Things to note:
This is essentially a rewrite of what existed of Sequins and Sequels. I posted the story to /r/MLPLounge, hoping for some input, and I've made a number of changes, including planned plot sequences.
If you didn't enjoy this fic, please explain why in a private message or otherwise! Thank you.
Manehattan-born Game Changer has just moved to Ponyville and is relieved to finally have some independence after his earlier life in a shabby Manehattan apartment with his family and two sisters. One thing he never left behind was a certain memory - he might have forgotten it, but it remains in the pits of his mind. Wherever he walks, those hooves will follow.
But now, in Ponyville, it's time for a new start. Maybe he'll see an old face...or a new one. Maybe he'll catch a legendary face - maybe that of the Element of Generosity herself...
You shouldn't have to make a backstory in Gdocs just to stop people from "criticizing" your story.
I like this story already, give us more.
4307323 It wasn't so much to do that, it was just to resolve anything anyone found contradictory. Also, I'm sorta annoyed by the dislike system here – if I don't even know where to improve in the first place, how can I?...Hope I'm not alone in this problem...
EDIT: removed on request
Yeah . . . I stopped reading your story after that line. Out of curiosity, I clicked on the link.
Exposition!
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Everything about your character should be revealed through his thoughts actions in the story. I shouldn't have to read two pages of facts before I read your story.
Ummmmmmm...
That seems rather counter-productive for hooves....
4317199 I suppose I'll keep it as a backup measure. Doesn't seem to go down well with the overly critical. Thanks for commenting, wouldn't've sealed the deal on that decision otherwise.
4317901 Not really. The reason behind the title will come clear soon! I plan to write and upload a new chapter today, so keep an eye out!