Twilight Sparkle is being corrupted in mind and spirit by the Shadow, a dark magical force from ancient times. Now Princess Celestia is in a race against time to find the key to saving her student and her friends from the seduction of the Shadow.
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I can't wait for the crazy thing you'll pull up... because it's sure going to be interesting. And it's nice to see Twilight will still putting her friends' happiness ahead of her, but I'm still rooting for Shadow! Let the Shadow wins!
But yes, that last sentence. Nothing lasts forever, some may last REALLY long time, but forever? No.
Let's wait for the crazy thing to happen, shall we? The night is still young!
2520502 There would have been more action in this chapter if I hadn't had to do that massive re-write in chapter 9.
Luckily for you readers, it means there's going to be all sorts of nuttiness and some cloppyness going on for like the next six + chapters.
2520508 I don't really mind the lack of action, a good story isn't defined by the action only. The world-building, the characters, the plots also play a role.
And I can't wait to read all those things!
Moar! We getting close to the good stuff, and we must have moar of it!
Character building... moving the chess pieces into position. That's all I can say about this chapter, and how much I approve of these seemingly boring steps. One cannot start a war without putting their warriors in place and training them. One cannot grow strong without having to put measures into place and continue to grow, through both the exciting things and the boring times.
May Shadow guide you, Mistress Twilight Shadow, and may you bring down the Sun Tyrant and keep her down.
2520574 And just because I love Teasing about the future...
Those four key end scenes in this chapter? Those are important.
How are they important?
You'll just have to guess.
2520574 More or less what I was going to say...
2520594 I'll give ye the honor of surprising me with what you whatever happen to pull out of your magic bag of writing goodies.
Though, I suppose it would unfair of me to not give it a shot. I can only go with what I am given though... things will change. Twilight Shadow or Umbra will alter the current way the world works and replace it with their system. There will be war, deaths and all of the things that a person like me actually hates. Emotions will be shattered like mirrors and the wounds and grudges formed will stay with the ponies forever.
More than the Code's Apprentice, there will not be such a happy ending. But this unhappy end will likely wait until the third book. Though.... how will you stretch it out like that? The pieces are slowly gliding into place and there is war coming, like a fatal storm that will raze the whole land of Equestria. Perhaps the next few chapters will be the revelations and the horns being blown. The players who have not been decided will be forced into position and their hearts will be torn. 'Do I defend the land I have known for ages, and the great Princess who has given us so much life, so much love and so much harmony? Or do I trust my friends and believe that they have understand the truth, that the Princess is hiding things from us and using the previously mentioned gifts as a veil to hide the truth from us?'
That is my total guess. Things will go as I have hoped and Twilight Shadow or perhaps Umbra him/her/itself will use Twilight and her friends to help pave the way through Celestia and to the future that he/she/it foresees to be right and true.
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Shiny is going to do something rash? This seems like the setup for the scene where they fight. "I'm going to be there for her" might mean something else though. That's my best guess.
Arrivederci!
Twi Twi and Shiny will be reunited. Bad things will happen.
I agree that it's nice to have a more peaceful chapter like this every once in a while. A story with nothing but action only grows tedious. Also, I don't think you've miscapitalized anything in the last coue chapters, so great job on that!
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There's also the possibility of a much darker, but still essentially good, Twilight Shadow rising to power along side the current status quo. We have Celestia keeping secrets and driving Twilight farther into the shadow, Winterlight planning the return of the Nightmare using Twilight as a tool, and Twilight and her friends caught in the middle of it all trying to do what they believe is right. I'm probably reading way too much into it, but I think the key here is one line Discord told Celestia when she was asking about the Shadow: The Shadow changes everyone it corrupts to be more like it, but at the same time it is changed by the people it corrupts.
There's definitely a lot of fighting, misunderstandings, and tragic moments ahead, but through it all Twilight is going to have her five closest friends there with her, constantly reminding her both of her true goal, as well as the fact that she's not alone. Even in the depths of her corruption, her most trusted associates are reminding her of her role as a protector. I have no doubt that she'll be led farther astray before this is all over, but hopefully by the end she'll be back to where she is now.
The Elements of Harmony were able to cleanse Luna of the Shadow, but what if the Elements themselves are corrupted? The power of their friendship is still there, and they still embody their elements, so I'm rooting for the ending where rather than being cleansed, Twilight gains complete control of the Shadow and becomes what she truly sought to be from the very beginning: the dark, brutal, and above all, effective protector of Equestria that the Princesses aren't.
It's probably not gonna, but I can hope, and I can dream. Also, I hope Shiny and Cadance get corrupted by Twilight, just because that scene would be amazing.
2520853 The elements could be corrupted. But true, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, Rarity and Twilight will still be Twilight's friends, even though they will be altered. The only one suffering corruption is Twilight, because the Shadow lives in her. It's like the plot of Past Sins, which I suggest you read it if you haven't already. i won't give away any of the plot, but just say it safely. The carrier infected the Touched of that story. The carrier carried the main seed while the Touched carried a smaller version of the same seed. Depending on how they were, the seed grew faster and corrupted them worse.
Where do you get that from? If you mean the Nightmare, then Nightmare Moon won't be coming back any time soon. Winterlight has her sights set on Twilight Shadow as the queen that she had hoped Luna would become. But if you have another meaning for the Nightmare, then you might be onto something and we're just not on the same wavelength.
I don't remember this part, so I may need to go back and re-read. I'm surprised I haven't seen more of Discord as of yet. Maybe he'll have a part to play in part three, which I suddenly have a feeling is fast approaching. Now that TwiTwi is in Ponyville and the plans have been advanced, Mistress might capture the rest of her friends in the next chapter or two, depending on how the author wants to play things out. Perhaps the end of part two will be Twilight and company finally meeting Umbra or the Shadow in the flesh.
Yes, I hope that Shining Armor and Cadence are corrupted. Shining would likely just agree completely and Cadence is so sick of Celestia somedays that she would likely rather side with Twilight, a pony she can trust completely.
I also had a thought click to me. The elements, at their original part of creation. They were all revived by Twilight's magic. They were restored after Nightmare Moon had shattered them. So although my first stance would be "The Elements of Harmony are tools" I have suddenly began to wonder if perhaps the Elements of Harmony are tied to the Mane 6. Hence why they so vastly affected the Mane 6 and did what they did in Magical Mystery Cure. Then the power of the Elements and the bonds of friendship that the Mane 6 had made transformed Twilight at the end of the very same episode. While this story isn't 100% canon and Twilight isn't an Alicorn yet, those connections are still there and can still be drawn upon.
Like you said, the Mane 6 embody the Elements. But what if it's more than that?
Emotions, when used correctly, are a force that nothing can stop. They could defy gods and alter an entire civilization. Maybe I'm putting too much power behind emotions, bu that's just the way I think.
*facehoofs* I meant to add this, but totally derped.. anyways, Winterlight, Silent Moon and Shadow Dancer. What version of the Shadow are they carrying? Something from before the beginning of time... perhaps they are nothing more than embodiment of Umbra of the Shadow's power or even a small part of itself. Plus there is that doctor they mentioned in the hospital scene back in part 1.
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The thing with the Nightmare came from the priestess with the emblem of Nightmare Moon that was with the group breaking into the Lunar Vault, as well as her continual comparisons of Twilight to Nightmare Moon. There are also a couple places where the comparison is made and one or the other, once fully corrupted, is simply referred to as "the Nightmare". So a bit of both? The revival of an old regime under a new leader sort of thing.
Winterlight is aiming to take control of Equestria away from Celestia, which, for the moment at least, isn't what Twilight wants. Winter is manipulating her into following that course, or at least attempting to.
The discord thing was in chapter four, this line specifically:
It's small, and never really brought up again, but it opens the door for the possibility of Twilight becoming more than just the corrupted pawn [albeit a very powerful one] that she is right now.
This is an interesting question, particularly in light of what was said at the end of this most recent chapter. I get the impression from several different scenes in the story that Winterlight and the two Maidens aren't working towards the same goals. It sometimes feels very much like Winterlight is just a pawn like Twilight is and the two Maidens are the ones really pulling the strings. I don't really have any proof for that one, but they just don't really feel like they're working on the same wavelength most of the time. But that might just be me......
i love crazy shit!
Interesting. It hints that Pinkie Pie (and likely Rainbow Dash). Aren't completely under shadow control. And a possibility for how things can turn out.
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You may be onto something there
I will echo what others are saying that these world building chapters are great and to not worry about giving us action in every single chapter, you need a few pauses here and there.
I just want to say that having Shining and Cadence travel through Ponyville at the exact same time Twilight is over at Sweet Apple Acres is simply delicious. Who knows what trouble could have been avoided if only each party knew the other was right there.
A thought occurred to me. The current situation, as of right now, must be a wet dream for Discord. The Elements of Harmony are separated from their bearers, Celestia and Luna have left the country, and Cadence and Shining Armor have left Canterlot. There is currently nothing keeping Discord reigned in at this moment in time. I can only imagine he is doing alot of prep for his "fun day" Celestia agreed to.
On the subject of Discord, Celestia felt that Discord might be developing feelings for Fluttershy. If this turns out to be true, and Fluttershy gets corrupted, then that might push Discord to break his non-aggression pact with the Shadow and become an active force against it.
There are so many directions this story can go, can't wait for more!
Ey luk! Another anonymous thumbs down!
Everyone wave to the passing troll!
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Probably a demon hunter fanboy.
Interesting Pinkie was able to call Twilight "Twi" one without saying some version of mistress.
""You okay, Twi?" asked Pinkie Pie softly, as the Crusaders toasted one another with mugs of cocoa to their latest scheme"
A mistake or an indication that the Shadow cannot control her (and perhaps the other elements) fully? Or am I over emphasizing the compulsion to call her mistress?
This fits what she says later when Pinkie believes Twilight can fix it while at the same time enjoying the moment right now. Pinkie just gets more interesting as this goes on.
2523348 Pinkie Pie gets to break rules because she's Pinkie Pie. There's actually a pretty good reason for it, but that wont be revealed till the third part I'm afraid.
For now, just enjoy! ^_^
2521604 There is one thing keeping Discord at bay. The Shadow. He fears it like it can snuff out his life with a single thought. While Discord might have an attachment to Fluttershy, even if she gets corrupted he might still be cautious. He and the Shadow have agreed to keep out of each others way and corrupting Fluttershy isn't getting in his way. It's not stopping any of his chaos, nor is it going to prevent any of the serious fun he could have.
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I like that a LOT better than a simple mistake. I was hoping you would say something like that.
I will be keeping an eye out for more stuff like that with Pinkie tiy can bet on it.
Was that supposed to be a clue that you expected a lot of people to see or was it supposed to be subtle and missed by most?
2524159 I dont really write clues for specific audiences. I've peppered a LOT of stuff in this story so far that has been missed, but that's the fun.
I kinda feel like the easter bunny when I do this. I scatter hints, load up Chekov Guns, quietly clue you guys in to the future... Sometimes, you guys find the eggs in time. Sometimes not. It's always interesting to see who picks up on what.
THe point of this is - There's a LOT of secrets, special goings on, and clues to the future scattered through this story and the last one. Good hunting!
OO must resist temptation t find them all...especially the Pinkie ones but with no way to know if I have found them all it would surely lead to madness...
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I don't think the Shadow is strong enough to destroy Discord, I doubt neither Discord nor the Shadow can be truly destroyed. More than likely they made their non-aggression pact due to how much damage to the world a full scale battle between them would cause.
However, Discord is a cheater and if given a reason to find a way to bend the rules of his own agreement with the Shadow he would. My line of thinking is that, as of right now, Discord has just passed on some background info on the Shadow and nothing more. If Discord does indeed have feelings for Fluttershy, something he hasn't really experienced up until now since he never had friends, then what would he do if something did happen to her? Granted, he might not feel anything and Celestia was just wrong in thinking that.
Another late update day. Got two final exams today I need to do so... yeah. After this though, there shouldn't be any more delays.
2525046 That is very true. If Discord has an attachment to Fluttershy, then her being in danger would trigger Discord to do something. But! What if the Shadow promises that Fluttershy won't be harmed, only a bit more open and chaos like? The Shadow seems to draw out the lustful dark side of a person. Maybe the other effects will come later, but if the Shadow is able to trick Discord into thinking all is well and Fluttershy will be released later, then he might not act at all.
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Actually, the Shadow attempting to trick Discord would be fun to see. The Subtle Manipulator versus the Trickster God in a battle of wits. That almost sounds like a whole other story.
Things will change... for the better or for worse? Only time will tell...
Nothing lasts....... FOREVER
ok now the idea of AJ not being happy about Filthy's death makes sense wish that was sorta mentioned last chapter so i didnt ask so many questions....
I can’t be the only one Wheel of Time vibes from the ending sections of this chapter.
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What physical changes do Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie have that may have missed or forgotten?