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Emerald Knight
Just your everyday teenager who likes metal music and ponies and works for a living and has high hopes for going no where in life
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3567406 it will only get better man trust me that's not all of the chapter I'm still writing it I will keep this kind of writing up till the end unless its not to liked then I'll reboot the story and I still need some help for my other story it's going to be called The Lone Man I hope I can get you to proofread that to but I'm still working on it so thanks for the help with it man
It's good this far. Tip time: Don't use paragraphs when a character says something. Use comma to separate words, example: "Can I see him, dad?" Try to describe the surroundings with some details. Keep up the good work, and you should get better as you write
Jesus Christ man get an editor.
3575742 Yeah sorry about that suck at grammar and spelling i don't ask anything from anyone but if they want to edit i'll let them
This story has good potential. The best way to get readers is to find a editor, and proofreader to review each chapter for mistakes.
I am interested... Please, I'm not saying that you suck at grammar, but get an editor. I saw many errors. Consider editing them.
3577962 I will fix the first chapter tomorrow I will try anyway but I'm about to go to work
Is this dead?
3915232 No not dead just working on chapter 2 and its hard to write with school and a job getting in the way
Wait, what the hell was Doc Mitchell doing in Vault 3? He was from Vault 21!
Also, Vault 3 attacked by Legion? What? Have you even BEEN TO Vault 3 in-game? It was populated by FIENDS that slaughtered all the original dwellers when they were trying to contact the outside world.
Also, if Rapahel was a Vault Dweller, why the hell didn't he get a Pip-boy for his tenth birthday?
Good lord, this just raises so many questions...
4006873 Don't worry it hade been a while since I had played it when I wrote planning to fix it, its on my list of things to fix, after a few other things left to fix