My Little Changeling, and I

by Ponyess

Breakfast at Pinkie's: 6

I had been riding high on the welcoming party for Silver Mane for several days now. Just as I had chosen to go to the Sugar-Cube Corner for my breakfast today. My daughter Dinkie followed me, how could I leave her alone? I had to share my breakfast with her after all.

Once I get to the door, I could clearly see Pinkie Pie by the counter, giggling. I open the door and hear the chimes announcing our arrival, though something told me she already knew I was here.

“Your table is waiting for you. I'll have your breakfast over in but a few minutes!” she merely giggled.

“Okies, Pinkie!” I responded, leading Dinkie in to where we were to have our breakfast.

Since she had told me to go right in, I did as she told me. She doesn't have to tell me twice. If Pinkie Pie sais something, she is right and this time was no exception, I just did not have a clue as to what she was hitting on right now.

“Uh, Mom. What was that all about?” Dinkie enquired.

“Apparently, she has already prepared our breakfast, today. How or why, only Pinkie Pie knows, I guess. Since it is something neither Twilight Sparkle nor Princess Celestia could possibly know!” I responded.

“Oh!” she responded.

“Three chairs!” I pointed out as I saw the table.

I found a curious smile spreading over my face, knowing something odd, unusual and most likely enjoyable was up. It is Pinkie Pie, after all.

“Who is the third chair for? We usually only need two. Pinkie isn't going to be with us, right?” Dinkie pondered.

“I have a suspicion we are to be wiser, as to who is to sit with us, in a few minutes. I just can't figure out what she had in mind just yet, though!” I responded, trying to hide my smile for just a while longer.

“A Pony is coming. Who is she? No, that couldn't be!” Dinkie responded as she hears the steps of another Pony.

“It is!” Mom responded.

“Hi, Ditzy and Dinkie. I guess breakfast is about to be served. Or it is what the pink mare told me!” Silver Mane greeted us.

“Hi, Silver!” we both greeted her.

“I told you, we were to see who, soon, didn't I?” I teased Dinkie.

“Yeah, I guess you did!” she responded.

“I guess that makes the cake. Or is it; that calls for a cake?” Pinkie Pie teased as she stormed in with a large Muffin cake, she gingerly sneaked down onto the middle of the table, before she rushed of after the juice.

“Both would be fine by me!” Silver responded with a giggle to her voice and a smile on her face.

“So long as the cake is Muffin, I am all for it!” Dinkie responded.

“If Pinkie Pie baked it, it is bound to be delicious!” Silver Mane put forth.

“It is and I did!” Pinkie Pie explained from behind.

“I should have known!” I merely groaned.

“We love your Muffins!” Dinkie filled in with a joyous grin on her face.

“I know. On the other hoof, so does the entire of Ponyville. Not so much because I told anyone, it is merely obvious to any and all!” Pinkie teased.

“They do?” Silver Mane enquired curiously.

“If you did not already know, it is something we all learn in Ponyville. It is as obvious as when Celestia raises the sun in the morning, if you don't mind me mentioning it?” Pinkie Pie teased.

“That obvious, Pinkie? I never managed to miss the sun being on the shy yet!” Dinkie enquired.

“The two of you only have them most every day. If your Muffins are not available, every Pony gallops to hide. Maybe they recall the one time it happened. Good thing I have a memory to recall your Muffins and to make sure I have a fresh stash put aside for you each morning!” Pinkie explained.

Upon mentioning, I noticed Silver making her best to hide a smile as she giggled.

“Every Pony gotta love something?” I suggested.

“Or some Pony!” Pinkie suggested.

“Ah yeah, you love every Pony, by the looks of it. Including Donkeys, Mules and even the one Griffon, from what we saw!” Dinkie teased.

“I fear you may need more than just a Castle, if you were to invite all your friends, Pinkie?” Silver suggested.

“Castles are such small and restrictive buildings. I have been to such a party once. I have seen a few Castles, Celestia's royal castle included!” Pinkie Pie retorted.

“I don't need a castle, just Muffins!” Dinkie expressed, giggling as she dug into her slice of the Muffin cake.

“I think I know why Ponies keep coming your way for breakfast. Aside from the delicious Muffins and cakes, that is!” Sliver slipped.

“By the looks, my company makes you delirious. I guess you are the only Pony reacting quite that strongly on my presence, not that I mind!” Pinkie Pie blurted in a teasing tone, giggling.

“Who wouldn't want to be around Pinkie Pie? Foals love her parties for one, as if we adults didn't enjoy them? If for nothing else, it is a chance to see others happy!” I pondered with a grin on my face.

“Making Ponies smile is my job. When I am not baking Muffins that is, but Muffins makes you smile. That takes me back to where we stared, making Ponies smile. It is a very rewarding job, I think!” Pinkie Pie suggested.

“That makes sense, I guess!” Silver responded.

“Good thing you got a second slice of the cake, Mom. I know how you hate when there is no Muffin, when you need it. Gotta hoof it to you, Pinkie Pie, this cake truly is divine!” Dinkie pondered.

“Just don't remind me. It isn't something I like to think of. I hope you never will need to face it!” I responded.

“Time I head back, so I can serve all the other hungry Ponies, before they get restless!” Pinkie Pie teased.

Comments

[Sauron]

the packag ecintained a Mufin cake...
...I cuess it is the ultimate in blinde dating, since I had no idea I was on the date in the first place, just as neither did she.
In the years ahead, this is the day and the momnt I will tresure, for what it did to me, and for me.

*package
*contained
*Muffin
*guess
*blind
*moment
*treasure

If this is what the description's like, I can't imagine the story.

Second Chapter Title: *Meeting

Doesn't anybody know how to use spellcheck?

[Ponyess]

4982090 Sorry about these problems mentioned, nothing I can't fix, even if it was too late for you?
The spelling is dealt with.

[Sauron]

4982240
I don't wish to offend you, but...
...is English your first language?

[Ponyess]

4982417 Since you asked, no.
I just don't make a point out of it, but I have no problem saying it.

I try to make the most of every constructive comment I get, just like yours.
It is why I moved my stories here from Mibba in the first place, more feedback.
I think I have develloped my writing more this latest year here, then I did before.

[Sauron]

4982451
I figured that was the case. The way you phrase some sentences, like: "I guess I could happily make due with my quarter, as was Dinkie." makes it clear what you are trying to say, but is grammatically incorrect.
I believe you mean to say: "I was happy to make due with my quarter, as was Dinkie." There's a slight difference. In the first version, you say "I guess I could... as was Dinkie." In the second it says "I was... as was Dinkie." Notice how the verbs agree.

[Ponyess]

4982530 There may be more and greater differences than seems to meet the eye?
The problem is that I can't express what I want to say, while staying in the safety of correct grammar, when I am writing 'Creatively'.
Is it so bad to try to write the best story, even if it may come at the cost of a few gramatical slips from time to time?
Another question is if there truely is a correct way to put forth every last detail I had in mind for the scenes I am trying to express.
Each word and the exact order does change the meaning and empasis of the statement, or question, doesn't it?

Just curious, did you ever consider or compare how; Rarity, Apple Jack and Zecora speaks?

[Sauron]

4985354
You make a good point. However, like in the sentence I pointed out, there are times when a correct sentence conveys the exact same meaning as an incorrect one.

I have indeed considered the way Rarity, AJ, and Zecora speak. Let's look at them right now: Rarity speaks eloquently, though she sometimes puts too much "flair" in her words, making what should be simple sentences a bit complex. AJ on the other hoof, speaks directly, but has a tendency to use slang. Both use grammatically correct sentences.

Zecora doesn't always use correct grammar, and though it can be said that it is done in the interest of rhyme, it is worth noting that Zecora is a foreigner, and therefore Equish is probably not her first languange.

Finally, consider this: perhaps you cannot express certain ideas in a grammatically correct way, not because there isn't a way, but because you lack the experience with the language to know how to phrase it.

[Ponyess]

4985524 I think I am good at making these and enjoy doing it.
I imagine there is a correct way of buulding the sentence, at least most of the time.
Now I need a way to see how to build it and what could help me building it.

Putting it like that, the tree could be used as samples forwhere and how one goes overboard in writing?
Rarity aspire to excelence, it is easy to take it a step too far?
AJ is a farmer, or what some may refer to as a 'RedNeck', with all the vocabulary and expressions to go with it.
If Zecora happens to be a Foreiner, as you said, it is of little to no consequence, but can as easily be overblown.
From a Pony perspective, she works makig, just not with a horn as the Unicorn would have.

There is bound to be better ways to express some of what I write.
The only way to learn would be through practicse, since there is no way to just pick it up.
Dictionary or Grammar books only takes you so far since they are not alive, merely expressing simple rules.

For now, I try my best, then check the result against the utilities I have available to me in order to iron out what ever problems may be in the text.

[Sauron]

4985717
If you enjoy making these, keep doing it. It is true that practice at a language will help you improve. So keep at it.

PS: Zecora is a foreigner, it's part of the show's canon. And I was pointing out that it might be the reason she isn't always grammatically correct.

[Ponyess]

4987033 I enjoy writing the stories, with ponies or without. To see them move forwards and devellop, or just have a moment of fun.

Even if some of the problems within the text are merely typos, if someone point out a mistake in spelling, grammar or details in general, it would still help me devellop my writing and story telling.

Isn't it why they made her a Zebra, to make it obvious that she was a foreiner from a place far away and very different fom Equestria in general?
If i was the only reason for how she is speaking, why did the horses from Saddle-Arabia not the same problems or similiar once?

These three are the best samples of how different people speak, but in neither of the cases an excuse for poor language. They merely distingush themselves in different ways when they speak, without saying they are not good at english.

[Sauron]

4990342
I don't believe the Saddle Arabians ever spoke. The Maretonians in Twilight's Kingdom did, but they spoke perfectly well.

[Ponyess]

4990644 then they were merely there for the joke.

I guess the Maretonians were Equestrian Ponies 'of noble birth', so they were bound to speak like Celestia and Luna?