A prequel to Sunset Shimmer's Redemption.
After losing his family at the hooves of the changelings, Lockon Astros, a young unicorn colt turned alicorn who only dreamed of one day being a royal guard, is given a chance to continue his life under Princess Celestia's care, as her adopted son.
See how he bounces back from this tragedy as he copes with his new position as a prince-in-training while at the same time uses the memory of his tragic loss, as well as his skills in using long-range attack spells to help him excel and succeed as a Canterlot Royal Guard.
He is able to make friends to help fill the void left behind by his loss, but for him that is not enough.
There is only one goal on his mind: to avenge his family and destroy the changelings who murdered them.
Will he succeed in taking his revenge? Or will his new friends and family be able to stop him before he makes what could turn out to be the biggest mistake of his life?
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4601298 I cant tell what you're saying there.
First of all, when someone speaks, and the said tag comes at the end of the sentence, there is a comma instead of a period. Only use a period at the end of a sentence. Don't capitalize the said tag either.
For example:
"Oh, gosh! Did you hear that? It sounded like a cannon," Twilight said.
Shining said, "I doubt it. Probably just some thunder."
This also holds true for other speech tags.
"I smell cookies," Pinkie Pie whispered.
Second, that escalated really quickly. I don't even know how to feel about that. I'm more concerned about the lack of subtlety though... Why in the world did they have a cannon? Where was that house? In the middle of Canterlot? On the outskirts? I have trouble suspending my disbelief. I know the changelings acted like an all-out army in Canterlot Wedding, but that sounds way too direct given the ponies didn't seem to have any real prior knowledge and were only briefly under siege.
4604887 First of all the tags, I thought they were more like emoticons.
Secondly of all, that is not a cannon, it's a suppose to be a magic blast.
Let's just say that this was all before the Canterlot wedding thing. So you could say either Chrysalis was on the verge of becoming the changeling queen or had just become it.
As for this attack, it's suppose to be a surprise attack. And also let's say that ponies did know about changelings before the wedding episodes. But the threat they received was so anonymous that they could not tell who it was from at the time. You have to remember Shining Armor said during episode 51 that they did not know who was responsible for the threat against Canterlot.
Let's say for the sake of this story, all of this is the case.
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I'm talking about the dialog/speech tags. That's what said, asked, and any other method of speaking are called. Unless you're referring to something else? I'm talking about grammar.
Sorry, that part was my fault. I wrote that entirely wrong. I got stuck on the silly joke I created in my example there and it got rolled up into my questions by mistake.
I meant to ask why the grunts had blast attacks. Or did Chrysalis randomly blast up the house? Or did a grunt slam into it? They don't have ranged attacks, except for her, unless I have forgotten something, which is entirely possible. In this snippet, they're directly attacking each time. Even the green shots aren't magical projectiles; it's just the changelings going at high speed.
I'm assuming it made some noise, since the house was damaged significantly, unless I misread something, which is possible. It would be nice to know how it caught on fire though. Knocked over candles, I'm assuming, but still.
Sure, but what purpose does it serve for them to destroy a private dwelling? Even as a mistake? Sorry, but if this happens before the wedding, then not only does Lockon know what a changeling is, but he heard them referring to their queen before she attacked his sister in the open. Shining Armor explicitly says he doesn't know who is responsible for the threat, yet Cadance knows what a changeling is already when she reveals herself to the wedding party. I'm assuming they'd put two and two together, and mention that sooner, if the changelings made an attack that was this blatant.
Even if the house didn't collapse and simply drew more attention away by being on fire, I have to assume the changelings were plainly visible after blasting it. Then they were certainly visible when they chased the two ponies up to the front gates of the palace.
Why are you putting this in hypothetical terms? Is this the case? I'm not being contrary for the sake of being contrary. Discord is my avatar because I like him. I'm not a troll. I'm just very analytically minded.
For the record, I love Flim and Flam as well, so if you're referencing that, then I approve the hypothetically, theoretically part.
4605310 Ok. "This case" is not hypothetical. This IS the case.
The changelings magic shots they, did it all at once to destroy the house. Changelings can use magic other than there shapeshifting abilities. I am going with the assoumption at ALL changelings have this capability.
As for te Canterlot Wedding, nopony but the real cadance knew who made the threat. The guards knew about changelings but very rarely fought them before the wedding.
This was supposed to depict chrysalis trying out strategies,and this is a case where she learns not to make this kind of strategy again, then she flees to rethink her plans.
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For the sake of argument, I'll just accept that they can do that, but why did they destroy the house? Are they just generic bumbling henchmen? If that's so, I'll drop it, since it's not a trope I care for, but I respect it being a joke that I just didn't find amusing.
I don't know. I guess if Lockon is about Twilight's age, then enough time could have passed for them not to assume the changelings were behind the threat before the wedding, but I'd assume they'd take note of that sort of thing. We never see anyone else attack anywhere near the kingdom besides Nightmare Moon (who was banished and then dealt with) and Discord (turned to stone twice) before the wedding happens. Unless it's common for threats to be made, I just assumed they'd start looking for who to point fingers at, if they had any idea the changelings were willing to outright attack part of the city.
It just seems weird, is all I'm saying. Especially if they attacked Ponyville at any point. I'm assuming that Twilight would have heard about the changelings, and accused Cadance of being a changeling instead of nondescript evil, before the big reveal in the episode. Just how it feels to me. It would seem that Chrysalis would have been trying more than twice within roughly ten years, although it's possible she just didn't get noticed again between now and then. I would assume she'd get unlucky and make a few more mistakes in such a length of time though. Even with shape shifting, it's only natural to make mistakes; especially if its her followers and they make such errors by going against what she told them.
Those are just my thoughts on the matter.
Lockon Astros? Clearly based on the first Lockon Stratos (Neil Dylandy). Hopefully he won't share his fate.
4890164 Have you by any chance read my other two stories? You'll find the answer in them.
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Seriously, why the thumbs-downs?! This is great!
This is a really good chapter in don't know what's Wrong with everypony
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Because people just wanna be jerks. Everybody is so blasted critical of the way OC's look, and don't like it when OC's are paired in any way with canon characters.
I think I see a brother sister relationship forming also Wat is up wid all da tumbs down?
Do u think u can continue with this? I really like this story.
6129843 I will try but I have been having a severe case of writer's block with this story. My first writer's block ever, believe it or not. But don't worry, this story will be continued. Just don't know when the next update will be.
this is great why the dislikes
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How long are you going to finished the prequel of sunset shimmer’s redemption
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I honestly don't know. Between writer's block, life in general, working full time, and now having to be on constant guard against coronavirus, I haven't been able to come up with anything nor have I had any decent time to write.
Rest assured, I do plan on finishing this story. Maybe even rewrite it along with my other stories, considering they were written while I was still in college several years ago, back when Starlight Glimmer wasn't even introduced I think. But, like I said, I don't know when I'll get around to it.