Many believe they know the story of Discords rise to power. It has been taught in history books and songs for millennia. But all of them have been deceived, by none other than the master of Chaos himself. He is not alone in his deception, the one he protects through his trickery still lives, as does her sister. This story is for all those who wish for the curtain of lies to be peeled back, there are three who know the truth and this is their story. A story of where the act ends and the person begins.
A replacement for my other story Beforeskin, this time it will focus on Celestia and Discord's relationship.
Inspired by the Vocaliod series Daughter of Evil.
Chapters (2)
It looks like a giant text wall, please try and fix that by putting an extra enter between each paragraph.
378087 I'm not planning to do that, I want the format on this one to be more like a book. Sorry.
Nice plot idea, just make sure to spellcheck, I caught a few misspelled 'through's in there.
The perspective is fascinating, although try to more of a voice to Discord. Show the world through his eyes. There are snippets here and there where Discord has a strong voice, and other times the reader has to work to remember who is telling the story.
Keep up the great work!
378340 The reason for that is he's not the Discord we all know yet, he doesn't quite have the same outlook. The potential is there but he hasn't blossomed yet.
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Ok, but if you ever think about submitting it to eqd or anything like that, they will reject it based solely on lack of formatting.
Such a clever poem. really sets the scene for the Story :D Reading now.
Gosh, that poem was beautiful. Very lyrical, and definitely had the "old wife's tale" or "fairy tale" theme that I feel you were going for