Huh. That was an interesting ride. The first half made me hate your guts. No one hurts Rarity. No one. Then the second half came and made up for that, sorta. The scenes with genuine interaction between Rarity and Shining Armor were nice, but that's also when the story started reading more like an outline for a story than an actual finished narrative. Also, the sex scenes were very clinical. I'm pretty sure the word "genitals" should never appear in this sort of story. If only because it makes me think of this song:

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Yeah, I know it sucks The person who requested it though was super impatient and, quite frankly, an ass if you will, so I just hurried along with it.

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That is very true Nikita, it did seem rushed but it was very cute...and that song made me cry tears of joy o my f. XD

I feel like this would be better WITHOUT the clop. Pretty good though.