hello. I don't really know what to put here. My friend made me a Brony. I do drawings for people who request them, so feel free to ask. I guess I wanted to start writing stories to go along with them
Shining Heart has an odd talent. He can feel the emotions of other ponies when he looks into their eyes. After bumping into Sunset Rains, a heart-broken mare, they both fall madly in love. (gross cooties) But is that enough to save them when a huge mistake is made, and what is with these ponies cutie marks? Also someone's ex is being a not so awesome pony.
Okay the last chapter is fixed and back up! I am officially done.
Except a cover image. I'll probably make one of those.
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Wait... wait.. wait. Let me get this straight. 2 Votes (including mine), really?
This is sooo under appreciated. I LOVE this... Well, alright some clichees here and there and a bit of mary sue.. but meh if it works for Twilight, why shouldn't it here?
I mean, sure. some people don't like mushy stuff... but I do darrnit... I'm somewhat of a romantic trapped inside of me.. with nooo escape... anyway ..:P
BUUUUT there is one thing that bugs me...
that it says 'complete'...
DON'T YOU DAAAAREEEEE TO STOP THIS NOW
.... please? 
Please continue this... maybe show how Shining and Sunset doing after what happened etc... So many possibilities...
Keep up the great work!
3695932 First off, it means a lot to me that you actually liked this and read it, and I want to thank you for pointing out the Mary Sue stuff. Also, I've been thinking about this and I finally made up my mind. To be honest, I had a ton of fun writing this story and I still had a couple ideas that I wanted to use, so I think I'm going to take your advice and keep it going. I have at least two more chapters planned out and I'm bored, so they might be up soon. Thanks again for all your support
HAHA WOOPS I meant to publish the "Changes" chapter with the main story. That's what that red dot next to the chapter was telling me.
Sorry if anyone got really confused when I ended it at "Complications"
Im still getting the hang of this.
Weeelll.. first of all: YAY! I'm even mentioned xD
Second of all: YAY²: MOAR CHAPTERS!
Thirtond..whatever... of all : Not sure if YAY³... I sense a disturbance in the force. I sense ponies dying... sending waves through the f... wait.. wrong film...
Anyway I'm really excited for the next chapters. Could be anything... In the end of Changes you asked what people would like to see... well, I don't mind a good clop chapter, as long it is well done and believable. It has to fit the rest and further the story maybe.
But the thing with the cutiemarks would be interesting as well... dayum...
You know what? I'm going to wait and see what you'll do.
So far I really enjoy this story.
I tried to write a story once as well aaand... well.. it sucked and died at some point.. so meh xD
Keep up the great work :)
Weee good chapter - from the fiction side. If something like that really happened.. well.. sorry. I think you get how I mean it.
I still don't understand how this story only has 2 upvotes. Really, I don't get it. I mean stories with OCs... alright might not be everyones cup of tea - but heck this one is pretty good.
I have to say that the ending did confuse me a little. I didn't really get right away that it was something in the new memory... could also be that I was just tired, since I've read it on the train in the morning... soo yeah.
Anyway... I would sooo vote this up 10 times more if I could...
Sorry it took so long for me to answer.
SPOILER ahead!!!!!!!!!
Yes, this feels a lot better, but I have to say that Shining seems to take it way too easily that he suddenly sees the love of his live again. i mean he should be totally confused etc... Especially after a year.
And what will her parents say?
But all in all, it is a great story and I really enjoyed it :)