Congratulations, citizens! You now have honor of being presented with the writings of the roman god of eloquence and poetry himself, Mercury. Prepare your eyes for a non-stop cavalcade of pure brain-vomit, typed up in approximately 10 to 15 minutes each, with the goal of maximizing word count while still seeming slightly coherent.
Posted without any editing at all, even self-editing.
I'll try to make sure there's at least one message or some semblance of a plot arc, but no promises.
If I make one that's truly atrocious, I just won't include it, if that makes you feel any better.
Chapters (8)
Maybe I should try seeing how many of these I can squeeze out in one day.
I rather like these. A couple were... a little confusing, but overall I like this series. I hope to see more of these in the near future.
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Wow, thanks. I'm glad you like them. Some of them confuse me too. These are a writing practice exercise for me, so I'm basically just writing as things pour out of my brain, and sometimes right in the middle of it I can tell it won't make sense at the end, and they stay unedited :p Most of them come out abysmally and I don't publish them :p These are the ones that are somewhat tolerable :p
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Did you like Eternally Yours? I'm making it into a proper story right now, with some editing and more words.
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I did indeed like it. I'll have to keep an eye out for it when it comes out.
Naughty Poker, Eternally Yours, and The Snake and the Angel are my favorites out of what's currently here. A little comedy, a little drama, and a little holy-crap-my-heart-just-stopped, respectively.
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Here's a link. Still unpublished. Let me know if I made it better, or worse.
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Also, I'd like to do a full story like Naughty Poker, but it's hard for me to portray the characters out-of-character like that. It was fun in a ten minute exercise making the characters into a bunch of catcalling slobs, and overly excited perverted gigglers enjoying a game of poker in a smokey room, but I don't know if I could write like that for hours :p I'd be too tempted to start making them act more realistic.
I think I'm doomed to never be able to write comedy.
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I'd say better, for sure. The increased detail makes everything much clearer (not that I don't like stories that make you think), and the conversation adds to the characterization and helps to show what their relationship is like at this point. I think it's good.
Yeah, comedy is tough to work with, especially something absurd like that. I've never gotten the hang of it either.