Next runs in to some trouble with a Shadow Bolt and soon discovers that her name is Nightshade and is on a mission to stop the Manticore King. She was sent to Ponyville to gather up a small team to help her...Luna made a bad choice on the ponies she picked.
Amazeing? Manticpre? choise? Nextwipeout?
No thanks, my friend. I think I'll pass on this one.
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I don't know. I tried my best to pretty it up a little bit, but this is as far as I got. Use them or don't, whatever; I just like trying to help.
MFW reading this conglomerate of ass.
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Even when a casual is in Poneland, he is still playing Call of Duty. DROPPED.
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This is a wholly new monument to an absolutely shitty story. I can't even decipher what the hell is going on in this story, and everyone has left our good friend spell check to live by itself so much that it's committed suicide from lack of
dickingsocialization! To put the shitstick on the top of this diarrhea-coated, dysentery-infected, triple-shit-layered cake, your fucking STRUCTURE IS LAUGHABLE. Not even pressing fucking tab but just adding in like a space? Granted, you added in a tab after a few of your...shittypitifulhereticalhorrid transitionary lines, but that was like adding sprinkles on top of the shit cake here. It's a perfect profusion of putrid piss, and the only way for you to help it is to find someone to just go right through and enact an editorial nuclear holocaust in order to get this thing back into shipshape order.TL;DR:
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It's not a good story because it's my first one.
Great typing from me! I know it sucks.
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If you think it's "great typing", why did you say it sucks? It does suck, trust me, but what is this even?
Also, "first story" is never a good reason for a fic to suck. It is a great reason to get better, but not a good reason to be content with sucking. Just work to improve, don't make excuses for your shortcomings. Own up to them, work to fix them, and get better with time.
Also, get an editor.
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AWESOME AS FUCK
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So awesome that I couldn't show the spaghetti flying out of my hid pockets.
~DustyPwny
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Spaghetti level: Chef Boyardee
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You're gonna need an oven for that shit.
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