[If you would like ANY translation from Romanian to English, just send me a message] Lubuskie and MARZ move from Romania to Ponyville. These are their stories with the Mane Six, Spike, CMC, and many more. Many of their old friends from Romania will vist (and possbliy move in). Some of them might fall in love and some of them will just become good friends with the cast. Also each chapter is like an episode or a whole story. [Picture characters; Marz: left; Lubuskie: right; Supa Cassie: upper right.]
Chapters (2)
Romania?
what is this i don't even
25455 Yes, Romania. I only picked Romania because I'm part Romanian and I take pride in it.
25462 Well you succeeded in making me go "What the fuck am I reading", but in the 2girls1cup kind of way. There is no plot, no development, no characterization.
before anymore negative comments get posted. there is in fact a story line, me and R.P.52 have got it all planned out. but for the first couple of episodes there will be madness and randomness, which my good friend R.P.52 is good at creating, i need everyone to trust me and R.P.52 on this one, it will get better and you will get back storys and more organization once my O.C "MARZ" and his "girlfriend, Lubuskie" get settled in ponyville.
i am overseeing character profiles and sometimes post some. dont rush us please, we have so many ideas and writing them down as fast as we can.
we both understand if some ideas overlap others. just be patient. and to all that see this. YOU BETTER HAVE A FUCKING NICE DAY!!!
hai!
this is amazing!
we are the tfour brothers!
and we love this shit! keep it coming!
i actually like this... i love the look of lubuskie!
25484
Wow... You just had to bring up 2girls1cup didn't you? Alright yes I know, there is clearly NO plot line for episode one. Me, Alexmars5, and our other friend [currently doesn't have an account, so I'll just call him Sparkle.] just randomly came up with this in like, half an hour, but we spent more time on characters than on ep. 1's plot line. I can assure you that there will be stories with either random or serious plot lines.
25862
Marz, you just gave away part of a later story line!
26063
Yes you did
Why is fluttershy so... Un shy?
To my reading list you go
Romania huh. I can dig it.
Che misto, tlala rom san dau tuut panj an do kothola strayi! :3
Well...um...what to say, honestly?
Randomness is good, but much of this was just an incomprehensible mess. Neither of the two chapters make much sense at all and are not particularly funny, either. There are some passable ideas here and there, but they're all shoved into the reader's face in a way that's unpleasant. The spelling and grammar are decent, though the lack of descriptions does get a bit tiresome. Dialogue alone cannot carry a story, unless you're Samuel L. Jackson at the very least. Also, sometimes I feel like there's some kind of unseen narrator who crushes the 4th wall every now and then, because there are bits of dialogue that quite honestly don't fit anywhere. I could also mention the inclusion of Romania being slightly weird, but then again, Equestria is magic, you ain't gotta explain shit with that.
•~• I won't say they're stupid now
44067 Is that true or are you trying to be a smart@$$
? [I'm not saying you are though...]
i will tell you, IN PARABLES! no wait never mind....my ass can't be smart anyways, just doesnt add up eyup
this was a cluster fuck
44060
Weird stuff is acceptable, when it actually seems to follow either a pattern, or has some kind of connection between the actual events. Flinging random ideas around just makes the reader confused and eventually tired of trying to comprehend what's going on. Claiming "it's random, what do you expect" is a rather bad excuse. As of right now, your story reads like a disjointed acid trip, with none of the funky or funny stuff one would like to see.
Also...do you even realize what you're saying? No, no one forced me read your story, I read it because I was CURIOUS of what it's like and assumed that as you've put this story online, you're probably interested in what people think about it. That's what criticism is about, not just simply "LOL U AWESOME". Work for your good reviews if you crave them so much and don't expect people to shower you with praise because you've managed to open a new Word document.
amazing... you are the best writer i know RP52
25457 whats the other part im romanian myself from moldova