Hey! My description! I remember that...
Well now I have to read it.

2834968Hope it lives up to expectations!

He handed my the bottle with a small smirk.

Should be 'He handed me the bottle' or 'He handed me my bottle' if it is her regular thing.

Go. give these drunk fools a show.

Should be 'Go, give these drunk fools a show.' or 'Go. Give these drunk fools a show.' Punctuation is important.

I'll see if I can spot more as I go.

"My daughter would never dress in such a way!" ,and the usual garbage

Should be 'way!", and' Yea, I know it's small, but readers are picky bastards.

Also, I would like to note I'm reading this while listening to songs about getting drunk and sipping the remains of my last nights beer.

2835023Fixed all

Life next door to a drug dealer any a rabid old woman was dangerous,

Wat?

Between my labia.

This... is the most beautiful sentence so far.

I was here for the cheep booze.

Cheap.

The minor spelling errors here and there, a missing word or two every now and then, but other than that, it was pretty good and enjoyable. Can't wait for the next chapter. Stay awesome.

Keep it cool, Condemned.

was spike three different times?

Unless Spike got kidnapped and thrown into a punch bowl, it's 'spiked'.

The cheep booze.

Again, cheap.

2835098Thanks for the laugh!!

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Weren't you meant to be the proof-reader?

2835131Yeah...yeah I know...

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Well, it appears I don't have a say in becoming your editor. Put a password on the story and give me shout before you publish each chapter. Damn me and trying to help everyone...

2835131 I'm not very good at my job..

as she walked past my and me drool.

'as she walked past me, drool overflowing.' or 'as she walked past me and my drooling face.' or maybe even 'damn dat beyatch bea mines!'

Hmm... yep. That last one.

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Don't worry about it!

Also, you're fired.

Sorry, I couldn't resist.

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2835159It's fine.

a stinging that I hadn't felt in a long.

'long time.' Unless long is a type of measurement. "It's fifty longs long!" "Still not as long as ma dick!" ... "Dude, a long is smaller than a centimeter. I'd be worried if it wasn't!"

Hmm..

I think Imma' like this

2835249Fixed all of it!

oh wow i cannot wait to read more of this.....not like a clop way but a interest way lol

I LIKE THIS CHAPTER...
BRING ME ANOTHER!!: *Breaks computer*

Awww, when's some more coming out of this?

2976350Idk...maybe I'll leave it as a oneshot

Why was it so enjoyable to see vinyl go down in flames?

3248774Why would wouldn't it be?

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If you do make more of this I look forward to vinyl getting put in her place, and Tavi making her look like a total fool

3251865That's just cruel

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It just means that Vinyl will have to learn some new tricks to pick up her 'goddess'

3252678lol, I guess. I hope you aren't expecting more of this. It will be a while until I bring myself to write this again

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life is just a waiting game, so best not to try and rush anything. In short, when it happens it happens

3252687I just hate to dissapoint

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I know how it feels to lose a muse when you are doing something, I would rather you have that spark of inspration than have you force out a story that you feel no passion about

Very interesting. I look forward to more of this whenever your muse returns.

3894919 It's coming. Chapter Two is about 1k words in, only 4k+ to go

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