A second-person telling of Ivan's day-to-day life in his ragtag relationship with Rainbow. Ragtag, because what they have is far from ideal. But that's what makes it enjoyable, right?
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Sorry for the long wait! It's extra long to make up for lost time.
great chapter! keep up the good work
Sweet chapter, my good man. Ivan is about to learn how committed Twilight can really be.
2213727 Dun dun DUN.
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*Looks over shouder*
The wait was worth it!
Considering how bureaucracy works, if he filled out the paper work now and sent it in, it would be about 2 months before they might even review it. The other option is to just wait an astounding 60 days, which will go by rather fast.
Wow I was not expecting this much awesome from this story I thought it was going to be another run of the mill HiE ship fic but this chapter blew all that thinking out the window. Keep up the awesome work
LETTERS FROM THE EDITOR! *loud fanfare plays abruptly*
ok, so a disclaimer here before i post this, at this time i actually have exactly as mu... ok, only slightly more knowledge about the future of this fic than any of you, save sneaky of course. the following comments are mine and mine alone, and after re-reading it a dozen times or so i am sure this is spoiler free regarding this story.
also while i'm at it i'll explain something real quick, now i don't capitalize letters, or always use proper grammar or punctuation in comments. this is because i KNOW how to do those things, and i love to piss all over grammar-nazi's parades. just fyi
2218920 i'll admit to having a slight influence on that... all i really suggested was naming "you" as i got tired pretty quickly of so many 2nd person fics having "she says your name" guh.... anyhow glad you appreciate this work, even if my contribution is rather small, some other suggestions of mine though have shaped the future of this fic, and i excitedly await my next bit of editorial work. 'dis gon' be gud!
2217463 yeah... this is bureaucracy run by twilight sparckle. got a funny feeling she's kinda like hermes from futurama, master "in" pile sorted out and done with one 2 mintue musical number, at least that's my personal head-canon for princess twilight's administration, sneaky's may differ. also waiting 60 days? you really don't know our lavender librarian very well do you?
EDIT; [powertrip/off]
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I thought I called him Anonymous, and you said I should give him a real name. I thought that was what the name thing was about...
2227910 come to think of it, i'm pretty sure you're right, but i guess "anonomous" sounded a little too much like "she says your name" to me... anyhow the "you" character having a name was what was actually important to me at the time i guess. kinda the same thing really, but kinda slightly not...
Ivan... word of advice here... It's Pinkie Pie, DON'T question it!
26?! hes 17 and shes 26? YOU good sir/ma'am have good taste in an original idea :D i read tons of HiE fics and not once did i read something like this xD its gunna be a long 2 months not to mention my first HiE fic to where twi is an alicorn princess :D this is really good so far hmm i also like the physical trait of ivan being blind in one eye most fics have the person completely blind instead so this is pretty fresh :3
Never knew Rainbow was into shota.
Just to be the contrarian, and late to the party at that, I have to point out the ridiculousness of Equestria having chosen the same arbitrary age of consent limit as many Countries here, while also having the same irrational attitudes about it. Of course, it works great as a way to convey a plot point which you can use to your benefit, it just truly grinds my gears whenever I see it in a fic.
Why you ask? Partially because it's a dreadfully American way of thought. 18 is ok, but 17 years and 11 months makes you a pedo. It doesn't make any sense in this world, and certainly wouldn't make sense in Equestria. Any other arguments are purely conjecture of course, and as open to interpretation as anything else involving pony 'facts', though I do tend to lean towards using the differences in equine mating habits, the 'era' of civilization they find themselves in and their apparent social ideals.
Besides that, pretty decent story. Looking forward to the rest of it.
This really isn't my cup of tea, despite HiE being one of my favorite genres. I can't really tell what it is that I dislike about it either, I just read this and don't feel compelled to continue is probably what I would say.
the only problem I have so far is it I can't tell what's your POV. you have a named character, Ivan yet you always use "you" for example "You hate daisies." its usually a good idea to stick to one POV.
really its not enough of a reason for me to stop reading so I'm not gonna I just felt like bringing it up so I can ask why you've formated it like this.
Once again, Wow... I really think it's yer foundation. Immigrating? You mean humans can come to equestria at will now? You left me with more bewildering questions. the whole "only 17" thing strikes me as a red herring. What made the Ponys make the magic 18 as adult? The ponys also seem WAY out of character, You just FORGAVE her? That didn't sound a lot like RBD.
Not really getting the point with keeping their relationship a secret. I wont question the age thing but a relationship would still be legal, would it not?
Basically no sex for 2 months but everything else is alright in during that period of time, right?
Just saying Its legal for a 16 year old to be in a relationship with anyone, but a none-sexual one. It's only when they are 18 its legal. And how would the ponies know the legal age for humans? He is the only one there, and unless he told them, they don't know jack. And I'm just guessing, Fluttershy took the tools, seeing as she's apparently a thief who can't help herself. And why isn't Twilight in Ponyville? And can't Applejack tell if someone is lying? And Pinkie can keep a secret, have you not watched the show? Where Spike tells Twi and Pinkie he has a crush on Rarity.
Also humans CANT eat flowers, or have you forgot? And if I remember right, dandelions are poisonous to humans. Thats if they are stupid enough to eat them.
*sigh* critics. Anyway I'm loving it so far.
Friends hold hands/hooves! They do that both metaphorically and physically!
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You mean a kleptomaniac?
I'm not going back to jail, do you understand
SLAP