it could also be 2 AM in Japan at the same time as Australia.
4940889 You are. I already said you were looking in the wrong hemisphere.
4941246 No highjinks...SHENANIGANS!
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This is a great story I look forward to your next chapter
4941249 yep, I know that.
4937375 :S
First: I declare shenanigans on thee!
Second: Good story so far, looks a little bit like a rush job, but otherwise good.
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nice