A Shadow Within a Rainbow

by Shadow Fighter

A Shadow Within a Rainbow

A Shadow Within a Rainbow

As night came upon the fellow stallion, Shadow Flight was wondering what to do about the situation that seemed to be getting more out of hand as the days rolled by. He got up from his restless slumber and made his way to his bathroom. He looked in the mirror to find a copy of himself staring back at him with dark green eyes, baggy from lack of sleep. His hair was a long black and red mess, and his dark gray fur didn’t seem to look any better. His chest was bare and he wore pants that ended near the top of his hooves.

He had to admit to himself that he didn’t look half bad. He is a strong stallion. Some of the pegasi in Cloudsdale even refer to him as the pegasus equivalent of Big Macintosh, but he was nowhere near the raw power of Snowflake, even if he might have used some kind of enchantment spell or something. Being a Pegasus, one has to keep up with their physical abilities and he did just that.

He stretched his wings which ached from an hour of tossing and turning. His hands were clasped on the edge of the sink. His eyes were bloodshot and he was still tired from this lack of sleep.

“Sweet Celestia, how much longer will this last?” The stallion’s voice was gruff from being weary, and the night had just begun. “Why of all the mares did it have to be her?” He asked his mirrored clone with him knowing that this was a rhetorical question. He already knew why he was in this situation in the first place.

He heard a light tapping at his door. Surprised, he exited his bedroom to open the front door which was across from it. He found a pegasus that he didn’t recognize due to the hood over their head and was yet again surprised to see somepony here at night requesting his presence. They of course were wearing a dark hoodie, baggy blue jeans. He saw slight curves as well as a medium sized bust size. He concluded that this pony was a mare.

“M-may I come in?” A soft voice but hoarse exited the cloaked figure. He gave a slight nod and allowed her entry into his apartment.

“Is there something that you need miss, food, shelter, maybe a drink perhaps?” Shadow was worried for the mare. No pony usually comes in the middle of the night to a stranger’s apartment, unless they are generally in trouble or need of something. They moved to the ‘living room’ of said apartment and the mare sat down on the couch, Shadow across from her on a small chair.

The mare some odd noises that Shadow did not seem to register for few seconds and it sounded like, crying? The mare slowly revealed herself to the stallion and what he saw shocked him. It was Rainbow Dash, her face showing a sign of a black eye and her lip seemed to be cut and quivering, tears running down her face.

“Shadow, I-I couldn’t take it anymore, I finally broke up with him a-and…” She stopped and put her palms in her hands, trying to sob the pain away from not only her wounds but her heart. This of course was Shadows fault. He hooked them up in the first place.

At first the relationship went quite well for a while, the two seemed to be a perfect fit for each other, they had the same attributes, goals, and even personalities. But as time went on, it started to take a bad turn. He lost almost everything. His family’s respect, most of his friends, and his reputation were all gone. He took all of his bent up anger out on Rainbow Dash and she didn’t even see it coming.

After a few more weeks of this cruel torture, she finally had enough, she fought back almost killing him in the process and she finally left him, with these final marks to prove it. She came here to tell her friend the ‘bad’ news.

“Dash, it’s all over now, you won’t have to worry about him anymore.” Shadow said trying to make her feel better.

“Do you think so?” Rainbow Dash lifter her head, eyes red from crying and tears marks now showing on her face.

“I know so...” Shadow nodded, giving his cyan friend a small smile. “…and if he tries to hurt you again, just tell me and I will handle the situation.”

Rainbow’s face lit up with happiness. She rushed over to her friend and gave him a strong hug. Shadow was caught off guard by the sudden act of the mare, but embraced his friend nonetheless. With him she was safe.

Later that night, Rainbow decided that she was going to spend the night in Shadows apartment due to the amount of night time there still was and the fact that it was too dark to fly home. So she decided to hang out and talk with the young stallion for a bit. He was her friend after all and very good friend at that.

After Shadow was able to treat Rainbow’s wounds with and ice pack, he decided to bring out some alcoholic beverage of choice. Non-surprisingly he and Dash both chose Apple family Hard Apple Cider. While he got the drinks from his cabinet, he decided to Converse with his equally aged Pegasus friend.

“So, besides the recent incident how have things been going? Have you been able to get into the Wonderbolts yet?”

Dash laughed “Yea, and I also sprouted a horn and became an alicorn.”

“Oh come on Dash, don’t be such a smart ass.” He had two glasses in each hand filled with the cider and ice.

“Yea, well have you been able to beat me in a race yet?” she gave a cocky grin to the gray stallion.

“As a matter of fact yes I have, three times actually.” He chuckled as he sipped his cider.

“Those didn’t count! I was…Distracted! Yea that’s it Distracted”

“Yea….right.” He said sarcastically. “You sure were distracted by the sight of Soarin and Big Mac alright” He chuckled again.

Rainbow blushed “No I wasn’t, I saw Spitfire fly by and I waved at her!”

“You were probably ogling her too for all I know.” He chuckled again.

“Oh shut the buck up!” She blushed more intensely at his statement and resorted to punching him in the arm. “At least I don’t drool over her like you do Mister Smooth”

“Wow Dash, I’m surprised, that punch didn’t hurt, and for your information I don’t drool over mares, I get quirky over them.” He said sarcastically. As he did they both shared a light-hearted laugh.

Dash pushed a question she had that bugged her after his statement. “Then why don’t you act that way with me?”

Shadow was taken off guard by the question and blushed slightly. He tried to speak but when he did so he stuttered.

“Well t-that’s because y-your one of my b-best friends, not only that but one of t-the closest I h-have.” Rainbow took note of this as well as the blush on his face.

They sat in silence for what seemed to be a year, slowly drinking their cider glasses, emptying them slowly. After both glasses were empty, rainbow broke the awkward silence with a rather awkward question.

“Shadow, do you have feeling for somepony?” As soon as she asked this, her cheeks turned slightly red. Shadow however did not notice, but slowly answered her question.

“Yea, as a matter of fact, I do.” He paused. “ Its somepony who you can easily befriend due to her kindness. Somepony who is loyal to those who she can call a friend.” Shadow turned his face towards her and her blush became more intense.

“It’s somepony who strives to be the best at what they do, and no matter what happens to them, they get back up off the ground, brush themselves off and keep trying, no matter what the challenge is.” He moved closer towards her as she did to him until their faces were merely apart.

“That somepony is you Dashie.” Rainbow Dash is flattered by his words. She knows what to do but is still too stunned by his words to move. Shadow decides to take the initiative and kisses her. Rainbow returns the kiss. She pushes Shadow onto his back, bodies now touching, kissing him in full force. They both feel the ‘sparks fly’ between them as they both intertwine their tongues passionately, neither of them fight for dominance.

As Rainbow retracts her mouth from his, they both breathe heavily from loss of breathe and they both lay there on the couch in silence for what seems to be a blissful eternity. Rainbow then speaks again.

“I never figured you to be interested in a mare like me… guess I am that awesome huh?” Rainbow giggles and while Shadow chuckles. Rainbow and Shadow eventually fell asleep after a few minutes. The whole night was crazy enough for the both of them and they both needed a well-deserved rest.

The best thing that came of this evening, is that Rainbow has finally found her Shadow again.

Author's Note:

Remember, this is my first story, more will come...eventually. Give me feedback on what I might need to work on and stuff like that. :D

Comments

[Twilight Best Pony]

Huh not bad... not bad I give 7 out of 10 spikes

[DarkShad0wX13]

Interesting. Short, but interesting.

[Zinger]

YOU ARE A GOD!!!!!!

[Shadow Fighter]

2700175 Why thank you!

[SoarinDashSpaz]

I like it, but everything happen so fast

[593322]

Wonderful. Just make the next one longer.

[Cloverman The Purple]

There are mistakes, such as:
He had two glasses of ice filled with the cider in each hand. (Did he have four in total?
I suggest: He had two glasses filled with ice and cider, one in each hand.)

His chest was bare and he wore a pants that ended near the top of his hooves.(delete the "a")

even If he might had used some kind of enchantment spell or something.(if/ have)

Just my observations, I tend to be picky. Good job though; I really enjoyed it.

[lyraiscool]

2700175

i'm in awesome random k-razy world right now. bleach is one on my fave anime ur so awesome! yay!

[D5ky]

This was good, but it needed to be a lot longer. For instance, you could have started where Shadow introduces Rainbow and his other friend, and shown how their 'happy' relationship slowly deteriorates, all while lightly hinting at the fact that Shadow and Rainbow were really meant for each other.
But still, take a like.

[Zinger]

2701189 Thanks

[Leonzilla]

2700737“Oh come on Dash, don’t be such a smart ass.” He had two glasses of ice filled with the cider in each hand.
So I know this have being mentioned before, but I just wasn't sure whether you meant that the glasses ware made of ice or that the glasses ware filled with ice that was filled with cider.

In a nutshell: I wonder why did Shadow hook Dash up with his friend if he had feelings for her. You didn't provide any explanation for it, that added to your quick pace gave me the impression that Shadow was just taking advantage of the mare in grief.

“I never figured you to be interested in a mare like me… guess I am that awesome huh?” Rainbow giggles and while Shadow chuckles.

I don't know whether that was your intention but I liked it.

Also I recommend you stretch the moment above, I think is the perfect spot to clear their feelings and If you do so, I doubt the ending would feel rushed anymore.
In what it concerns your ability too write I feel you have a solid and emotional delivery, now you can focus on developing your ideas and the plot on your future stories.
Congratulations on your first story I hope this was helpful

[lyraiscool]

2701374 no prob.but i gotta say if it were me id do hollow ichigo for my profile pic. but lyra is best pony (in my case) so i must go along with my name.

[The Flash]

Short but sweet. I would very much like to see a sequel of some description, as I thoroughly enjoyed this

[Moonshine-Dusk]

you describe them like humans yet use pony phrases as far as i have noticed. pleasse clarify why you dont just fully humanize them and give it a human tag?

[Shadow Fighter]

2709042 IT is because they are anthromorphic...do you know what that means?

[Moonshine-Dusk]

2712074uh... Hal human half pony? I have to admit though I rarely find a humanized equestrian story and it saddens me. So what your saying is they're humanoid but have hooves, wings and other features?

[Shadow Fighter]

2712111 Correct.

[Moonshine-Dusk]

2720884 I don't care about the wing part but the hooves thing weirds me out.

[Shadow Fighter]

2722261 well that's anthro for ya.

[Bumble Berry]

I just read the title and haven't actually read it yet, but that dirty joke of yours...

[OMEGA9350]

Well done my friend, but must be continued.

[Viola Strings]

you my good sir, are a genius

[geekmaster]

pretty good for a first attempt.

[Slothic]

Glorious.

[Mist Shaker]

It's really not that bad, but the one thing I think should have been done is including a scene the next day showing shadow beating the buck out of the guy that did it to her. My only question is, who was the stallion that beat her the way she explained???

And for such a valiant attempt to write something that people loved you deserve a victory like.

[Aces High]

This is one of the few stories I come back to when I need to read something with actual thought put into it. Well done.

[OMEGA9350]

So beautiful ;~;

[Sille]

Rainbow Dash, crying after an abusive relationship? Get real. She'd beat eleven different kinds of shit out of the guy and move on with her life.

[evil-within]

Sille
yea but theres one thing you need too learn is the stongest people cry the hardst.

[evil-within]

Story is really good and I hope you continue

[Shadow Fighter]

4897244 I probly will just been busy for a while.

[Darthdarius117]

You said that this fic would be the first of many............ Ssssooooo what's going on dude?

[Darthdarius117]

4440136 I think you need to look more on this subject bro.

[Shadow Fighter]

5555387
I am a very busy person, and there is never enough time for me to write and publish.

[Darthdarius117]

5557200 I understand

[RNBW]

Shadow Flight. Take good care of her.

[Rye Snoot]

It's pretty good i give at least 9/10 The thing I like is the horny part XD