I'm a first time writer who will try to write only one-shots, although I may occasionally make a multi-chapter story. I'll most likely only write clop here.
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I can understand why this has gotten five downvotes already. this feels very rushed, and there is no paragraph spacing or indenting, making it very difficult. You will not receive a downvote from me, but this has not earned an upvote from me or a fav either.
i like it. but seems like a slice of life or something, not an alt universe
Nice story. But, don't forget to add it to relevant groups. You get more readers that way.
Hmm. There is no paragraph spacing or indenting with makes this story very hard to read I'm not trying to be rude, just saying
For a story without a dialogue this seems to give enough detail for me to immerse myself. although it did seem rushed you did very well in the little bit you did write, I'd recommend giving more detail to the areas that weren't her cloping herself silly and it could probably get a higher rating.
I'm sorry, but this really needs a blessing from the formatting faerie.
It's currently a giant wall of text that, because of a lack of line separation, spacing, and flow management, is something I just cannot finish reading.
I loved it, but how is it alternate universe?
Dude do scoots next in this and good work
4777027 Yeah. It was a decent story, just needs to be spaced out and formatted so it has better flow.
Um, I think it's been a little longer than one month...