I'm a hardcore anime fan, now even-more-hardcore brony. I run a brony site here: http://digibrony.tumblr.com/
When Rarity notices the sorry state of Pinkie Pie's teeth, she drags the pink pony kicking and screaming to see a dentist. During the check-up, a shocking discovery is made: Pinkie has developed an unstoppable culture of plaque that threatens to take her life! The only known cure is a legendary element spoken of in the ancient diary of an early pony dentist. So begins an adventure in search of the element needed to save Pinkie's life!
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This is hilarious.
*Reads Description*
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Cheers
~iraqlobstah
@Octavia Macedo
Glad to hear it!
@IraqLobster
Yep, I was expecting that.
Oooh, sounds like a good start!
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Learn how to use reply function
N00b.
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
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When I hit the button, I only saw a string of numbers, so I wasn't sure if it would display the names. I'd thank you for the advice, were it not presented so condescendingly.
EDIT: and clearly I still don't know what I'm doing. Perhaps you could actually explain how to do this?
EDIT AGAIN: huh now the names are showing. O...kay?
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Yay~
that image.
JESUS!
ok, how many of us saw this coming from Pinkie's candy habit other then a fat problem?
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It'll show the numbers until you post the reply and leave the page in my experience - I think it's the comment number you're replying to, maybe?
This is a good story. I like it.
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I'm glad it's believable
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I've gathered as much, but hanks! Also for liking it!
Is this a tenacious d parody?
This story made my teeth feel funny, but still a good 'un! Definitely tracking it.
I really like what you have here. I am tracking, and will reward you with a fave if I like the rest. I also gave you a like. I would suggest you try to slow the pace a little bit. The story zipped through a lot of plot in a few paragraphs.
My my my my my my myyyy... I rarely come across any fics starring the mighty scourge of tooth decay herself, Colgate the Cavity-Crusher... I am quite interested as to how you will interpret her. The obligatory dentist background was a given, but you seem to be going into her family as well. Awaiting next chapter with interest.
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Also, I deem this relevant. And funny as tits.
Never thought I'd read a fanfic who's plot that centers around teeth!
Then again, I'm pretty surprised that I haven't.
This is a fun idea you got here. Makes sense that Pinkie's mouth would be a disaster zone. Like someone else above me said, you did move through this a little too quickly. The dialogue is good, but there isn't much in actual prose to really engross me into the scenes. I don't know if this is intentional on your part or not, but I find it strangely humorous that Pinkie can go "okie dokie" like normal after she's been told she might die. No, I'm not saying you need to make her super afraid; it'd actually be a neat quirk if you kept her all cheery. But don't let me affect you. It's your story, after all. I just comment to show people I care
This should be an episode, teach the kids about the importance about brushing you teeth!
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Nope, that would've been the toothPICK of destiny.
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Glad you like it!
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Thanks for the advice. I do intend to slow it down soon, because I don't think I got nearly enough character interaction into this first chapter.
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Originally I hadn't intended on keeping Colgate around, but then I thought, why not? Surely she's as interested in the story of her ancestor and the search for dental knowledge as anyone!
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I'm always surprised when I find something new in this fandom, just because it seems so overwhelming. Just gotta remember that the fandom is still relatively young!
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I do think I moved too fast, but as for the prose, there won't be a whole ton of it. I tend to focus on dialog, taking a style that's almost like reading a script. I call it my style—some would call it a handicap. It's really the result of years of blogging. It's actually rare for me to not write in first person or present-tense, so this is already branching out for me (which may be the reason that I ended up running so fast: I'm not totally in my element). In any case, I like to leave a lot to the imagination, because I have a hard time recounting the very specific images that I get in my head when I talk about a scene. I figure with this chapter, I get away with just saying that they're in a dentist's office, because the reader can fill it in with their own image of what a dentist's office looks like.
I'd like to possibly balance this with a visual aspect, to make it easier to understand something like the earth pony toothbrush, but sadly, I cannot draw whatsoever >_<
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I love thinking of this as my proposal for a My Little Pony movie.
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I'm not sure if you can remove any of it without using Colgatium.
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I will! Or rather, I am!
Yay!
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Heh. I love your Pinkie. And I share your affection for always amusing alliteration being espoused by equines.
Well done. Well done indeed.
Quick pinkie grab rarity "pinkie grabs rarity" ADVENTUUUUUUUUURRRREEEEE!
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ROFL
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Very happy to hear that! I was scared that if the alliteration was ever mentioned, it would be someone saying "stop doing that!"
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Yup XD
Another wonderful chapter by Digibrony!
Nice story, I found it funny how the cure for the disease is an element, ie the building blocks of the world. Yet nopony has any idea where to find it. I mean, it can't be that rare since every place had had it at some point, or had heard about it. I was the cure for an epidemic after all. Kind of a plot hole, or not. Whatever, can't wait for the ending, or middle. I guess it depends on how much you write.
Canine teeth? Do ponies eat meat? Because that's what canines are for(As I am almost positive you know).
I actually got here from your Over a Barrel video and you were very thorough. I was actually surprised to see this here. Unless you were just creating a silly fanfic and really going into details, I am being way too picky. 
I don't mean to be a bother, or to offend anyone, but I just wanted to point this out.
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Haha, sadly my knowledge of teeth is sorely lacking. (This story is semi-autobiographical, after all >_<)
OH god I can hear the Genderswap versions in my head ... Elusive covered in cake from head to hoof, "Bubble Berry" and berry just sitting there with a big stupid grin on his face. XD I Love it and I watch your stuff.
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Mammals are more alike than they are different, and plenty of analogous structures exist. Horses have sharp canine-like teeth known as the wolfteeth that are removed as a nuisance at an early age in domesticated horses, but you can see them in their wild cousins.
Sorry to necro this, and even sorrier to jump into a discussion on a story I haven't read yet. This will need to be corrected.
Aaand done. This is a pretty engaging piece with a clever premise, but its sparseness really sort of stands out at times. I'm all for a good dialogue opener but I tend to like the narrative to back up and do a little scene-setting afterwards, give us some feeling and ambiance. This reads a bit like a teleplay. Colgate's specialty dialect quirk is fine as these things go, but it makes the points where you alliterate as well stick out like a sore thumb, because now we've got two characters, Colgate and the narrator, doing it. Lastly, I'm not sure why Celly is present. She drops a single plot point which would have been easily covered in the research portion of the narrative, and she seems to be here more or less to check her off an imaginary Bingo card. It's an odd choice. No thumbs yet, will track (although at a year since update, I get a grim feeling about the odds of seeing more.) Thanks for sharing this!
digibrony made a fimfic!?
. oh gosh! I LOVE your analyzing things! 
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Wonderfulness!
Plaque Death.. lol, nice creation of a plague there.
I wonder what will happen to poor Pinkie's teeth. 
Reminds me of the fic I wrote while under the effects of painkillers from when I had a tooth pulled.
I want more please
. In fact I DAMANDE MORE
, Pleeeaaasssseeeeeeeeee right more
. It's really good.
WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO FINISH IT DIGI!
That picture... IT SCARES ME, MAN!
Thanks for the story...
...and possibly nightmares, lol