• Member Since 13th Jan, 2013
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brony_sketch


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There is a new pony in Ponyville. Rainbow Dash is the first to befriend this new pony. But this pony turns out to be a completely different pony, claiming that Rainbow Dash was part of an ancient bloodline that used to rule Equestria with hate.
Don't be turned down by the first few chapters. those were first written on my phone. I got weary copying it down word for word, and there were a few mess ups that I fixed. I'm telling you though, it gets better.

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 8 )

"Ok... fine... it is just so... uncoo."

I think you want "uncouth"

There was some illegible muttering

I think you want unintelligible.

Pretty good story so far. Some missing commas here and there and a couple walls of text but overall good. Keep it up.

Dear syvvak,
I am sorry about that. I am new to writing. I will try my best to improve. Thank you.

She is a Basslar name Balthazar. This story is pretty good. Keep it up.

It's weird, when Rainbow and Vinyl first meet R.D says that they'll be the best of friends when they know nothing about eachother. Still love the story though :rainbowkiss:

1975067 I was trying to make RD seem stubborn. :P worked for my story and yeah.

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