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Minalkra


The High Pope of Antagonistic Advocacy

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A young filly wakes up in the Everfree with memories not of her own nor of any creature that ever walked the face of Equestria. Meanwhile, Princess Luna is still having difficulty remembering her own past and is tormented by ancient scenes of chaos and death that seem so distant from the world she now finds herself in. Twilight and her friends get involved in an effort to help heal old wounds but what do they do when the innocent are guilty by proxy? What will wash away the sins of the past when they are only ours through blood?

Illustration by Melancholy Sanctuary, used with permission

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This is not HiE. Not exactly, anyway. Also, that description, while 'poetic' and accurate in it's own way, makes this story seem way more emo than it really is. At least, as much as I've done thus far.

Edit: This is not a retake on Past Sins. At least, not consciously. I had the idea for a while and actually started it before Past Sins (I think) before giving up. If I was affected by Past Sins, well, can't help that and I hope it's not the case.

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Comments ( 22 )

Feels like this might end up being a little personal author twist on Past Sins.

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Actually, I was playing with this idea when Past Sins came out. I think I even mentioned it in the comments on EqD that the ideas are similar. I don't know if I had posted anything by that point though. Eh.

Will keep reading then! -waits for next update-

Chapter two has been posted without a pre-reader so if anyone finds anything really wrong, please let me know and I'll see if I can fix it. Consequently, it might change slightly in word count or otherwise but the essential information and structure should remain.

well i must say after that clifhanger ffffffffffffffffffffff to me so far so good and i wish there was more chapters right now!! you my good pony gets a :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache: for your hard work keep up this good work!

As a user of cliffhangers, I can't complain, but I want to, oh how I want to. :twilightsmile: Looking forward to what happens next.

This is a well written story. And don't worry about being simular to Past Sins. It's inevitable as time goes on that more and more stories will be have simularities to other stories. Just let the characters actions, events, and writing speak for itself. You've already seemed to have put some distance between Past Sins and your story. Just keep it up and have fun with the story.

The split perspective between Twilight and the filly works. Personally I wouldn't abandon or change it. :twilightsmile:

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Yes, and with how ... something is going to work out, I don't know if I can. But I don't want to 'concentrate' on Twilight. I've always had in my head who will be the primary caretaker of the as-yet unnamed filly and it is not Twilight. But suddenly switching to the primary caretaker from Twilight, that might be too big a perspective change.

All my stories start with Twilight's perspective I guess, a habit I got from the show before they began to open up the plot to the other main (or mane) six characters. Her predilection for research has always been an excellent 'beginning hook' for any story as well. A bit overused in my case but ... well. Cliche's are cliched for a reason.

I hope this isn't the 'update schedule' I'll be working under but I'm not a very fast writer. Sorry ...

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Ha! No need to apologise for not being a Speedy McType-Fast. I meant to get the latest chapter of my story out last Wednesday, and was working on it when I noticed your story had updated, but probably wont have it ready until next Wednesday.

Hmm, if Twilight isn't going to be the primary caretaker, I am then making a guess that it'll be Fluttershy? Using Twilight's OCD and Research is an easy hook, and the story has been rather good so far so I can't find fault to be honest. What I've read so far doesn't make me doubt, in any form, that you wont manage the perspective transitions fine. I don't think a sudden shift would be too big a change. Actually, if I am right and you plan on having Fluttershy the adoptive mother (again, guessing!) I would, personally, start the next chapter from her POV. And you don't have to dump Twilight's perspective for good. But like I said, I'm fairly confident you'll manage just fine. :twilightsmile:

yay cant wait for the next chapter

huh, yet another fantasic story. definitely keeping an eye on this one.

Hell yes. What a marvellous chapter
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Please do go on :pinkiehappy:

yay cant wait for the next chapter when is it? :twilightsmile:

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Thank you. I hope it wasn't confusing. There are some parts that I struggled with.

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Uhm, later? This last one took almost a month to get done ... oh, I hope they don't all take that long. I'm sorry for the wait, I haven't even started the next one yet.

For everyone else that read it, thank you for your time. I hope you enjoyed it. If there is anything strange or confusing or whathaveyou, don't hesitate to ask about it. Or message me. Again, thank you all.

698142 I know lol just saying enjoyed it :twilightsmile:

Actually none of them are that confusing imo. It's just delicious :pinkiehappy:

That was an excellent chapter. Felt a bit like a medical drama at times with the details of the doctors and their procedures. I enjoyed it. :twilightsmile: Excellent job with Twilight and her magical skill and quick thinking, you balanced her natural power and talent nicely with the danger and unfamiliarity of the spell nicely. Bravo sir, have some moustaches. :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache:

Just read this tonight and I'm ever so glad I did, I await the fateful day you release more of this gem.:moustache:

Best... Story... Evar!!!!:rainbowkiss:

Wait a second... "On Hiatus"? On Hiatus?? ON HIATUS??!?!!! FFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUU-:flutterrage:

I want more of it.

Well, I've been waiting for nine weeks.

I must remove it from my list. :fluttercry::applecry::raritydespair:

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I'm sorry. This has fallen very much on my back burner in favor of my more popular work. I want to get back to it eventually but it might not be for a long while still.

I thought I'd read this a year+ ago but I check it again only to realize I hadn't for some reason. This is actually really fantastic. The level of detail and thought put in the back story and the sisters relationships was great. Their olde speak was brilliant too by the way, easily the best I've seen thus far. The scenery and movement descriptions were great too, well above the quality you expect to see fanfiction after a time. Also, the amount of information and details in the surgery scene really painted a desperate and intense picture. Well done.

I would say the Fluttershy attacking the Manticore scene struck me as funny trying to imagine her scrambling up it while it's flailing. Not exactly the effect you were aiming for but it left me with a raised eyebrow and an amused smirk.

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