Scootaloo gets passed a note in class that contains how another foal in her class feels about her, but Cheerilee takes the note before she can find out who sent it and so Scootaloo sets out to find who sent her the love note.
Warning: This story contains rule 63 and is set in the same universe as a flutter of the heart so expect references to Rarishy/ Flarity.
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its moving along. I kinda want sweetie to go to twi for help but I know that wouldn't go good. keep it up though
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thanks for the imput, i have already started chapter 4 but due to my unpredictable work rota i'm not sure when i can finish it.
that said i hope you'll enjoy the ride.
Can you please capitalize the story title?
Besides that, I'll read it.
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Done.
To be honest I'd totally forgotten to capitalize it when i first posted it.
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Not capitalizing stories detract people from reading it.
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I'll bear that in mind for the future
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Also capitalize Flutter of The Heart
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Got it, thank you
So far it is relay getting interesting
Keep up the good work an all cuz this can go far
great. just great.
you gotta love multiple personality disorder
I kind of wished that the book sub-plot would have gone somewhere and that their love was explored to a greater extent as opposed to just its results, but other than that I liked it.
4195760 tbh there was a lot of cut story because i felt it would start to drag otherwise.
The book was intended to act as a spark for her downward spiral and was going to be found later by the others, but the reverse spell was going to be missing.
Anyway; im glad you liked it other than that and i'll be revisiting the cmc for another story in the far future, so i'll take your advice to heart.
This was good. The writing needs work, particularly in the dialogue which sounds a bit lifeless at times; there were also a few story elements that I felt didn't need to be there, like Apple Bloom's sudden romantic interest and the copious gore at the end. But those aside, this was a great concept executed with plenty of atmosphere and emotion, and it kept me interested to the end.
5655720 im glad you enjoyed it; i know in retrospect that there's still a lot of flaws with my writing, but as they say practice makes perfect. as i've said many times before, there were lots of stuff i wanted to do more with but due to my work life and my fear that the story would start to drag, i simply didnt expand or do anything with most of the ideas. either way im glad you took the time to read it and that you enjoyed the ride.
5655720 im glad you enjoyed it; i know in retrospect that there's still a lot of flaws with my writing, but as they say practice makes perfect. as i've said many times before, there were lots of stuff i wanted to do more with but due to my work life and my fear that the story would start to drag, i simply didnt expand or do anything with most of the ideas. either way im glad you took the time to read it and that you enjoyed the ride.
I absolutely love this story. I've read it twice and both times I felt my heart break. I love it. Good job
5663768 thank you for such high praise. im so glad you liked my story and it means alot to me that you enjoyed it. if it isnt too much to ask may i ask you what you liked most about it.
5667138 Well you see that's kind of hard. i have many things that i love in the book. I'll list them if its all the same. I loved the Thought process and development of the characters. I really liked that one quote of appleblooms in the end , “She loves ya Scoots… she loves ya so much that she… that she…” Apple Bloom sobbed and closed her eyes in shame. “She drove herself crazy!!” That type just shows how powerful of an emotion sweetie had for scootaloo. i liked the flarity ship too. though the one true thing that stands out in the story is the antagonist of the story. That, i believe was one of the most well thought out characters in the story.
5667558 thanks for your input, i had a lot of trial and error with silver, so i always felt he was sort of off; im glad to see i was wrong. still, thanks for responding; i love seeing what people liked in my stories so i know which direction is the right one :)
5668813 I just wish there was a sequal
5669142 i wish i could write like it a second time
5669909 how do you mean?
5670402 simply, alot of my other stories have flopped or been so poor that they recieve a lot of bad comments and dislikes. so if i did well with this, i wouldn't like to ruin it with a poor sequal.
5670932 I guess thats true anyways its such a good story and is just amazing.
5671068 still, thank you very much and if i ever attempt a sequal i'll try and do it justice; however i have done other stories, if you wanna check them out, you might find another one you like as much. :)
man o man i need to take a shit
6176045 erm... okay?
6176045 erm... okay?thanks for the favourite as well :)
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I like shipping while i drop a duce...
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Wow. Not many story makes me read them but this one is awesome
This was a real good story to read, thank you very much.
Just to make sure, let me get this straight: now Sweetie accepted Both Applebloom's and Scootaloo's love? A bit awkward but sweet at the same time
6702258 thanks for the high praise; to answer your question, its more that they both wanted to be with her while she recovered, yeah it is awkward but when i wrote it i felt as they were always together it would be worse to split them up; it would be too sad to imagine apple bloom having to watch as her love was unrequited after all she'd done to help.
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Don't misunderstand me, I love happy ending, and yours is more Than a good example for that.
I don't know why, but most of the people on this site like to write depressing or half-happy (one suffers) ending. Only thing I can think of is, that they somehow want to reflect their own issues (theory, NOT confirmed) through writing.
Still, I appreciate your ending, it cheered me up at the end :)
Congratulations, and best wishes!
P.s.: I almost forgot! So in the end were they able to 'get rid of' Silver, and Just the nightmares left after him? Sorry I couldn't make it out well :D
And Apple Bloom has Orange eyes :)
6703980 thanks; see i usually like depressing stories as i'm more comfortable writing them, but without a nice ending it wouldn't be my little pony. as for eye colour, i'm colour blind so i have to rely on what my friends say, if they're wrong i'm wrong. finally, it's supposed to be implied that he's still lurking there in her mind but everyday he gets weaker as she heals to the point where he's just a nightmare. still i'm glad you enjoyed the piece; if even one person likes it then it really makes it worth while.
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I guess we learn something every day :D
6704097 we do :)
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Why was me in dis?