Twilight Sparkle is being corrupted in mind and spirit by the Shadow, a dark magical force from ancient times. Now Princess Celestia is in a race against time to find the key to saving her student and her friends from the seduction of the Shadow.
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Curse you, Umbra. You forced a child to mature before her time. That's really mean.
It's funny, Scootaloo is usually the immature one out of the three.
The heat here has my mind all clouded up, so I cannot fathom a guess as to who the deer was. I would joke guess Bambi, but if we're talking actual faerie lore here, then that's totally wrong. Especially considering your clue. Stupid weather... *shakes a hoof at mother nature*
Anyways, nice chapter. It's quite interesting to see what is going to happen next, but at this point tensions are high everywhere. The questions lay on the areas.
Twilight City: Will Silent Moon use that dagger mentioned several chapters ago for some dreadful purpose? Or is there something that threatens everyone's lives instead?
Ponyville: Will Carrot Cake fall to Pinkie Pie or will he stall her long enough to escape or cause trouble for Pinkie?
White Tail Woods: The mysterious doe and the magic dagger that she made appear from the very air. Is it a weapon of the forest or a weapon of faerie kind? Plus what is the identity of the doe, if that is what she really is?
Canterlot: The mysterious gold chest. What is hidden inside?
The Obsidian Temple: The mysterious mare or colt that is waiting for them. Star Swirl the Bearded perhaps? That is my only guess.
You certainly have me really looking forward to the next chapter. It's going to be epic.
Mr.Cake is screwed as well as the spa Ponies, whelp at least Mrs.Cake has escaped with the foals.
and so the corruption of ponyville begins (or continues)
2600403 This climax is going to be messy. If you know what I mean.
2600366 Thats sort of the point here. Scoots is the least mature, but in my headcanon is also the most dependent on her friends for support. The loss of them is forcing her to confront her own weaknesses in a way that little else could - and yes, force her to grow up.
2600462 Begins is the word you're looking for here, when you consider how The Shadow spreads itself and all of the methods its used so far...These two targets are very, very important.
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Still mean. You don't do that to kids. Though I will admit, it is very interesting.
2600466 I'll call in the extreme cleaning team. Clearly we're going to need it. *covering both ends*
That line... That hit me hard.
and so now it begins light the fires of war bring lighting and steel to flesh all will fall and all rise anew.
Imma guess Eire is the deer's name
2601556 GOOD Guess! But not the right one! Keep trying!
Another great chapter.
I have to say, I strongly, strongly, disagree with Cadence's and Shining Armor's decision to "keep things quiet". The Shadow is like a plague, you fight plagues via quarantine. Granted, this is a bit more complex but the core strategy is similar enough. At this point in the story all of the "good guys" have made some really bad decisions. As Lord Helmet from Spaceballs would say, "Evil will always win because good is stupid."
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This right here is why Ponyville should have been locked down. With the Spa and Backery corrupted, the entire town will fall in just a few days. Ponyville has access to a train station and will rapidly spread the Shadow throughout all of Equestria once it falls completely. Canterlot is doomed at this point.
I'm curious if new Element Bearers are going to be found? Can the Shadow corrupt the Elements themselves? It looks like the deer race will be getting involved, which is good since Equestria is going to need allies.
Can't wait for more!
2601813The truth is, Canterlot doesn't have the military resources to effectively lock down the Everfree forest. While the Equestrian Military is pretty sizable, most of it is deployed to the borders or other important strategic locations. Canterlot is so deep inside of their own territory that it doesn't warrent more than the presence of the elite Royal Guard and a few other small units.
Making a massive call to arms would induce a truly epic level of panic for the average equestrian citizen, since they'd have to explain why they were suddenly calling up every available military resources..
Worse still, any military resources gained would be dwarfed by the costs of rioting, looting, and disorder in every major city in Equestria when it became public knowledge (And it would be impossible to hide it) that the core of the problem is Twilight Sparkle - who has proven herself powerful enough to take down Discord and Nightmare Moon.
Celestia and Luna are out of the country and completely out of contact. Trust me, as logical decisions go - Deciding to not let Equestria immediately descend into anarchy is one of the better ones. Sure, it's not the BEST choice, but it's the best one they have with the resources available.
Oh and believe me - It's not going to be nearly so easy for the Shadow as you think. There's already quite a few balls in the air it's gonna have to deal with but.... Well, you'll see what I mean.
I don't know how you do it but every single chapter is better than the last. Scootaloo receives a mystic sword from the spirit of the forest herself, man her story is really looking good. Also, you may already be planning this, but I seriously need you to write the scene with the spa twins and Rarity and Fluttershy.
Things are looking good for both the side opposing and allied with the Shadow. With the Deer, is it one of the more prominent names on the Seelie Court? (If I'm to hazard a guess, I doubt the Unseelie Court will ever give Scoots the help she need without asking anything. The Seelie Court is the better guess, since you brought up the Faerie concept...)
Anyhow, it seems that the Spa ponies will fall, but Mr. Cake is going to be harder to fall. It seems that way, but I somehow find it'll be hard... Pinkie can be, really, really, convincing when she wants to. If only to make her stop convincing you (WHICH MAY BE HER PLAN ALL ALONG 8D)
2602785 I cant say PRECISELY, but yes - she's most definitely Seelie court. ;3 The rest is up to your brain to figure out!
2602764 Don't worry, I'm not going to leave THAT hot of a scene out. It'll come.
It also looks like our little scoots is following an interesting story of her own, eh?
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I understand the need to keep the populace calm, which is why you don't give the populace the full story
You could actually create a true plague scenario. Simply state that an unknown infection has been found in those that visit the new city established in the Everfree and that all traffic in and out has been shut down until the issue can be investigated further. This will cause some panic, but not wide spread hysteria and will justify having a military force on the roads and in the cities with the most contact with Everfree.
On another note, Celestia should have called back some of the border guards when she discovered that Winterlight and her Shadowbolts were living on her doorstep.
I know I"m being nitpicky, I'm just irked at some of the bad decisions that have been made by the "good guys" up until this point.
With that said, I do love what you're doing with Scootaloo. I expect awesome things from her in the future
2602818 Minor Spoiler - Scootaloo is going to be a huuuuuuuuge pain in the Shadow's rump.
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*squeeeeeee*
did i see a joker reference in these chapters? i think i did!
love the story, but it seems increasingly disjointed since the chapters are focusing on so many characters at once and so many side things... really hoping for more of the great chapters with more of whichever characters are the focus instead of lots of little cliffhangers...
2603078 I'm tying up a lot of plot-threads, which unfortunately requires a lot of jumping. I probably should have planned this better but... eh, C'est la vie.
There will be more monofocused chapters. The next four of them are monofocused, in fact.
2602832 REALY???? I never would of guessed...
I'm fairly certain they're meant to be Swedish, though minor googling doesn't give me anything solid.
And oh god am I looking forward to the spa scene with their services.
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Uh...
White Hart II?
The doe was Titania wasn't she? Just stared reading this today, right after the first... Stop being an addicting writer
...the deer isn't Faust, is she?
Or the Seelie Queen?
All my Seelie and Unseelie knowledge comes from Holly Black's books
Way to have zero faith in your sister, Shiny, or, excuse me, Scummy.