Scion and his family moved to Ponyville from Cloudsdale on good intentions to live a better life on the ground. So far they were shown the kindness of the locals with a heartwarming welcome to the little town. But Scion meets a young mare in which he quickly falls for. Does she have the same feelings for him or is he just in over his head?
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Good story fellow funnyjunker!
One thing though, thoughts shouldn't be in quotation marks... Instead, italicize them.
Following this.
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Thank you! I'll be sure to keep that in mind for future chapters
alright my friend so far its good but i have to point this out so you could possibly fix it and sorry for being the one to point it out
but when you use "party" 4 times in a sentence its boring and repetitive i would recommend using more colorful vocabulary like shindig celebration and the such and you could probably just get rid of some of those words without even placing another word in its place
like i said sorry for putting it out there
but just trying to improve you as a writer other then that 
write moar
also ide have to say that this story has heavy mary sueism meaning that i think you tried to place yourself into the story itself which trust me i have done to but you also immediately have the mane 6 loving you
which i can deal with mary sueism but y'know other readers who dont like it will be like DAFUQ IS DIS
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The first chapter was i admit a bit bland and not much emotion in it but the upcoming content will have more emotions and details put into it 
I appreciate the honesty. This is the first story I've ever written so any kind of positive criticism would help improve in the upcoming chapters
I drive a scion!
That's my rating
New chapter is finally up and currently working on the next.
If I can get enough people who'd like, I can give a sneak peak to my new project. Anybody? 
Newest installment to New Town, New Friends and Butterflies.
I know some have been asking for longer chapters so here it is. I've spent about a day and a half writing and editing it so I hope everyone likes it! 
-Rainbowdash218
Just as a heads up, I might of missed a few grammer and spelling errors. If any other errors you catch, let me know and I'll fix it. Thanks everyone!
-Rainbowdash218
Loved the jest between Scion and his father.
i.....wow........dont you dare die.....
No. He is not going to die
That would make Fluttershy sad
This chapter was rather hard to write. But it turned out alright. Don't forget to rate and comment with your thoughts. I wanna hear your opinions.
Also, it's not over yet so stay tuned!
No Scioooooooonnn! You're not going to die! You can't die!
You... can't... die...
New chapter. This one's much longer than the rest but it needed to be. It's filled with emotion
I tried to be as realistic as I could but tell me what you think.
449067 well done sir
“He was. But his heart started beating again after about four and a half after it stopped.” Rainbow replied.
isnt there supposed to be "minutes" after four and a hal?
just trying to helo
great chapter BTW
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All fixed. Thank you for catching that
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no problem
and also
MOARRRRR NEEEEDDDDD MOARRR
Very awesome!
I really want to see fluttershy's reaction on the next chapter.
I thought I'd put this chapter up a few days early for y'all.
I'm wondering if anybody would be able to draw me a cover art for "New Town" because the one I have honestly isn't dazzling.
yay!
Thank Celestia that Scion is fine
Now I wonder what will happen on the next chapter.
Sorry for the wait on this chapter. Had a lot of things going on at school that needed attention.
Anyways this chapter is short and doesn't have a lot going on but the next chapters will be longer so stay tuned!
yay! that was awesome (also first/second if you count the author)
Wonderful as always buddy, I think that this little moments are very important to give some "heart" to the story
581811 btw, you can get banned (1 day) for posting that now.
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This chapter I actually wrote in about an hour and a half. It's not much but it's important event in the story where Scion actually wakes up.
Oh and before I posted the chapter, I quickly changed the ending because the one before it didn't fit.
Yay, this updated!
Another awesome chapter! Gah, already I can't wait until the next one!
Hoofed by april... I saw what you did there
Scion's a blank flank? Geez what a twist you made...
1st - me is first
2nd - Fluttershy helped the CMC to earn their cutie marks? Totaly possible and expected from her
3rd - so many 'daw'. ..a little more, yeah, just a tiny little more of all this cute wonderful beatiful romance and you'll make me shed some tears, I am trying but I think I can't keep them for too long.
4th and not less important - I wonder how it gonna be the concert part, Hoofed By April is an awesome band
Hmm... Does Fimfiction have a character limit?
Let's test that!
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Nope, doesn't look like it. Anyway, look above if you wanna see what I thought of your story!
Brilliant man definatly going on my top 10 most fav fic's of all time.
now I have to go through the pain of waiting for the next update
I apologize everyone for the long wait on this chapter. I've been busy with meetings with my recruiters and getting things situated with Army paperwork and what not. I also had a bit of writer's block but I got it all done and edited today and here it is for you all!
I appreciate your patience and hope you enjoy! 
I decided to split this chapter into two different parts so it's not just one whole giant read.
Glad to see that you updated
And thanks for making me eager to read the next chapter
Daaaaawww this was beautiful
Wow this chapter was amazing!
Tu l'essayes de faire mieux, n'est pas? Ajouter une peu de langue Français.
Keep it up! Goin' great!
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Plus françaises seront ajoutés dans les prochains chapitres.
(It's been a while since I practiced French
)
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oh! Je suis curieux!
En fait, je ne suis pas français, je suis neerlandais, et j'ai une amie qui est française et neerlandaise, c'est pour ça que je le peux parler bien.
(Et exercer est bien toujours!
)