The world is a large place and full of ponies who have lost their way or fled from the horrors that can be found around them. Two lovers have taking a journey together to rid themselves of the horrible ponies they once loved and adored are soon to find that they are not alone. Lost souls that drift about are drawn together to help each other and through the simplest acts the two lovers will find more than rest inside a cave that will shelter them from more than just a storm.
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My apologies for my failure to remember to help you further.
This is excellent. As much a pleasant experience as with your other fiction.
A moment of respite.
Excellent work, dear Author.
I'm not going to say this is a bad story, because it's not. Apart from a bit of lavender unicorn syndrome, there are no major flaws here, and you clearly told the story you wanted to tell in the way you wanted to tell it.
With that said, this feels . . . easy. You've got three out of the five mainstays of sad ponyfic--the hunted lesbians, the despised mixed-caste romance, and the crippling injury that does nothing to dull the victim's beauty. More to the point, all you have to say about them are a few easy platitudes about home and safety. There doesn't seem to be a deeper meaning or message to this story, and it reminds me way too much of those books from the nineteenth century where a cute blonde Christian girl dies of tuberculosis while teaching those around her to embrace God.
3349388 ow but yer entitled to that opinion. I didn't try for a message though. It was something I wrote that has been stuck in my head fer a while. One of the things I write to keep my questionable skills from dulling. Glad you enjoyed it even a little through the lack of anything larger happening.