Twilight Sparkle is being corrupted in mind and spirit by the Shadow, a dark magical force from ancient times. Now Princess Celestia is in a race against time to find the key to saving her student and her friends from the seduction of the Shadow.
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The same thing Cadance said and now Rarity said it too. Do wonder how those words will get more significance or not in the future... Things are both getting better and worse for Twilight, what with her managing to get Rarity in the fold and yet, she failed to get Scootaloo and now Scoots and Zecora are both in the know of what is happening. Things are getting tenser and tenser!
P.S. Sorry for not commenting on the chapters before, I'm on a vacation. ^^
2575070 I didn't know clouds took vacations!
You can comment all bunches when you get back. And go all omg and wtf and lol.
2575078 Of course we do! Sometimes we clouds get tired from lounging around in the sky and wish to experience the world under us.
And all the chapters are awesome, I kind of forget to add that, hehe. |D
Wow there's a lot of badassery in this chapter. First Cadance with her freaking epic maneuver with Shining, then Rarity being an absolute boss, just walking out on her injured foot with such determination. I love how you took the "Love conquers all" line and applied it to both sides. Finally I meant to say this last chapter but forgot, I freaking love that RD can move through shadows now. All in all great chapter, can't wait for more.
2575138 To be honest, while they're both being super awesome...
My favorite part of this chapter is still Scootaloo. Of course, I know what's going to happen with her, so maybe that's why.
Awesome chapter!
I really liked Rarity's character and her staring down Twilight causing Twilight to doubt her course of action.
A little clarification if you please, Scootaloo says:
Yet, it was Applebloom that took the glass from Twilight and brought it upstairs. Did I miss something in a previous chapter?
So, now we have Fluttershy, who doesn't stand a chance. I actually feel sorry for her because all her friends are going to show up at her cottage and she won't have a clue as to what is happening.
I'm wondering if Twilight is going to be royally pissed that Winterlight and the Shadowbolts assaulted her brother and sister in law. Winterlight may have crossed the line here.
2575146 I did enjoy her as well but she was slightly overshadowed by the other two. Though I am intrigued as to your plans for her.
2575151 It's supposed to imply that Scoots was the source of the plan that sent down Applebloom to try and snitch the liquor.
Lots of typos this time around, mostly involving Rarity's name.
2575637 Bloody....I thought I'd fixed those.
*Sigh* Thanks for letting me know, sorry about the quality control issue.
Pretty nice chapter. But it was chopped up a lot. Major happenings were chopped off by minor plot. So it was a bit discouraging trying to read this whole chapter and crashing into another random part of the story suddenly appearing at the edge of a major event in the part before. However, I'm glad Rarity was taken so easily. But I wonder if this is a foreshadowing of Fluttershy being the strongest and most resistant of all of the mane 6. All the animals might also be an issue.
2575637 Three times of no capitalization, true.
2575768 Could you elaborate a bit more on that chopped up part? I'm trying to see where the structural issues are here, and I'm pretty obviously missing it.
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Hmmm, I don't think Rarity was really taken easily. She ran, set a trap for Rainbow Dash(which would have worked if not for Shadow Jumping), and then stared down Twilight and dared her to do something. Twilight almost faltered under Rarity's words and Rarity would have gotten away if she hadn't made the mistake of trusting Twilight at the very end there.
Maybe you're referring to the kiss? It only takes a touch of the Shadow to corrupt. I think Applejack was the only one with a will stubborn enough to force far more than just a touch of the Shadow.
Fluttershy's animals would pose a problem because, honestly, they should sense that something is wrong. At the same time these are Fluttershy's friends and she may not listen to what the animals are trying to tell her. Fluttershy can be very strong when the situation calls for it, it just depends on how far she is pushed. I just don't think Twilight will give her the chance to react.
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You know what would have made the scene with Rarity even more powerful? Bringing up Filthy Rich's murder. Something along the lines of, "What will you do? Turn me into one of them, or kill me like you did
Filthy Rich?". I would think at that point she would have realize that Fancy Pants suspicions would have been correct.
Ok, done rambling.
2575151 Fluttershy may be the easiest to get, but she may also be the hardest. She does have the stare, and when angered she can do things even Applejack wouldn't do. I think it all depends on the situation.
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Oh I agree. Fluttershy sort of swings between the weakest and the strongest of the group depending on what is at stake. I just feel that Twilight won't give her the chance to react. Unless some animals from Sweet Apple Acres go running to Fluttershy going on about brainwashing and the like, Fluttershy won't be on guard. Her defenses won't be up and all it takes is a small touch of the Shadow to begin the corruption, even food and drink can have it, or a simple kiss.
While I'm on the subject, I think Fluttershy with the Shadow would be down right dangerous. Fluttershy has explosive mood swings and bursts of emotion once something pushes her to a breaking point. With some inspirational tips from Iron Will, she was assaulting ponies in the street and verbally destroyed Rarity and Pinkie Pie. If a magic force that specializes in stripping away moral inhibitors gets a hold of her, then she makes a powerful, but somewhat unpredictable, weapon.
2576465 Fluttershy would probably kick Winterlight's flank and take over as the leader of the Shadowbolts
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Fluttershy would act all cute and shy around the Shadowbolts, and get laughed at. Then one them kicks a rat and is instantly killed as Fluttershy puts a hoof through their skull
At which point Twilight advises all of her servants to not step on, kick, or generally look angry at any living creature....ever.
2575988 In this chapter I mean. Last chapter indeed, she did pull a good one on RD. But after she was captured in the previous chapter and then awoke in this chapter, all she was able to do was throw some good verbal licks. They made Twilight quite upset and they would have been effective in aiding her escape if not for the others being there.
2575784 Maybe I was just tired and a bit cranky earlier. Going back now I see none of the issues that I thought I saw before. Sorry dude. Had just come from 7 hours work and a little bit of frustrating driving on the way back.
(chapter: the twilight fall)
so far i can once again see that you make "evil" out to not be actually evil, just something different, a bit extreme yes, but not EVIL!
the subtle change in twi is really showing, it's really really gradual and it's hard to pin down how "changed" she really is at any point without seeing specific actions.
i do think twilight went to far in this chapter, she really didn't have to kill him, i wouldn't necessarily say that it was an entirely bad choice, but it was still a bad move given how this will sound to celestia and the nature of his crime.
silent moon and shadow dancer seem to really have different goals when compared to the captain, she seems wants another NMM, and i do think she's the only one which actually wants that. silent moon and shadow dancer on the other hand also seem to be following another master, which would be umbra i guess. talk about twilight being up for grabs by shadow-followers at this point.
2577454 I've always believed the very BEST Villians are the ones we could see ourselves becoming, in the right circumstances.
Goddammit Rarity, It was all going so well until you let your guard down.
2576981 It happens brony. No worries.
2575988 Rarity did indeed go down like a bawss.
Oh yes, and the Fluttershy scene is going to be... interesting. Not precisely what everyone is going to expect either.
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Ultimately, she was more done in by her fierce desire for her faith in Twilight to be vindicated. She wanted to believe Twilight was essentially good. Sadly, that belief ultimately spelt her doom.
Boss fight: Cadence VS Twilight Sparkle. Love battle commence! Who can show more love wins.
Why arnt they calling her mistriss anymore?
Please commence to play "Back in the saddle again" by Aerosmith
Oh Rarity you are going to love Mistress, and you are going to love her more than anything
Oh, my... I just had a thought. If love still concurs all, then wouldn't that mean Cadence is truly powerless against the Shadow? For with each convert, the love spreads. And if Cadence's power feeds off of pure love, wouldn't that mean her power is feeding off of the Shadow as well?
It's a friggin paradox!
Cadence is next!
well, a very good chapter