Twilight Sparkle is being corrupted in mind and spirit by the Shadow, a dark magical force from ancient times. Now Princess Celestia is in a race against time to find the key to saving her student and her friends from the seduction of the Shadow.
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Hey, this chapter has the same number of words as the last one.
oh dear, i'm actually kinda worried about pinkie....
I'm not gonna try to tell you how to write the story, but I hope you realize most people are hoping for a "bad" ending.
2486743 Holy crap. I totally didn't realize that. Awesome.
2486849 keep in mind this -is- only part 2, so I certainly can't have everything end all hunky dory, or what would part 3 be about? ;)
I wonder whats gonna happen.... I wish I could time travel
But still, PINKIE PIE IS THERE
(I hope she wont get hurt)
Pinkie, you are just so ADORABLE!
I sort of imagine Pinkie as being soft like a plushie, so giving her a hug would probably be the equivelant of rubbing a million puppy bellies.
Twi, you are getting really, REALLY weird fetishes. I don't think I can support you if you're going to be this amoral.
I hate to say it, but Molestia would be proud of you. She officially approves.
My my... I finished the first part of the trilogy yesterday and now got to this chapter after a pretty much straight "sit down and do nothing but read" effort. I am in total love with this story and the way it's going. It's a bit saucy but it's not outright clopping going on everywhere. I adore the original characters and the Shadowbolts. Much cooler than the Blunderbolts by the way. No offense to any likers of them.
As Maurice pointed out, most people and myself included are possibly hoping for a 'bad' end. But like you pointed out to Maurice, this is only part 2 of 3. This part is probably going to contain a vast amount of capturing and 'corrupting/transforming' the rest of the mane six. I can see that Applejack would be a problem but at the same point I'm none too sure. Each element has so much with Twilight, both the fact that she is their leader and that for the most part she was there for all of them. So I sense a successful capture of all of them at some point, maybe a bit of fight from Fluttershy and Applejack. Pinkie Pie is going to be an easy target and Rarity is going to fall fast, in my honest opinion. I do wonder though if Twilight would want a turn with all of them first and then let the rest of the Shadowbolts have their way. I do see that there is a lot of partner swapping and that's pretty interesting. Good old shipping.
Now I could have left a review on your first one, but since this is still in progress I figured it could use another review to make people more interested it in. I would like to talk mainly about the whole Shadow thing. So many people consider shadows and darkness to be evil and in some cultures it is the automatic sign of evil itself. But darkness and shadows are just a lack of light and nothing more. That is one part of this story, that there should be nothing to fear from the Shadow as long as it doesn't overtake everything, like it sadly seems to be doing. The whole lust and sex and such is quite clever, since such acts are of course again in my opinion seen as things to be done in darkness and stuff that should be hidden away in the shadows of the mind, not something that should ever be hauled out into the light, lest you be seen as sick and a pervert by others. We have shut away this side of ourselves because to the prudes it is 'unnatural' and/or 'unclean'. Maybe I'm being a bit unfair, but this is just my opinion. The Shadow wishes to openly embrace all these things and does not shy itself away from speaking of them. It is quite awesome really. But onto the evil part. Like I said, this Shadow seems to be all about consuming everything, according to what has been written so far. Maybe I am perceiving it wrong, but whatever.
I am also quite captured by the proper writing. It's wordy, but not word heavy. It's not too complicated but it is well written in such a way that one could sit down and start reading one chapter and then an hour or so later they've reached the most recent chapter because they've been absorbed by the writing and the story. You do this really well and the same was present in the first part.
Well this review has gone on longer than I planned, so I'll stop here and say that I look forward to more awesome Twilight Shadow and the original Shadowbolts. Silent Moon is awesome. But I wonder what is going on between her and Shadow Dancer... whatever the case, Silent Moon is best Shadowbolt. Wish someone would make some fanart of her, since I can't draw worth a flying feather.
Is it bad that I'm rooting for Twilight to control all her friends than go total badass on the other nations of the world.
2487246 - Kinky Twilight would like to inform you that she'll meet you upstairs.
2488014 Wow Absolutely floored by all the kind words here.
As a note on the Shadow - I don't really see it as being 'evil' - It, like all living things seeks to survive. It does this by spreading itself among as many creatures as it can. The fact that it changes, corrupts, etc. the things it touches is simply a side effect. As we haven't actually met "The Shadow" itself in person yet (And that's not coming till part 3 anyway) We really don't know what its ultimate moral goals are.
But you'll find out. So keep reading! So glad to have you with us, hope you'll be moved to comment more! I'm glad you enjoy this, and hope you go give my other fic, Code's Apprentice a read.
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Oh yes, and for your great review, A MOUSTACHE FOR YOU SIR.
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Upstairs you say? good *slowly, and carefully sneaks into room*
I've been hiding in your shadow ever since you arrived.
Wait... what?! It doesn't matter, you fell for my trap! Dubstep Blast !
Now I'll use BASS CANNON to send you back to... umm... WHEREVER YOU CAME FROM!
...
*sigh* Don't worry Twi Twi, It'll Be Ok.
... She's right behind me, isn't she?
maybe...
NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
Well, guess who's back!
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My take on the "corruption" is this. *warning, long winded explanation initiating*
Someone's morals guide how they act, so if you stripped those away, that entity (I say "entity" because I didn't want to be exclusive to any one species) wouldn't care about what was right or wrong anymore.
So in effect, if she did get a hold of me, no matter how wrong I thought it was, after the first "corruption" it would start to be enjoyable.
It's really creepy to think about, but that's the truth, and I'm not afraid to say it.
Kinky Twi? I laughed Maniacally at that. Apparently my friends think I'm crazy, and that I'm slowly getting crazier, so that really fit my personality. Also I somehow convinced someone to put an OC of mine into a story, and it didn't work out as well as I hoped. His name was Atar (I'll give you three guesses as to why) I didn't make up the name, but I did have an impact on the story. (for better or worse) Anyway I don't know where I was going with this, but I really like your fic. I have a weird obsession with stories that have Twi go evil.
You watch a show with little pony girls in it, that makes everything weird.
Oh yeah, this is him. (Atar, and the hateful side of my mind are pretty much the same thing)
Well at least they don't use MY last name as a synonym for failure.
Shut up! They don't need to know that.
This is the definition of
Terry.ter·ry
/ˈterē/
Noun
A fabric with raised uncut loops of thread covering both surfaces, used esp. for towels.
Synonyms
terrycloth
So your name means fabric? That's probably worse than what I said.
Oops.
If you'll notice, his coherency lessens as he rambles on.
2488838 You are now my favorite commenter ever. I've got more to say, but right now I'm on a writing roll - so I'll say it later!
Looks like this chapter's comments are deep stuff. And awesome stuff. *Lapis-Lazuli has officially levels up!* *Lapis-Lazuli got a new Skill: Have A Review!*
Alright, I just need to put that out of my mind, I love doing something like games thing.
Anyhow... This is another good chapter. I can't wait to see what Luna and Celestia will do!
and hoping the Shadow wins even until the third part...And is it possible that Pinkie will be the next to be corrupted?! Hopefully that'll happen. And hopefully that the guards that are following Pinkie get corrupted too...I'm such a bad person, yes?2488495 *gasps* In person?!??! Well you just ensured that I'll be around to read part three.
Pinkie level excitement aside, I'm glad to have been able to type such an honest and big review. Now, moral goal of the Shadow. Instant jump with my tired mind would be revenge on Celestia for all the crimes that she has ignored and such. But thinking it through, I do realize it's not going to be a super simple revenge ruling. The Shadow has a form, is a person. Pony, person, interchangeable words. It isn't on the King Sombra, sealed away for a thousand plus years and isn't able to speak sort of level, in my opinion. I would love to pitch some ideas but sometimes it is just better to hush and wait. It is intelligent though. It has reason and such. But that makes me think more.
I understand if you can't say, spoilers and all. But is the Shadow person form and the Shadow that exists within Twilight and the rest of the Touched a different sort of being? I have this inkling like the Shadow person form is just that, while the Shadow inside all of the Touched is just a manifestation of its power. Could be over thinking things of course.
Oh boy... making another long review, completely by accident. Oh well. Even after six hours in the frozen food case, it seems my mind can still work fine. I'll give a look at that story you mentioned at a later time, most likely after I've had a nap. I hope it's as good as this and the first one.
and thank you for the lovely moustache.
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*GASP* That was... *Clicks Follow* Not many people... Say that.
Great, now you got him into his "super obsessed" fan mode level.
Don't encourage him, that's not a great idea. If you value your sanity, you'll stop complimenting him
Somebody isn't saying nice things about me. All you do is sneer, like you're the evil king of the world or something.
But I AM the evil king of the world.
No, that would be Twi Twi.
[color=orqnge]She's the evil Queen of the world. There isn't a King yet.
You sicken me. Are you really doing this again?
What, do you have a problem with that?
No, but Darkstar probably will.
I forgot about her... that could complicate things.
You forgot about me already?! I am going to enjoy eating your soul.
Augh! *Teleports*
I'll get you Atar! *teleports*
I'm finally alone...
dang, boredom is probably worse.
We have been unable to decide witch is the more amusing...
this chapter
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So far looking really good! Man, I reeeeeaaaaaally want to see Twilight become all super powerful and evil
hi
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It happens to her all the time. Like, its not even funny how often it happens to her. Especially in the Twilight Enigma.
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i read the alicorn mysteries and i wish twi stayed evil at the end and was not cleansed
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Maybe put that in spoiler tags? That's extremely spoilery, & bad form to leave it visible to all.