Hurt by wolves, and on a chance encounter. Anon and Fluttershy cross paths, and their lives both change.
For better, or for worse is yet to be seen.
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>30k word chapter
Jeez man. Break that up.
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I prefer doing huge batch posts so people can save time in downloading only once, and then going at their own pace. Sorry if its not your cup of tea.
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I can grok that, it's just that the vast majority of people on Fimfic have the attention span of a brain-damaged goldfish and most of them will pass on chapters over 10k.
Well. This is kick ass so far. What's next?
Great story there bro, is there a sequel?
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Right now, nothing. Work has been very time consuming, and its really put a damper on my story writing. Maybe in a couple of weeks I can add more to this when work frees up.
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Yeah, but I wouldn't call it a sequel, more of a continuation. In either case, I hope to continue this soon.
2676955 aww… ok. I can see why it would be time consuming, what with it being 30,000 words at part one.
I like it so far. Really hoping the best for Fluttershy and Anon. Also, hears to hoping the get together!
I'll read this.... eventually. 30k words is no small task by any means.
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Only time will tell, glad you are liking it so far.
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Its understandable, its a big read.
I have to say I enjoyed this first part very much ::D however I would strongly recommend an editor or proofreader of the sort it would greatly help on the small incosistancies that happen in the story or the formatting
such as
“Oh silly~ I asked Twilight, to ask Princess Celestia, to ask your wife, to tell me.” She grins as Tide looks over at the princess, Celestia nods confirming what she said was true.
“I see…thank you.”
uhh wasn't that his girlfriend? not his wife yet?
or
It took a couple of days, but the doctor finally came by to evaluate you today. Resting in bed, he looks over the gash.
“The swelling has gone down, and it looks to be healing pretty well, you may not even need a cast so long as you take it easy.”
“Just give me a cast please; I’m tired of lying in bed all the time.”
“I see, if that’s the case, I’ll start the preparations.”
The doctor did a spiffy job in wrapping your arm up, feeling the hard outer shell; you look up at him as he packs his stuff up.
“With this you can move around more easily, but it’s still important that you get plenty of bed rest and DO NOT apply any pressure to your arm.”
“I got it, thank you.”
you repeated this paraghraph twice in a row
anyway ya things like that ^^ overall I DID enjoy the story :) but shouldn't there be a romance tag on this? since this is in the humans falling in love with ponies group? and this being a romance anyway?
anyway when you pic this back up ill be sure to read so fave and an upvote :)
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Darn, I thought I had fixed the repeating paragraph. Guessed I used the incorrect version. As for the proofreading, I'm looking for somebody to take on that job, but to be honest, its not on my priority list at the moment.
This is a fun hobby, but I don't really take proofreading as seriously as I need too in light of other more pressing concerns. I'll see if I can fix that double entry though.
Also, as far I know, the AiE group is mostly romance, but its not limited to just that. And as a mild spoiler, I don't really intend to make this a romance, if I change that I'll adjust accordingly.
Thank you for the feedback, I do appreciate it.
2689607 GASP! TwT I see how it is anywho :P I see I was just sayin ^^
I've been in love with this story since I raided your pastebin. Glad to finally find the prose version.
I want more. Please?
its seems a bit rushed...
Nice story. But Racist Rarity left a bad taste in my mouth.
Also that Tide told his GF that Anon killed two colts. It's one thing to "warn" someone but to lie like that? No thank you.
Sequel please!