Sweetie Belle has lived a great life so far. She was thankful for her loving sister, many friends, and parents that she would do anything for. One day her life is turned upside down. She was reported to the robot police. Now the only things she's thankful for is the pegasus pony Rainbow Dash who watches over her and her will to survive. Sweetie Belle isn't sure where the road will take her, but she walks anyway.
Rated teen for some mild language and gore.
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Robot police?
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Close. Thought Police.
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Oh hah i get it Robo Cops.
FIW reference?
3384666 yeah :
hmmm, a little to short, but the idea is sound. you need to add detail, though. and the characters don't seem to act like themselves. also, what happened to appleblooms accent?
magic is witchcraft. lol
3385904 you'll hear more of her accent in the later chapters. It also gets longer too this chapter was shorter because it's starting off the story
I couldn't help but think of this when I saw Robot police.
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I'm tracking this one.
The chapters will get longer as the story goes on. I just wanted everyone to know that
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Because robots kick ass, my dear friend.
Interesting story, though it's moving pretty fast. Maybe slow down a bit on the pace of the plot and focus on more character interactions. Rainbow seemed to just casually turn in Sweetie Belle, and it would have been interesting to see her reasoning. Also, Sweetie Belle doesn't think she's a robot? Then why can she fly with rocket hooves? I mean, she'd have to have some non-robot reason for that, right?
Keep writing! I'm looking forward to seeing where things go. I just wish we could get into the characters' heads a little more. Maybe a little more worldbuilding. Why is there a robot police, etc? (I am guessing this isn't in the Friendship is Witchcraft universe but is inspired by it.)
3552713 Thanks for reading. I was planning to slow it down soon. I like you're questions and they will be answered in the later chapters.
dafryk did i just read???