During the American Civil War, the Battle of Chancellorsville. A man who is 19 years old gotten lost and wounded in the forest during the battle. When he recovered, he didn't know where he was, he found out that he's in this place called "Ponyville" which never shown in the map. A man who meets the ponies and he never found a place never been so peaceful....
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very grade story more i like it
To be frank this isn't the best story I've read, but the basic idea intrigued me since it sets the story apart from the other "Human in Equestria" fics, and I happen to be a Civil War reenactor.
Listen, this is my frist time I ever written a fanfic, and please give me a chance. I know it's not great and all but, please give it a chance, and it's not finished yet
dont put yourself down this was great especially when pinkie pie got pwned by a human with a pie
This is funny and sad at the same time. if you would like, I could pre read and get rid of errors.
88919 No. My first language is Chinese. I'm a Chinese-American by the way.
other than the fact that you keep on changing tenses in the middle of paragraphs and sometimes even in the middle of a sentence it's rather good I would take Hasee up on his/her offer if I were you. also, repeating rifles didn't get into military use until the 20th century so he wouldn't have had one, a regular rifle would have been issued to him though
90109 I know and I'm sorry, I'm really bad at tenses. I also have corrected the repeating rifle into Lever Action Rifle (Henry Rifle). It was my mistake. Man, I'm really suck at writing.
90615 You are not terrible by any means, especially since it is not your first language, i'd get someone whose first language was English for a prereader to help get rid of those tense errors since other than those your writing is quite good
90615 I mean, even the best authors in the world have an editor whose job it is to fix grammatical errors and the like
90109
Actually, near the end of the Civil War, the Union did see the use of Henry lever action repeating rifles. Not very common, but still possible.
>>newyorkx3
As for the story, I am quite impressed with how well it is progressing, but the errors are quite glaring. I would suggest that you enlist a pre-reader or editor if possible.
I would be happy to help you if you. 
Good luck!
LunaXTommy i hope they do fall in love and eventually get married. writer man, MAKE IT HAPPEN!!!
oh gawd i sense somethins gonna happen between them. its so cute though
very good chapter. i hope for the future of this story that some how luna and tommy well. you know. but dont describe it, or do.its a good read anyway
this part was the saddest but was written very well, par a few spelling mistakes its very good
88785 It's alright Hasee500, I already had someone who can help me, and the story will be corrected by next week.
I noticed among other things that you spelled warn as worn but other then those it is a good story...now I'm off to the next chapter~
instead of saying "her cutie mark represent" it should say "her cutie mark is" or "her cutie mark is a"
I agree with Mänic I'm sure there are a few on here who wouldn't mind helping proofread and edit your chapters.
an airship there were no airships in the civil war I think
Tommy, You Troll...
lololo
lolol
Trolo
ALLONS-Y!
P.S. I almost woke my parents up at.....12:30 AM from laughing so hard at this chapter.
who cares! it's now in an alternate universe where there were airships in the civil war. besides they had spy balloons and that's pretty close to airships right?
anyways tracking.
and four stars because of grammar issues. other than that good story i will forward to more.
oh sweet i hope for the next chapter the union if thats what they are called are allowed to trade with equestria and stuff.
i think henry and his group of soldiers should become royal guards
I liked the characteristics that you created for each character through plot development, but that all got blown out of the water at Chapter 9 when you started to mention airship. Airships didn't exist during the war, let alone how would they be able to take off in the middle of Evergreen forest? Also, the grammar bugs me in most of your chapters between the their, there, and they're, but I believe that's not a key component of a fic; it's more like the icing on the cake. Any who, I still believe you can turn this around and make this as great as the first 8 Chapters. Great story still.
96856 I know there wasn't any airship during Civil War but I'm trying to make it more interesting. Sorry if that's really bother you, I'm just making a good fiction story here you know. The airship didn't take off in Everfree forest, it was taken off from the open fields in the human world near Fawn Lake. That's in Virginia.
upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/9/97/GiffardAirship.JPG I believe it looks like this.
97156
No dude don't feel bad. Your story is still very nice and I love it. I just felt things were going astray for a bit at the mention of airship.
97164
But then again this proved me wrong.
Stupendous ending. You did a very good job closing the story in a reasonable matter, and the most important thing is that you made me (as a reader) happy that things turned out good in the end. Also, the ending of the fimfic with the title was clever too. A bit cliché but nonetheless amazing.
P.S. I'm sorry if in any way my comment on the other chapter offended you. I was just simply stating my opinion at the moment and I was a little astray from what I meant to say.
97288 I'm glad you like man. It's okay, you don't have to appologize. I got a lot people complaining about story saying that it sucks. But I'm glad that there's some people actually likes it.
wow
can you do a sequal with his wife or kids or something
i swear dude if you dont do a sequal im gonna tell the world where equestria is
I like the premise of the fic, but I had trouble reading thru the first few paragraphs of the first chapter.
The quality may improve over the next chapters, but my willingness to read it has for the moment been stopped. Any rewrite planned?
wow, there are bronies of a different race? I gotta go on the internet more often
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Nice... ;)
meh
severe death threats would have been better
but your way is fine i guess
plus death threats could go with blackmail if handled correctly
Right...Now for the Historic nostalgia. Bare with me..
*puts on Kepi and clears throat*
*Did Tommy buy his Henry repeater with his earnings (Which was usually $39 for a Union Private) at the time of Chancellorsville? If not, wouldn't he be using the Volcanic Repeater which was a predecessor of the Henry?
*Also, There wouldn't be a Confederate attack on Watson and the others as they were withdrawing from the battle. They would already be on the other side of the river by the time Lee readied an assault.
other than those, good story thus far.
More Historic Nostalgia...
*The War start in 1861, 1860 was when South Carolina first seceded.
also, the chapter felt a bit rushed for some reason.
91693 At least by 1864 when they were punching out nearly 2,500. Before then they either had to buy it with their own earnings (est. $39 for a Union private) or use the Volcanic Repeater which was a predecessor.
Nostalgia time!
*T-shirts...
... It would either be the army issued grey wool pull overs, civilian shirts or plaid flannel shirts stitched up by the family
The Historic Nostalgia in me is screaming bloody murder from the earlier chapters, but it's only minimal.
Not a bad read
Despite the grammar issues, which you yourself admitted, this is actually one of my favorites on this site; very sentimental.
I can't find any word to say, just........so awesome, I really love it, hoping one day I can write a story on my own, how can I be like you
I can't believe this is your first time
kinda bittersweet for me....
i find thid to be distasteful and poorly written, Its as if a 3rd grader wrote this for a late book report. Sorry i knoiw its harsh but I have red lots of great fan fics out there and this is by far the worst.
3157930 How long have you been here, three months? This fanfic is not even close to being the worst.