• Published 10th Apr 2013
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Last Words of Evening Storm - Evening Storm



The last words of a pegasus pony

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Last words and the will

To whomever this may concern,


You are probably my fiance. You are most likely reading this in front of me at this moment. If you are not my fiance then this is not your fault. If you are my fiance... you are the only one to blame besides me for these actions. I hope this realization breaks your heart and you never "love" again. Do to what you did... the carving... you drove me to near insanity. You forced my hoof to this action. You are the reason I am where I am and I am not sorry for my decision to do this. I expect you to deny most of this letter but it will haunt you for the rest of your miserable life. I hope to see you with me here so I can show you the same pain you showed me. I will never forgive you for the pain you caused. There is nothing you can do to make it right. I hope you rot in a cell for this, then you can rot with me.

If you are not my fiance then I am sorry that you must grieve for me when i don't even deserve it. You are all incredibly kind and I am glad you were there to keep me going for as long as you did. I could never repay you. However, I do not regret it. This was the only course I could follow. I sometimes thought what another chance would be like but I realized it would only end in more pain. Pain has been my entire life.

I lost my father the day I was born. My mother and sister burned. My fiance did things to me that left me screaming at night. It all lead me here and now I pay the price for my actions. It pains me to think of what this must be doing to you right now. I am truly sorry for doing it to you. I wish things could have been different butt alas I have made my bed and now I sleep in it.

Please do not grieve for me, but if you must please make it quick.

This note also doubles as my will

I give the house and all the utensils I own inside to my closest friend, you. I give my money to several things.I give one- third to you. May you use it better than I did. One- third I want to go towards a charity that combats depression. Finally, I want the last third to go to the Clinic for the Mentally Ill. May they find peace in a world that ruined me. The last thing I want is a town-wide restraining order against my fiance. I hope this comes to pass.

I beg the police find these notes I leave before she does. She will hide these letters then burn them when she can. I hope my final words survive long enough to see her dead.

These are my last words and so I must go. I hope I can see you again someday.

Forever, Evening Storm

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Comments ( 25 )

:fluttercry: Oh no even the title makes me sad.

Bro..... your scaring me. :twilightoops:

2406655
*tackles you*
I got him! Don't do it!

2406655 Nothing.... it's just that this story is pretty much a suicide note. :applejackconfused:

2406671 that is what it's supposed to be.

2406691 you just worry me. Sorry.:twilightsheepish:

2406704 dude. Calm down. I'm fine

Hmn, interesting. I am left questioning what this 'carving' could be however.

this is good, but depressing.... :fluttercry: it has a strong sentiment to it

Hmmmm. Decently written, but seeing at how this is a letter hand written by the character I can't really judge any grammatical errors and certain spelling mistakes.

However, I believe that the Fiance was physically cutting and harming Evening.

Despite wanting to pick at this thing for being even a letter, I really cannot due to what you mentioned. For a suicide note, it seems a pretty decent one considering the fact I have written them myself. I do like the mystery of it all, especially what the marefriend did to Evening Storm. Overall, intriguing concept that is delivered well enough to be readable. One thing I might suggest is a continuation of sorts and see how the marefriend of Evening falls as well or something, just an idea. :twilightsmile:

2407055 actually i like that idea:pinkiehappy:

sad yes, but it didn't exactly seem to spike the interest. slow beginning and a quick ending, that is what i seemed to have noticed first. if you can find a way to reverse roles the story would be quite enjoyable.

Dude...that was so sad omg:raritycry::fluttercry::applecry:

5617498 yeah. i wrote while i was in a dark place. Hope you liked it

5617508
I did like it. Very descriptive. Made me feel like I was the one reading the letter:fluttercry:

5617517 that was exactly what i was aiming for

5617518
Well I think you hit it spot on:pinkiesmile:

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