What They Can't See

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Mr Marshmallow

Mr Marshmallow #1 · Jul 1st, 2014 · · ·

... I don't even... I just..... Why?
Still liking and facing though :3

Arxsys

Arxsys #2 · Jul 1st, 2014 · · ·

Honestly, I could get over the fact that this is another pony mass murderer story if it were interesting. The story is just flat. It reads like you just scrolled through the outline and didn't bother to fill in the detail. Yes, Derpy kills ponies but despite the explanation, I just don't feel it.

Sorry dude.

marineproductions100

marineproductions100 #3 · Jul 2nd, 2014 · · ·

4628041 Meh. Doesn't bother me. I don't get into depth with these kind of stories. I've tried before and again, but I just can't really get detailed. You understand completely, I know. I think I'll just stick with suicidal twisted stories and creature ones.

marineproductions100

marineproductions100 #4 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · · ·

4630728 Oops.

marineproductions100

marineproductions100 #5 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · · ·

4636671 Oh. Now I get it.

Mintisity

Mintisity #6 · Aug 1st, 2014 · · ·

It.. good.. but it did feel kinda rushed. There could've been more details, and well, Dinky killed herself? Thats what it sounded like. But it was a good concept!