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2122998 The main characters name is Isaac, I didn't want people to think it was a cross over.
Poison joke coming up!
Oh my this is nice
Uhmm? So which is it? Humanized, or anthro?
Please don't tell me that patch of plants was poison joke
UUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhhhhhh.......hmm.
Actually this chapter wasn't that bad. Still reading. And now I'm waiting for improvement. You might just earn my like if you keep everyone from banging the dude. Also characters remain out of character. Also this is incredibly cliche just like some way older fics.
but yea if you're wondering why I'm so iffy about liking you should watch the show again and realize Rainbow and basically everyone you're writing about is already out of character. I also feel you're avoiding fluttershy but whatever. Rarity seems fine though. I just hope you don't make him the 'perfect man' character...actually that's your only problem and that's actually the reason why I hate this so much but read anyway.
I want the plot but right now...I'm getting the beginning of a terrible porno. AND A REALLY BAD PORNO AT THAT!
hmmmmmmmmmmmmm................................................ pretty good
Poision jock o crap he is fucked
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Yeah, you don't really see that many Isaacs in fimfiction, unless it has to do with DS or someone picking a less common name. Haven't seen a single Isaac in my whole state. And I'm worried about those plants... I CALL PURPOSEFUL AVOIDANCE OF DETAIL!
When dealing with poison joke... use a wood chipper...
2123060 Because Dead Space is the only game who's main character's name is Isaac. *cough*GoldenSun*cough*
i add to favorites and it updates lol
Any reason why his name is Steve at one point? Kinda popped out for me on that one.
“Ugh, you have an over active iagination Dash.”
Forget something here?
Amazing, loved it
good plot and detail, the way you intergrated anthro-thiny worked well
good ways in dropping hints for future relationships
would love to read more
Elixir
Steve shook free from the mare’s iron grip
Steve then noticed that she had a tattoo of three bright blue gems on her shoulder.
i have been wondering why it is that at some points you call him Steve
Also I felt the way you portrayed the mane six with diferent attitudes and personalitys worked well.
would like to see Fluttershy more and the whole fic not turning into a massive orgy
Elixir
2123322 Ultimate face hoof.
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Patch of plants? I feel a joke coming on.
but wait since he isnt a pony, he doesnt know his special talent so what would the (i think there are) poison jokes do to him?
2123356 Steve was the original name I was going to use, but then I changed to Isaac. The coming chapters shouldn't have that mistake in them.
2123359 Relax that won't happen. Isaac will have to make a choice!
"Three blue petal"? Uh oh
Poison Joke inbound
hmmmm, there's something I wanted to say... but what was it?...........
Oh! I remember!
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Can't wait for that poison joke
Why do I get the feeling that Isaac will be having a harem in his new life?
2123530 THERE WILL BE NO ORGY! HE WILLL HAVE TO MAKE A CHOICE! Steve was the name I was originaly going to use before I changed it to Isaac.
Well, the pacing have gotten slightly better, but it's still really rushed and not really enjoyable to read.
Anyway, that aside; how are things going, isaac? Oh, gonna start working at Sweet Apple Acres, eh? That's good! You'll love Big Mac; he's a really nic-
Why do people insist on making Big Mac a brutish dickhead who makes brash decisions? Isaac's a human with very similar features to anthronized ponies. There's no reason for Macintosh to act that way!
Whatever. Apparently we get to know in this chapter why Issac is a fighting specialist. So let's hear it:
Hm... That actually make sense. Practicing from the age of ten would make everyone a fighting expert for sure! I actually think it was a nice touch to Isaac's charact-
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Right. Eleven years of practicing MMA and he's average - average. The only rational explanation for that is that 58% of the time slacking. That or he spent most of his time training sleeping on a bench somewhere with a broken wrist or something.
But anyway, how's Isaac's adapting to Ponyville going?
You know, isn't there a difference between not trusting someone and not being... a dick? The mane six's behaviour could easily be referred to as xenophobia. I mean, Christ in a hand basket, when I said "Make him deserve their trust!" I didn't imply that he should suffer through threats and racial insults. A few hardships here and there is entertaining, sure, but it will just be even better storywise to show Isaac winning their trust in a few chapters. Oh, what's that? He has pretty much won them over by the end of the chapter?
....
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No! No! No!! NO!!! That's NOT how- oh, fuck it. It's too late...
Anyway...
Why are you sad?? You didn't do anything! What, does Isaac use his demi-Stu powers to make you feel guilt about things that aren't your fault?
Ugh...
Final thoughts:
The pacing actually got worse near the ending. I actually find it really ironic that this chapter has the most words, but has arguably the least going on inside of it. For example, the walk back and forth between Zecora's hut could make room for loads of stuff, e.g. Isaac getting lost, him reflecting on something that concerns or bothers him (which at this point is very little from the looks of it), sharing a talk with Zecora, etc. Hell, this even was an excellent opportunity for Rainbow, Rarity, AJ and Twilight to have a (meaningful and enlightening, not horribly rushed) conversation about Isaac.
And I highly doubt they would just stand idly at the entrance of the Everfree Forest (the EVERFREE FOREST) while someone who's a complete stranger to Equestria is walking through there, with no knowledge about it whatsoever! Why are they so inconsiderate?! Take the part where Isaac trips and falls as an example: he could either have hit head on a rock, effectively giving him a concussion, or he could have twisted his ankle or, because of the impact on landing, fallen down a pitfall.
But no. For comedic effect, we go with the Poison Joke option. It's petty obvious it's that. If not then that whole thing about Isaac walking to Zecora's hut would have been entirely pointless, so I figure it was for something.
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AKA "the obligatory first post"
2123206 http://privatex007.deviantart.com/art/Anthro-Types-and-Adoptable-305193748
The author said its about 20% out of 80% in this image
Sorta shying away from the story, he's becoming another Gary Stu...
Oh goody, poison joke, this quite a opportunity, because he is human and there for doesn't have magic, wings or the factions of an earth pony it could react different, but…if you are talking possible options:
1) Make that he grow 5 times his sizes, and look like a giant (in contrast to what happen with AJ)
2) Make his eyes shine like 2 lamps
3) Make him extremely fast but don't have control and slam on everything even if he just wants to walk
4) Put him big and heavy bulls horns
5) Make him only able to communicated throw whistles
Just a suggestion
Ok just letting you know that on one part of this chapter you called him Steve. But hey this story is getting good, keep it up I can't wait to see what happens when he wakes up after touching the poison joke plant. I admit there were a lot of good comedy bits in this I like it.
Why it keeps telling me that there is a chapter that I don't read yet?!
I read them all
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So the one where tey still have human faces, and are basically Star Trek aliens? That sucks. Human faces on anthros are just weired.
Would have been better if it was 70% pony, and 30% human, or at least 50/50. Oh well.
2123977 Oh just wait, You aint seen nothing yet!
2123918 I already know what will happen to him. Good suggestions though.
Ah fighting one of the few things I'm good at, I'm 6'4 and I'm a black belt in Tae Kwon Do, karate and Jiu Jitsu. I don't know fighting runs in my family.
2123982 Yeah I agreed, but it is what it is
2124160 The situation seemed to call for it plus that song is AWESOME!
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Yup.
Though still, the author should look for a picture that isn't so misleading.
Good...good
The poison joke is gonna make him a pon, uh?
Review Time:(a bit ticked you didn't respond to my last review)
I am intrigued on how you characterized Applejack(even with the parts when she was a bitch)
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I ran by the name Steve earlier(it seems you missed some still)
Issac saving AJ's life(Like a Boss)
I am curious as to the effects of Poison Joke on a human.*end of review*
A nice looong chapter filled with plenty of comedy, and implied shipping. There were some spelling errors in this one(watch out for those). besides that good job.
Here have a sexy anthro Applejack pic for a job well done.
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Favorited liked and followed please post chapter 4 soon! I always enjoy a good HiE story no matter how in original it may seem :P
Btw are these ponies or humans with tails? Please say ponies cause in confused with this anthro stuff are they ponies like from the series or what?
And the ponies have cell phones? plz tell me these are ponies
2125047 I think they are advanced in technology from the story's perspective.