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I enjoyed the first chapter and like the idea, so here's some pointers to make the story even better. Hope you don't mind
Russians use metrics.
POW confusion. You can't really say "me" if you write in 3rd person.
I like where this is going
Well this is pretty good so far, easy to mess up taught. I hope this doesn't end up as the usual guy with troubled past and a gun in Equestria. Many of them suck balls.
My guess is that he was transported into the everfree along with those Germans and said Germans met the wild life.
2736625 Yeah but those that are good are better than those of people without troubled pasts. It all depends on whether Mr.Author can handle this the right way.
Keep it coming, this intrigues me.
Duuuuude. I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Needs more!
This needed to be longer. O well back to waiting for more
This is amazing just try and make chapters longer.
What the others said make them longer
*claps* truly sir you have began a masterpiece, i am impressed, just try to make the chapters longer and don't mess up the first contact stage
I'll take frequent, short hits.
I NEED MY FIX.
Also, loving how this isn't a romanticized or 'woe is me' portrayal of a soldier.
Can't wait for more
, just dont mess up the interactions with ponies, most story's go downhill from there. Good luck.
I just can't hold it anymore: you keep calling rifle just Nagant which is ignorant at least and insulting at most. "Mosin-Nagant" rifle is actually just "Mosin" in Russia (country that ordered, produced and used that rifle) and, as long as I know, that "-Nagant" part, that is used in west, came just from surname bearer's attempts of gathering attention because actual rifle have minimal amount of parts influenced by his design. There were, however, weapon called just "Nagant", but that was revolver.
2781287 It would be okay as long as he would follow up Nagant with rifle, or 'Nagant's Rifle' but that sorta sounds queer.
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It was more about the fact that there is no "Nagant Rifle" in first place.
2808068 Of course it wasn't its official title, but I digress titles are used and changed much like with the AK47 it is called the Kalashnikov or Kalash by many soldiers it is is by no means its full name or real name, they're nick names given to them by the troops, like the blooper, the burp gun, Spandau, plumber's Nightmare, gimpy. Ect
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...Actually there never was weapon called "AK47" either, and this itself is a nickname.
But I was talking about the fact that Nagant's input into rifle was miserable and I never saw his surename only as this rifle name. And even more, this story is written from POV of Soviet soldier, who was issued "Mosin's 3-line rifle", without any "Nagant" at all. It was "Mosinka" or 3-liner.
2810322 AK-47 was the Avtomat Kalashnikov's designated and aconymized name, much like the Ar-15, Su-27, Su-25, Mi-24, Mi-28, UH-1, Me-109, the STG-44 and so on. And your urge to be completely and utterly politically correct doesn't give any more justice to the fact that people indefinitely understand what the rifle is, so giving them their full name is redundant and serves little purpose other than complaining just to complain.
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Nope. First AK was officially named just AK, numberless, not AK-47.
It's not about political correctness, it's about calling things by names they never wore. AK being called AK-47 is easily explainable, but Mosin's 3-liner being called just "Nagant" - not. Here was first place I saw to do so.
2816796 Using 'Nagant' is extremely easy to explain as a part of the rifles name and the designer's name is included Captain Sergei Mosin, Léon Nagant. Just like calling the AK-47 a Kalashnikov it's no different.
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Yeah, 1 small part compared to whole other rifle, ignoring even original name. So, in your example, it would be like calling AK "Bulkin".
2821589 No, because even you understood what it meant and using excessive and prolonged names where a shortened one can be use and is quicker, using anything long that is redundant when you have shorter substitutes as long as everyone can understand. You understand what he was talking about the exact rifle and the other text coheres to how he describes it, other than you I haven't see any other people confused with the name it was given. Don't complain just because you personally think the technicality used for the rifle is not proper its pointless and borderline irrelevant.
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Now that was strange. Where I said that it should be called only by full name? What I said, is that while shortening re removed wrong part, and I complain about it.
And, "Mosin" is shorter that "Nagant", so it's you, if anyone, suggest a longer name.
PLEASE I NEED MORE FAST. SHIT'S GOING DOWN!
This comment section turned into an argument why a Mosin-Nagant can't be called Nagant.
Then, the AK47 was thrown in.
Honestly, if you want my opinion, you can call whatever you want to the rifle as long as we know what it is. Call it Mosin, Nagant, sniper rifle, the standard issue rifle of the Red Army, that rifle he used to shoot Germans, and so on and so on.
And by the way, Rommel, go back to North Africa, your Panzer Divisions are falling asleep due to the lack of orders.
Suddenly blood, gore and 6k words. Latter is most surprising, I think. While there are several mistypes, definitely worth the wait.
I think you used the wrong term for sniper. I think it's Scharfschütze. But if it's simply a plot device, my mistake.
Vascojii
Well now look what you done he's coming back you dumpkompf.
2842713 unglaublich... If history does not device me the Afrika Korps was abandoned by Hitler, and were captured. Rommel was forced to kill himself. The reason for the lack of orders was Rommel's hesitation to follow Hitler's "victory or death" command feeling his men were not expendable trash.
so did any of the germans survive?
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Fanaticism has its ups and downs.
To be honest, Hitler would have made a good politic and a below average Military commander (in any rank).
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If I'm not wrong, at least two of them are dead, the last one was still begging for help after the sniper shots.
I also have a question, does anyone know the average ammo a Soviet sniper carries?
He'll start running low on ammunition soon.
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To be honest, Hitler was a good politician.
Googling revealed that Soviet uniform during war by regulation included at least one 6-clip ammo bag and bandolier for 12-14 (info varies) clips. Plus unknown amount of ammo in bag he was carrying.
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Seems slightly overkill to give him a hundred and something rounds for his sniper rifle.
But I guess he should be carrying alot of ammo, because if I'm not wrong, the doctrines dictated that sharpshooters were supposed to work with regular infantry.
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Dunno, just listed standard rifleman's equipment. Some soldiers, however, was lacking bandolier, for unspecified reason, be it lack of ammo or bandoliers themselves, or considering so much to be excessive. Latter is most likely IMO.
2847654 I agree, Hitler should have listened to his officers, but I am glad he didn't or the outcome of the war could have been very different.
BIATCH! get your ass PWND by the russian!
I feel sorry for the Germans
Uh, wait, why am I here again, oh look a story... (Reads...) MOAR...
... ( Looks at comments) 
(glances at profile name, then Back down and sees Erwin Rommel) yeah, I really shouldn't be here... 
That escalated quickly...