2 Assisting Each Other with Their Hearts.
Spike was saddened about today, because his crush Rarity would be away for a month on a tour around Equestria, featuring her designs. He was there in his bed eating some Mint Ice Cream, wondering how he's going to cheer himself up, He also realized, how exactly is The Carousel Boutique going to survive without some-pony making fabulous clothing. He was worried that no-pony was going to pay for the rent. Then he remembered that Rarity hired some-pony to take her place while she was away. He forgot who it was unfortunately. However, it was a friend that they haven't seen in months. Then, it was time for Rarity's departure! He had to get all the bags, because man, the writers of the show can't stop making Spike the but of all the jokes! Why? Was it because the kids thought it was funny? well he's a kid to, so what if they were put into Spike's position? Not so funny now isn't it? Oh yeah, Spike loaded everything into the train.
"I bid all of you farewell, don't worry, it's only for a month, I wont be long."
Rarity then hugged, Princess Twilight Sparkle, A.J., Flutters, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, then last but not least, Spike the Dragon. Spike tried to make it last, but rarity had to go. Spike's earfins then sagged with depression. His friends tried to give him a group hug to cheer him-up, but no dice. Then entered this friend that Rarity hired.
"Hello." She said.
"Hi." The 5 mares replied.
"Oh, hey." Spike said, still very under the weather.
"What's wrong with him?" She asked. She noticed a dragon with Rarity when they 1st met, but she forgot what his name was. She felt bad for that because she thought he was really cute. So was now her opportunity to really meet him.
"Don't worry Pommel, we'll take care of it, welcome to..." Twilight was cutoff.
"Hey there Coco Pommel, we gotta throw a Welcome to Ponyville party for you, since this is your 1st time here!" She then gave Coco a big hug.
"Well, that's sounds nice, but I'll only go on one condition."
"What would that be?"
She then walked-up to Spike.
"If you little guy can be next to me at all times during the party and he has to smile. Will you do that for me?" She then used her front hooves to lift the corners of Spike's mouth up.
Spike was in for a shock, Coco was very elegant in her looks, he couldn't believe such beauty existed, and he thought of himself as an idiot for not remembering her and her looks! Spike then remembered who this was, it was Coco Pommel, she was the one who gave Rarity the reward. She was kind & Generous, she showed her true nature, her true kind nature after her meeting with rarity and that is something Spike could admire. She still had her hooves on his face & she was waiting for an answer.
"Yes, yes I can." He said with a dry voice, because come-on, if a hot chick walks-up to you and she touches your face, would you be saying stuff with a clear voice.
"Oh-my, here, have the rest of my water, it should fix that sore throat of yours."
"B-but, backwash." Spike then blushed
"Haven't you ever heard of water-falling?"
"Oh yeah."
The others laughed and thought this scene was very cute to watch.
Later at the party, Spike kept his promise and didn't leave Coco's side, every pony was having a great time of course since it's a Pinkie Pie party. Spike realized something when with Coco. She could make a perfect replacement for Rarity, but then fought against that thought because Rarity will never ever be replaced, not even in his heart!
Meanwhile...
"I wonder how Pommel is doing with Spikey-wikey, the true reason why I hired her is because I can see her as a great match for my generous little dragon friend." Said Rarity. "I must be really lonely to be talking to myself, I should ask out Thunderlane when I get back."
Now we go back to the party, Spike still fought against his thoughts, while still keeping his smile. Pommel then got exhausted and sat down on the couch, with a hoof around Spike. Spike shivered because this never happened before. Spike's blushes got stronger, and the thought of Pommel replacing Rarity in his heart grew stronger as well! He found himself sitting on Pommel's lap. She then nuzzled him in delight, with both hooves around his body. He then could take no more, turned and kissed her! She kissed back. Again, all 5 thought this was cute. So throughout the month, Coco Pommel & Spike assisted and kissed. She assisted with Spike's book arrangement at the library and he assisted her with the boutique! On the final day, it was time for her to go & for Rarity to return. Spike and Coco looked into each others eyes. Very disappointed.
"Will I ever see you again Coco?"
"Anything can happen."
"Only on the Hub!" Said Pinkie, who was then shushed by the other 4.
"Yoo-hoo, I'm back my friends." Rarity said. "Thank you Pommel for watching the Boutique, here, a present!"
"Thanks Rarity, goodbye friends."
Then they all waved farewell.
Years later some pony moved into Ponyville, this just so happened to be surprise, surprise, Coco Pommel! Everyone was grateful she returned for good, especially Spike.
The End, now I'm going to bed, good night everyone!
"Good night Mr. Narrator!" You said back.
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This shipping needs to tread.
It moved way to fast...
THIS WAS GOOD, BUT NOT AS GOOD AS I EXPECTED IT TOO,
FOR THIS YOU GET HAPPY SMILES AND SAD FROWNS
Spike is the best Dragon!
This needs more likes!
Damn, this was quick. Barely 48 hours after it premiered, and there is a new potential ship available.
I don't know whether I should be impressed, or scared out of my mind with how quickly this was created.
this should cover it:
Spike & Coco Pommel make an interesting ship i like it i give this story a nice 7.1/10
A decent quick one shot but I would like to see more of this shipping.
It's a cute idea, but needs development. There's not really any sort of build-up or growth to romance between the two. They end up together at the party the first day of her arrival and the rest of the month is just glossed over. It would have seemed a lot more realistic and entertaining to have a build up and development between the two.
two things:
1) a good romance story is one that grows slowly... one that has time to set up all the connections and have legitimacy to each and every one... this was just a rush
and 2) you were really streatching to get the 1,000 word mark, weren't you? Trying to take on the 30 minute challange? or just writing in one night before bed? I'm asking because the first thing I thought when I read the ending was "Don't tell me what I did!"
either way, good story, wish there was more, but as it is, it was good
Goodnight... Well, it's 2:54 am,and I have a snow day tomorrow , so good story
But this is a genius pairing, hopefully there will be more in depth story's about this. Great job
We need an entire story based around this shipping. NAO!!!
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You know, I actually created a group the same day as the episode (IIRC) for this ship. It just didn't exactly take off, probably because of a lack of stories. Or, of course, the fact that I didn't particularly advertise it...
--arcum42
This story is incredibly bad.
Anyone who is a fan of Spike should be angry reading this, as it somehow manages to make him look worse than the writers of the show do.
I still prefer Coco with Marshmallow, but I suppose Spiked Coco is a cute little ship in its own right. Congrats on being one of the first people to think of this ship.
Your writing could certainly use some work. The formatting isn't very refined, there's hardly any detail, and the characters are pretty flat. As much as I hate to say it, this writing is what many people would consider "bad". I can tell that you were rushed for one reason or another while writing this, and I can tell you from my own experience that taking your time as much as possible can make a story exponentially better. I know that you're capable of doing more if you really put effort into it. You may also want to get someone to proofread for you, because getting an experienced opinion before releasing your work allows you to try and fix some issues, which makes both the present and future better.
Wow dude, im the 666th viewer does that mean that I'm going to stumble upon a Mlp horror story. Lol
Bit rushed but I liked it, a good start for a Spiked Coco shipping
but hey A for effort
Nice Shipping
This new ship is cute, this fic was rushed and lacking of anything that would make it believable or at least make us care about it, yet cute enough to call it bad. One time read material for sure, even so, good ship.
I must agree with everyone else that this was a bit rushed, BUT the shipping must be made. What you have brought to the Mlp multiverse is something that, in my opinion, MUST take root and grow.
That's unfortunate, because I actually really like the idea of SpiCo.
This was just bad, and frankly, I'm disappointed.. The grammar's crap, the story's rushed, it's just not very good in general. Which is a shame, because it's a great concept that just could have been done way better.
It twas obviously rushed. But still a cute ship and I hope somepony makes more!
I'm sorry but I feel like this was written by a kid, or something. The party's "kissing" scene and the talking on the train they both felt like they ware just thrown in them. I did enjoy it don't get me wrong, I just used this story as an template and use my imagination for the rest. All in all I'll give you a three out of five because I could see what you ware doing here but i couldn't just read it to be apart on it.
P.S. 1st is first that really bothered me for some reason.
yo amazing
This was a good story but it went kind of fast tho
I agree with most other comments that this was rushed. Although it wasn't too badly paced at the start, it seemed slapped together at the end. I like the concept and would like to see it explored.