Derpy is a wonderful pony. Not a lot know that. Derpy is a single mother because many hate her. Derpy has been shunned and hated by her family for her countless mistakes. Derpy is still haunted by her past. She finally found somepony to talk to. That pony is Fluttershy. Fluttershy comes over to talk about Derpy's past. Fluttershy can imagine every word that Derpy is telling her. Why is it that Fluttershy understands Derpy so well.
The following story is rated "teen" for mild language.
Chapters (3)
This story seems interesting ill keep a eye on it
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Me too, I just love Derpy and Dinky stories. (and Sparkler too
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FlutterDerp. Now that oughtta be interresting.
i cant wait to read more of this
looking forward to watching this story as it grows. great work sir!
3353823 Thank you.
this was awesome i cant wait for the next part
hmmm, its a good start, though I was not really feeling the emotions, then again it might just be me.
Now I am no critic, I will only voice what I feel could help with the story, it has nothing to do with the story idea.
The speaking pace could use some tuning, having derpy and Shy have a little more of facial discription to help add tone and weight to the voice.
That is all that really stands out to me, but you have earned a fave, I look forward to the rest of the story
If you've already read Chapter three. Well the rape will be crumpled up and thrown out the fucking window. I did not enjoy writing it. I'll just have to go think of something more fucked up. Or give me a couple days for my parents to....well inspire me. We'll...we'll put it like that.
3358766 when i tried to read it it said i need a password to read it
3364048 Chapter 3. Well I published it and took it off. Because it needs some fixing up and more work. So that's probably why it says that. 'Cause I know for sure that I didn't do that.
3364070 thanks
hi i was wondering when is the next chapter coming out
3405733 I'm sorry for the long delay of Chapter 3. A lot of......stuff has been happening around my house....my parents inspired me for the next Chapter. It was only a matter of time until they did. Either today or tomorrow. I'm glad you enjoy the story.
Another fucking delay. Great. I'm so sorry for the wait. I'm working on it and somehow it just doesn't feel like its good enough to be a chapter. So this is what I'm gonna give you. One more Chapter to this lovely fic. One more Chapter to end it. It will be long and it will be lovely. Better start working on it now. Laters!
3405733 I put up the new Chapter but it didn't end up on the updated story list. So here you go.
3598102 Thank you.
Okay, it was a good concept, I liked it, but, and don't take this hard or anything, but a ton of it was very redundant, there were also grammatical problems but none too serious. Oh and in the first chapter, when Ditzy left Fluttershy's, you wrote "coincidence" when it looks like you meant "confidence". That's all, otherwise it was really good. Personally I don't think Ditzy gets enough attention when it comes to fanfics.
its a great story/shipfic, though it really feels majorly rushed towards the end. not sure if thats what you were intending to do, but it was a decent story otherwise. 8/10
Could use some small work like better (like more commas), but you've got my attention so far.
Proceeding to the next chapter of the story, over.